Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + short reason), avoid fillers (Oh, umm), fix tense and articles, and provide one specific supporting detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Not really. I don't take many photos because I often forget my phone and prefer to enjoy scenes directly. For example, when I travel I focus on observing people and moments rather than stopping to take pictures, so I rarely carry my camera.

Sugerencia: Clarify the preference and correct contradictions. Use precise vocabulary (views, not videos), correct grammar (singular/plural, articles), and a logical structure: state preference, give 1–2 specific reasons, and conclude. Avoid repeating 'urban area' and filler sounds.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because the landscapes are more breathtaking and the air is cleaner. Since I live in a city and see urban scenes every day, rural scenery offers a refreshing change. For instance, I enjoy walking in the countryside to see wide fields and quiet rivers.

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Use a clear topic sentence (I prefer views in other countries) then give a specific reason and an example. Remove disfluencies and repeated phrases, and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make it coherent.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new sights and cultural variety. For example, seeing ancient temples or different cityscapes is exciting and breaks the routine of my daily life, so I often plan trips abroad to experience these views.

× To be honest, I'm not a big fan of photography. Oh usually I will just forget to take photo when I'm somewhere. I'll just leave my phone around while because I enjoy looking it at a person more.

✓ To be honest, I'm not a big fan of photography. I usually just forget to take photos when I'm somewhere. I just leave my phone around because I enjoy looking at the scene/people more.

The original contains sentence structure problems and mixed fragments. 'Oh usually I will just forget to take photo when I'm somewhere.' has article and plural errors plus unnecessary future 'will' for habitual action (should use present simple) and needs plural 'photos'. 'I'll just leave my phone around while because I enjoy looking it at a person more.' is ungrammatical: extra 'while', wrong word order 'looking it at a person', and unclear reference. Correct by using present simple for habits, plural noun 'photos', remove filler 'while', place 'at' after 'looking', and clarify object as 'the scene' or 'people'. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions, use plural for countable nouns when generalizing, remove unnecessary fillers, and place prepositions correctly (look at something).

× I would prefer videos in the rural area UMM because the views in rural area are more breathtaking and the air are cleaner.

✓ I would prefer views in rural areas because the views there are more breathtaking and the air is cleaner.

'Videos' is the wrong word; context requires 'views' (noun meaning scenery). 'Rural area' should be plural or preceded by an article; 'in rural areas' is natural when speaking generally. 'The air are cleaner' has a subject-verb agreement error; 'air' is uncountable and takes singular verb 'is'. Also avoid repeating 'views' awkwardly; 'there' can replace repetition. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary (view vs video), use plural/general forms for areas, and ensure subject-verb agreement with uncountable nouns (air + is).

× I live in the urban area or city so I guess I see this urban area view UMM every day in my life already.

✓ I live in an urban area or city, so I guess I see urban views every day already.

The sentence is wordy and redundant: 'the urban area or city' and 'this urban area view UMM' are awkward. Use 'an urban area' and plural 'views' for general experience. Remove filler 'in my life' and 'UMM'. Also add a comma before 'so'. Suggestions: simplify phrases, remove fillers, use articles correctly ('an urban area'), and use plural when speaking generally about repeated experiences.

× So for a change of scenery, I would prefer to go to urban areas.

✓ So for a change of scenery, I would prefer to go to rural areas.

This sentence contradicts earlier statement that the student prefers rural views; likely intended contrast is to go to rural areas for a change of scenery. If the student meant urban, the logic is inconsistent. The structure itself is okay, but content likely error. Suggestion: ensure consistency in content; use accurate noun (rural areas) to match previous preference.

× Honestly, I'm someone who enjoy travelling so I definitely enjoy the view of other countries.

✓ Honestly, I'm someone who enjoys travelling, so I definitely enjoy the views in other countries.

Relative clause needs third person singular verb: 'someone who enjoys' rather than 'enjoy'. Also 'the view of other countries' is awkward; use 'the views in other countries' or 'the scenery of other countries'. Suggestions: ensure verb agrees with the relative pronoun subject, and choose natural collocations ('views in other countries').

× Uh, this is because it's something that I can, it's something different that I can see and umm, out of the ordinary of what my day-to-day in life is.

✓ This is because it's something different that I can see and it's out of the ordinary compared to my day-to-day life.

The original is fragmented and repetitive: 'it's something that I can, it's something different that I can see' repeats and breaks off. 'Out of the ordinary of what my day-to-day in life is' is ungrammatical. Fix by combining ideas smoothly, use 'out of the ordinary compared to my day-to-day life'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use clear comparative phrases ('compared to'), and keep clauses complete.