Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Giảm tiếng ấp úng (uh, umm), tránh lặp từ, và hoàn thiện cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng; (2) Nối các ý bằng liên từ thích hợp (for example, because, and); (3) Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn (ví dụ loại cảnh bạn thích chụp hoặc nền tảng bạn dùng). Hạn chế độ dài dưới 5 câu và đảm bảo mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. I often capture landscapes and city skylines because they help me remember special moments. I also share my best pictures on Instagram to get feedback from friends. For example, I recently photographed a sunset over the lake and received many positive comments.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ngắt quãng, bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để câu trôi chảy. Cụ thể: (1) Nói rõ lý do vì sao thích nông thôn (ví dụ: không khí trong lành, cảnh quan), (2) Dùng ví dụ minh họa ngắn (một địa điểm hoặc hoạt động), (3) Giữ tối đa 4 câu, mạch lạc và tự nhiên.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because I love being in nature. The mountains and rivers there make me feel relaxed and refreshed. For instance, I enjoy hiking in the countryside where the fresh air and quiet help me unwind. This contrast with busy city scenes is why I choose rural areas.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Tránh ngập ngừng và sửa ngữ pháp, nói rõ quan điểm và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I like both/neither), (2) Giải thích lý do cho từng lựa chọn với một ví dụ ngắn (một địa điểm trong nước và một nước khác bạn muốn thăm), (3) Kết luận ngắn gọn nếu cần. Giữ dưới 5 câu.

Ejemplo: I like views both in my country and abroad. At home there are many places I still want to explore, such as the northern mountains. I also want to see scenery in other countries, like the coastal cliffs in Scotland. So it really depends on the destination and the time I have.

× I love capturing, uh, beautiful scenery whenever I travel because taking photos help me remember special moments and places.

✓ I love capturing beautiful scenery whenever I travel because taking photos helps me remember special moments and places.

The verb 'help' must agree with the singular gerund subject 'taking photos' which is treated as singular here; therefore use 'helps'. Use of '-ing' (capturing, taking) is correct; remove filler commas and extra words for clarity.

× Umm, and I really enjoy sharing my pictures on social media with my friends and and I'll photo and photography is.

✓ I really enjoy sharing my pictures on social media with my friends and also like photography.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repetition and incomplete clause 'I'll photo and photography is'. This is a sentence structure error. Combine ideas into one clear sentence and remove repeated 'and'. Use 'also like photography' to express enjoyment of photography.

× Personally, I prefer the view in rural areas.

✓ Personally, I prefer the views in rural areas.

'View' in the plural fits 'rural areas' in general; use plural 'views' to match the plural context. This is a singular-plural mismatch.

× I love nature, beautiful like mountains, river and views uh and rural areas.

✓ I love nature, including beautiful mountains, rivers and rural views.

The original mixes adjective order and lacks correct nouns pluralization. Use 'including' to introduce examples and plural 'rivers'. Reorder words for natural English: 'beautiful mountains, rivers and rural views'.

× It makes me feel refreshed and umm. I really enjoy uh, uh fresh air in rural areas.

✓ It makes me feel refreshed, and I really enjoy the fresh air in rural areas.

Original has sentence fragments and filler sounds. Combine into one sentence, remove repeated fillers, and include the article 'the' before 'fresh air'.

× Uh, I like both because in my country has many places I uh, have uh, I haven't explore yet.

✓ I like both because my country has many places I haven't explored yet.

Original omits the subject 'my country' before 'has' and uses incorrect verb form 'explore' instead of past participle 'explored' after 'haven't'. Also remove redundant fillers.

× Beside I umm, wants to explore umm, the scenery of uh, other country.

✓ Besides, I want to explore the scenery of other countries.

Use 'want' not 'wants' because the subject 'I' requires base form. 'Besides' is the correct connector. Use plural 'countries' or 'another country' and remove fillers. 'Explore' is correct infinitive after 'want'.

× Yes umm, I think it depends on the at the time.

✓ Yes, I think it depends on the time.

Original contains redundant 'the at the time' which is ungrammatical. Use 'depends on the time' or 'depends on the situation'. Remove filler 'umm' and correct article usage.