Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (e.g., “umm”) and fix key errors (plural/singular, article use, word choice). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas logically.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes. As a chef, I often photograph my dishes when the presentation looks attractive because I use those images for future menu ideas and social media.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific reasons. Correct vocabulary and pronunciation mistakes (e.g., “vibes”, “rural areas”, “sound of birds” or “roaring seas” depending on meaning). Use one linking phrase (for example, “because” or “for example”) and avoid trailing off.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because the peaceful atmosphere helps me relax. For example, I enjoy listening to birdsong and watching open fields, which calm me after a busy week.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, chronological topic sentence and specific supporting details. Correct tense and article errors (“used to”, “since I moved”, “the familiar streets”, “local mountains and rocky parks”). Use a linking word such as “but” or “however” to contrast preferences and be concise (max 3–4 sentences).

Ejemplo: I used to prefer views in other countries, but since I moved to Australia I have started to miss the views from my home country. I miss the familiar streets and my local mountains and rocky parks because they remind me of family and childhood.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views, umm especially I like to take a picture of the mirrors because I'm a chef, so the if the presentation is very attractive, I want to take a picture for my future presentation of my meal, my dishes.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. Especially, I like to take pictures of the mirrors because I'm a chef, so if the presentation is very attractive, I want to take pictures for my future presentation of my meals and dishes.

The student used singular 'picture' where plural 'pictures' is needed because they refer to taking more than one photo generally. Also 'meal, my dishes' should be plural and parallel: 'meals and dishes'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking about general or repeated actions (taking pictures, meals, dishes).

× ...especially I like to take a picture of the mirrors because I'm a chef, so the if the presentation is very attractive, I want to take a picture for my future presentation of my meal, my dishes.

✓ ...especially I like to take pictures of mirrors because I'm a chef, so if the presentation is very attractive, I want to take pictures for my future presentations of my meals and dishes.

The phrase 'the mirrors' implies specific mirrors; context suggests mirrors in general, so omit or change the article. Also 'the if' is incorrect; 'if' alone suffices. Use 'future presentations' plural to match repeated events. Suggestion: remove unnecessary definite articles before general nouns and ensure determiners match meaning.

× I want to take a picture for my future presentation of my meal, my dishes.

✓ I want to take pictures for my future presentations of my meals and dishes.

Using 'for' is acceptable but 'of my meal' is awkward; 'of' should link photos to what they show, while 'for' links purpose. Better: 'pictures for my future presentations of my meals and dishes' clarifies both purpose and content. Suggestion: place prepositions so they clearly show purpose and content.

× I prefer views in rural area because the bives make me feel calm and relaxing so comp so I prefer watching the roaring hears and the.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the vibes make me feel calm and relaxed; I prefer watching the roaring rivers and the...

Use plural 'areas' to refer to rural locations in general. 'bives' is a misspelling of 'vibes'. 'Relaxing' should be 'relaxed' to describe the person's feeling. 'roaring hears' likely intended 'roaring rivers' or 'roaring seas'; choose the correct noun. Suggestion: use plural for general locations and correct adjective form to describe feelings (calm and relaxed).

× I prefer views in your own country or in other countries? Student: I used to prefer views in other countries but since when I moved to Australia I missed my own country views because I miss the familiar streets and the my local mountains and rocker parks.

✓ I used to prefer views in other countries, but since I moved to Australia I have missed the views of my own country because I miss the familiar streets and my local mountains and rock parks.

Remove incorrect 'when' after 'since' and use present perfect 'have missed' to link past move to present feeling. 'the my local' has an extra article 'the'; use 'my local mountains and rock parks'. 'rocker parks' seems mistaken for 'rock parks' or 'nature parks'; choose 'rock parks' if intended. Suggestion: use 'since' with a reference point or use 'since I moved' and present perfect for continuing states; avoid double articles before possessive pronouns.