Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 답변이 자연스럽지만 반복과 망설임이 있습니다. 문장 길이를 적절히 줄이고 핵심을 바로 말한 뒤, 한두 개의 구체적 이유를 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 ‘I enjoy capturing landscapes because...’처럼 토픽 문장으로 시작하고, 연결어(such as, because)를 사용해 이유를 명확히 하세요. 또한 ‘uh’ 같은 말버릇을 줄이고 중복(‘many as many’)을 제거하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos whenever I travel because it helps me remember places and moments. For example, I often photograph cityscapes and sunsets to capture the atmosphere.

Sugerencia: 답변에 일관성 문제와 문법적 오류가 있습니다(‘urban area’ 단수/복수, 주어-동사 일치, 문장이 미완성). 또한 ‘I like nature in general’과 ‘urban areas’가 모순되어 보입니다. 먼저 명확한 주제 문장을 말하고, 이유를 두세 문장으로 구체화하세요. 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 논리를 연결하고 문장을 완결하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and architectural details of cities. For instance, city streets and skylines often offer interesting contrasts and patterns that I like to photograph, so they give me a peaceful focus when I shoot.

Sugerencia: 문장이 미완성되고 표현이 모호합니다(‘I feel very unique’는 의미 불분명). 이유를 구체적으로 설명하고 연결어로 흐름을 자연스럽게 이어가세요. 또한 반복되는 표현(‘in other countries’)을 줄이고, 느끼는 감정을 명확히 표현하세요(예: fascinated, inspired).

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad exposes me to different cultures and landscapes. For example, seeing traditional architecture or unfamiliar natural scenery often inspires me and makes my photos more interesting.

× I like taking pictures in general, so whenever I go travel, uh, I take many as many pictures as I can.

✓ I like taking pictures in general, so whenever I travel I take as many pictures as I can.

The phrase 'go travel' is ungrammatical here; use the verb 'travel' without 'go'. Also 'many as many' is redundant; correct form is 'as many pictures as I can'. Remove filler 'uh' and add a comma or pause: 'whenever I travel, I take as many pictures as I can.' Suggestion: practice verb patterns: use 'travel' (intransitive) not 'go travel', and avoid duplicate quantifiers like 'many as many'.

× I like views in urban area more because I like nature in general.

✓ I prefer urban views more because I like nature in general.

Using 'in urban area' is incorrect; it needs plural or determiner: 'in urban areas' or adjective 'urban views'. Also 'I like views in urban area more' is awkward; 'I prefer urban views more' or 'I like views in urban areas more' is natural. Suggestion: use 'urban areas' for general places or turn 'urban' into an adjective modifying 'views'.

× Uh, taking photos in urban areas give me peaceful mind and I use it as a.

✓ Taking photos in urban areas gives me peace of mind, and I use them for that.

The subject 'taking photos' is singular (a gerund phrase) so the verb should be 'gives' not 'give' (subject-verb agreement). 'Peaceful mind' is unnatural; correct collocation is 'peace of mind'. The phrase 'I use it as a.' is incomplete and unclear; likely intended 'I use them for that' or 'I use photography as a way to relax.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with gerund subjects and use natural collocations like 'peace of mind' and complete the thought.

× I prefer views in other countries because I often travel in other countries and when I see the views in the countries I feel very unique and.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I often travel there, and when I see the views I feel something unique.

Repetition 'in other countries' and 'in the countries' is awkward; use 'there' to avoid redundancy. 'Feel very unique' is incorrect because 'feel unique' describes a personal quality; to express emotion use 'feel something unique' or 'have a unique feeling' or better 'feel very moved' or 'feel unique.' The sentence also ends incomplete; add an object or finish the idea. Suggestion: avoid repetition, choose correct verb 'travel there', and complete the sentence with a clear feeling or reason.