Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and correctness: begin with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary errors, avoid filler words, and limit to up to five coherent sentences. Be specific about what you photograph and why, and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “for example,” “so,” “because”). Replace unclear phrases like “UMM landscape” and “far farming” with correct terms such as “urban and mountain landscapes” or “foreground framing.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines because of their colors and shapes. When I travel, I also take photos of urban and mountain landscapes to share with friends and to practice composition and framing.

Sugerencia: Work on grammar, pronunciation markers in transcript, and coherence. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct article use (“urban areas” not “an urban areas”), remove fillers like “umm,” and explain reasons with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “skyscrapers”) and limit to two to four sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in urban areas because I love city skylines. For example, at night the illuminated skyscrapers look spectacular, and the modern architecture feels exciting and dynamic.

Sugerencia: Make the structure cleaner: open with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific supporting reasons using linking words (“because,” “also,” “and”). Correct small grammar issues (say “my own country” or “Indonesia” and “Indonesia has beautiful nature” or “beautiful natural scenery”). Avoid redundancy like “actually.”

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more connected to Indonesia and its beautiful natural scenery. Also, travelling locally is cheaper and easier, so I can visit more places and take more photographs.

× Yes, I enjoy pictures of different views because it helps me capture and remember special moments.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture and remember special moments.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (verb+ing), so 'enjoy pictures' is incorrect when meaning the action of photographing. Also 'pictures' is plural, so the pronoun referring to it should be 'they' rather than 'it'. Change 'helps' to 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'they'. Suggestion: Use 'enjoy taking pictures' and match verb number to the plural noun: 'they help'.

× I like sunsets or city skylines, for example.

✓ I like sunsets and city skylines, for example.

Using 'or' suggests a choice; when listing examples, 'and' is more natural. This is not a strict grammar rule but an idiomatic wording improvement. Suggestion: Use 'and' to list examples clearly.

× When I travel, I often photograph UMM landscape to share with friends and to practice far farming and composition.

✓ When I travel, I often photograph landscapes to share with friends and to practice framing and composition.

The original sentence contains unclear or incorrect words: 'UMM' seems to be a typo and 'far farming' is incorrect. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' when speaking generally. 'Framing' is the correct term in photography. Fixing these makes the sentence grammatically correct and clear. Suggestion: Use clear, correct nouns and photography terms: 'landscapes' and 'framing'.

× I I prefer an urban areas because I love city skylines.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I love city skylines.

There is a repeated 'I' which is a typing error. 'An urban areas' is incorrect because 'an' is singular and 'areas' is plural; use either 'an urban area' (singular) or 'urban areas' (no article) for general preference. Here 'urban areas' fits the context. Suggestion: Remove duplicate pronoun and correct article-number agreement.

× I love how modern it looks especially at night where all the lights from the umm city scrapes OK.

✓ I love how modern it looks, especially at night, when all the lights from the city skyscrapers are on.

There are several issues: punctuation is needed around 'especially at night'; 'where' is better replaced by 'when' for time; 'umm' is filler and should be removed; 'city scrapes' is a mispronunciation/typo of 'city skyscrapers'; add 'are' to form the verb phrase 'are on'. Suggestion: Remove fillers, correct nouns, and use proper temporal connector 'when'.

× I prefer in my own country because I'm proud to be Indonesian and Indonesian has a beautiful nature, so I feel more connected and actually it's cheaper to travel locally rather than going to another country.

✓ I prefer my own country because I'm proud to be Indonesian and Indonesia has beautiful nature, so I feel more connected and, actually, it's cheaper to travel locally than to go to another country.

Do not use 'prefer in my own country'; the verb 'prefer' should be followed directly by the object 'my own country' or by 'prefer X to Y'. Use the country name 'Indonesia' rather than the adjective 'Indonesian' as the subject. 'Beautiful nature' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. 'Rather than going to another country' is acceptable, but 'than to go to another country' is clearer and matches 'cheaper to...'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'prefer my own country', use the proper noun 'Indonesia' as subject, and choose consistent comparative phrasing: 'cheaper to travel locally than to go to another country.'