Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct minor grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a short example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'new places or new countries' -> choose one).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos when I travel because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I visited Kyoto last year I photographed both street scenes and gardens so I could show my family how beautiful the city is.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and cohesion. Begin with a clear direct answer (I prefer urban views), then give two specific reasons with linking words. Remove filler sounds ('uh') and correct verb forms and word order. Make sentences shorter and clearer.

Ejemplo: I prefer urban views because large cities often have impressive modern architecture and many cultural attractions. For instance, on weekends I can visit new museums, rooftop cafes, and renovated waterfronts that offer varied scenes to photograph.

Sugerencia: Clarify your meaning and correct grammar. Start with a direct statement (e.g., I prefer views in my own country) then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague phrases like 'less care' and fix tense/number errors (have -> has, haven't have -> haven't had). Use linking words like 'because' and 'however'.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse landscapes from the northern mountains to southern beaches that I haven't seen yet. For example, I plan to visit the northern highlands next year to photograph traditional villages and dramatic valleys.

× I'm sure when I travel to a new places or new countries, I enjoy taking photographs of people and landscapes.

✓ I'm sure when I travel to new places or new countries, I enjoy taking photographs of people and landscapes.

The noun 'places' is correct but the phrase 'a new places' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'places'. Remove the article 'a' to match the plural noun: 'new places'. Ensure articles agree with singular/plural forms; use 'a new place' for singular or 'new places' for plural.

× It helps me to save the memories and also share them to my loved ones.

✓ It helps me to preserve the memories and also share them with my loved ones.

The verb 'save the memories' is awkward; 'preserve' is more natural. More importantly, the preposition 'to' with 'share' is incorrect here; use 'share something with someone'. Also 'the memories' is acceptable if referring to specific experiences; if general, 'memories' without 'the' may be used.

× I would love the views from urban areas because in a large city, there are many beautiful buildings have been built recently and they also, uh, mainly investment, uh, in the urban form of government.

✓ I would love the views from urban areas because in a large city there are many beautiful buildings that have been built recently, and they also mainly receive investment from the urban government.

The clause 'many beautiful buildings have been built recently' needs a relative pronoun 'that' to connect it to 'buildings' (sentence structure). More critically, 'they also, uh, mainly investment, uh, in the urban form of government' has missing verbs and incorrect phrasing. 'They also mainly receive investment from the urban government' supplies the missing verb 'receive' and uses correct word order. The original lacked third-person agreement and proper verb forms.

× So, uh, in every weekend we have many places to visit.

✓ So, on every weekend we have many places to visit.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'every weekend' (or better 'every weekend' without 'on'). The original 'in every weekend' is incorrect preposition choice. Also option: 'On weekends we have many places to visit.' which is more natural.

× Oh, I would love the less care for my countries.

✓ Oh, I would love the landscapes of my country.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect pronouns and words: 'the less care for my countries' is ungrammatical. It seems the speaker means they love the scenery; 'landscapes of my country' or 'I care a lot about my country' would be appropriate. Also 'countries' should be singular 'country' if referring to own nation.

× Uh, my country have different uh, views from the north to the South and I haven't have a chance to visit them.

✓ Uh, my country has different views from the north to the south, and I haven't had a chance to visit them.

Subject-verb agreement: 'my country' is singular and requires 'has' not 'have' (this could also be classed under subject-verb agreement ID 27). Additionally, 'I haven't have' is incorrect; the correct present perfect is 'I haven't had'. 'South' should be lowercase unless a proper noun context. 'Them' refers to 'views' (plural) which is acceptable.

× Also, I would love to visit them uh, before I get.

✓ Also, I would love to visit them before I go.

The phrase 'before I get' is incomplete and unclear; it lacks an object and uses the wrong verb for the intended meaning. 'Before I go' or 'before I get the chance' are clearer options. Use a complete verb phrase to match the context.