Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce filler words and make sentences clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “scenery,” “capture memories,” “post on social media”). Keep it to no more than five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I travel. For example, I like to capture mountain landscapes or city skylines to preserve memories. I often edit and post my best shots on social media so friends and family can see them.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct answer then explain with a specific reason and example. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” to connect ideas, and correct basic grammar (e.g., “Mount Fuji in Japan,” “my family and I often go to the countryside”).

Ejemplo: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and more scenic. For example, my family and I often visit the countryside, such as Mount Fuji in Japan, where we enjoy photographing natural landscapes.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give a concise reason with one specific example. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use cohesive devices like “because” and “for example,” and correct collocations (e.g., “Hong Kong is very crowded/stressful,” “travel with my family”).

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I find traveling abroad more relaxing and varied. For instance, I enjoy visiting different countries with my family to photograph unique landmarks and landscapes that we don’t have at home.

× Yes, I like umm snapping photos of different scenery, especially during the travel on.

✓ Yes, I like snapping photos of different scenery, especially while traveling.

The phrase 'during the travel on' is ungrammatical. Use 'while' + present participle to indicate simultaneous action: 'while traveling'. Also 'traveling' uses -ing form correctly after 'while' and 'snapping' is correct after 'like'. Remove filler words like 'umm'.

× I hope to take the picture in order to memory down the different views or even moments.

✓ I hope to take pictures to remember the different views and moments.

The phrase 'in order to memory down' is incorrect. The verb 'remember' is needed, not 'memory' (a noun), and 'down' is unnecessary. Use 'to remember' plus plural 'pictures' to match general habit. 'Take pictures to remember' is clear and grammatically correct.

× And we post this photo on my social media.

✓ And I post these photos on my social media.

Pronoun agreement is wrong: 'we' conflicts with 'my social media'. If the speaker is referring to their own account, use 'I' and plural 'photos' to match earlier plural references. Also 'this photo' vs 'these photos' should match context.

× I I prefer the rural areas because I think umm especially in the travelling umm my family and I often go to some countryside like the Fuji Mountain and the Japan are.

✓ I prefer rural areas because when we travel, my family and I often go to the countryside, for example to Mount Fuji in Japan.

The original sentence has repetition, filler words, and incorrect phrase order ('the Fuji Mountain and the Japan are'). Use 'when we travel' to introduce frequency, 'the countryside' (no 'some'), and the correct name 'Mount Fuji in Japan'. Remove fillers and correct word order.

× I prefer the views in other countries since I think or maybe in Hong Kong it is already really stress and I hope to visit another country and take photo and maybe I can go with go different, go with my families in different countries and.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because Hong Kong is already very stressful, and I want to visit other countries and take photos, maybe with my family.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'it is already really stress' should be 'it is already very stressful' (adjective form). 'I hope to visit another country and take photo' should be 'I want to visit other countries and take photos'. Remove redundant phrases 'go with go different' and use 'with my family'. Ensure consistent present tense for habitual preference.