Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 자연스럽고 명확한 대답을 위해 불필요한 반복과 주저(uh, oh 등)를 줄이고 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요. 질문에는 직접적인 주제 문장을 먼저 말하고, 이어서 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적이고 관련된 세부사항(언제 시작했는지, 어떤 장면을 주로 찍는지 등)을 연결어(with/and/because 등)를 사용해 덧붙이세요. 발음과 문장 형태(과거시, 현재완료 등)에 주의하고, 문장 수는 최대 5문장으로 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I started when I was a child because my father gave me a small yellow camera, which I used everywhere. Nowadays I mainly photograph landscapes and cityscapes to capture interesting light and colors. I enjoy experimenting with angles and composition to make ordinary scenes look special.

Sugerencia: 의미 전달이 명확하도록 단어 선택과 문장 구조를 고쳐야 합니다. 예를 들어 'urban areas is such a full of things that noisy' 같은 구문 오류를 피하고, 이유를 말할 때는 because 뒤에 완전한 절을 넣어야 합니다. 또한 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 적절히 사용해 논리적 흐름을 만들고, 구체적인 비교(예: traffic, noise, scenery)를 제시하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural areas much more than urban ones. Rural places are quieter and have less traffic noise, which makes them better for photographing nature. Also, the scenery is usually more varied with fields, hills and trees, so I can find more peaceful compositions.

Sugerencia: 의사를 명확히 표현하려면 우유부단한 표현(uh, oh, yeah)과 중복(not not 등)을 제거하세요. 'both'라고 말한 뒤에는 어느 쪽을 더 선호하는지 분명히 밝히고 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 비교할 때는 도시의 예시를 들며 자신의 나라의 특징(조용한 풍경, 자연 등)을 구체적으로 기술하세요.

Ejemplo: I like views both at home and abroad, but I prefer the scenery in my own country. My hometown has quiet landscapes and charming rural areas, unlike large cities such as Seoul or New York. Because of that peaceful atmosphere, I often choose to photograph local scenes rather than busy urban ones.

× I love taking pictures Uh, when I was young, my father gave me some small yellow camera.

✓ I loved taking pictures. When I was young, my father gave me a small yellow camera.

'Love' in a past context should be changed to 'loved' to match 'when I was young' (past tense). Also split run-on sentence into two. Use the article 'a' before 'small yellow camera' because it is a singular, countable noun. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct articles.

× That is such a cute things I got I got that and I take took a picture everywhere.

✓ That was such a cute thing I got, and I took pictures everywhere.

'Things' should be singular 'thing' because it refers to one camera. 'Is' should match past context 'was.' 'Take took' is redundant; use past simple 'took.' 'A picture everywhere' is unnatural—use plural 'pictures everywhere.' Suggestion: ensure singular/plural agreement and avoid redundant verbs.

× Oh yes, it totally everywhere. Oh, so.

✓ Oh yes, I took them everywhere.

Original is fragmentary and missing a verb. Add subject and verb to form a complete sentence. 'Totally everywhere' is colloquial and unclear; using 'I took them everywhere' clarifies meaning.

× Yes, 100% rural areas, uh, because urban areas is such a full of things that noisy, but blue areas has some something that nature thinks or so quietly has all quite quiet place too.

✓ Yes, 100% rural areas, because urban areas are so full of noisy things, but rural areas have peaceful natural scenery and are quite quiet.

Subject-verb agreement: 'urban areas' is plural so use 'are' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 also applies, but per instructions only list one type). 'Is such a full of things that noisy' is incorrect word order and articles; correct to 'are so full of noisy things.' 'Blue areas' seems to be an error for 'rural areas.' 'Has' should be 'have' to match plural. Rephrase to 'have peaceful natural scenery' and 'are quite quiet.' Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use clear word order.

× So I prepare areas more.

✓ So I prefer rural areas.

'Prepare areas' is incorrect choice of verb. Context indicates preference, so use 'prefer.' 'Prefer' fits present general preference. Suggestion: use correct lexical verb to express preference.

× Oh, actually both, but I love my country bills yeah because, uh, my country is not not like urban like Seoul or something New York City or my city is has such a scenery that quiet and.

✓ Oh, actually both, but I love my country because my country is not like big urban cities such as Seoul or New York; my city has peaceful scenery.

Original contains many errors: 'bills' is irrelevant and removed. Double negative 'not not' corrected. 'Like urban like Seoul' redundant—use 'like big urban cities such as Seoul or New York.' 'My city is has' should be 'my city has.' The phrase 'such a scenery that quiet and' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'has peaceful scenery.' Suggestion: remove extraneous words, correct verb usage, and use clear comparative phrasing.