Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one specific reason with a brief example. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") to connect ideas and keep sentences to a maximum of five. Also correct small grammar errors (e.g., "different view" → "different views", "memories" complete).

Ejemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they capture moments I want to remember. For example, I photograph sunsets and cityscapes so I can look back and relive trips and special days.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference or say clearly you like both and then explain briefly. Reduce hesitations and repetition. Use linking words like "however" or "on the other hand" to compare urban and rural views, and provide a specific detail for each. Keep to fewer than five sentences.

Ejemplo: I enjoy both, but I am often drawn to urban views because they show modern architecture and lively streets. On the other hand, rural views appeal to me for their peaceful landscapes and natural colours.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and clearly: say you like both and give a specific contrast with one concise reason for each. Avoid filler words and finish your thought about other countries with a concrete example (e.g., architecture, landscapes, culture). Use linking words such as "for example" and "while" to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I like views in both my country and abroad. For example, in Cambodia I enjoy photographing ancient temples because of their history and intricate carvings, while in other countries I appreciate modern or coastal landscapes for their different colours and atmospheres.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different view, especially, uh, the phenomenon sightseeing that I've, I find I find it very attractive and also I can look at, look back to the old, to the, to the photos as mem, as the memories.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially the scenic phenomena that I find very attractive, and I can look back at the old photos as memories.

The original sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'different view' should be 'different views' (plural) to match 'pictures'. 'the phenomenon sightseeing' is ungrammatical; 'scenic phenomena' fits meaning and uses plural to match 'different views'. Also 'look at, look back to the old, to the, to the photos' is redundant and uses incorrect preposition; use 'look back at the old photos'. Remove repeated fillers and rescue clarity. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches context and choose appropriate collocations (look back at, scenic phenomena).

× It depends, sometimes uh urban areas give you a a vibe of uh, modern city with high rise buildings and also some iconic uh architecture architecture building as well.

✓ It depends. Sometimes urban areas give you a vibe of a modern city with high-rise buildings and some iconic architectural buildings as well.

The phrase had repetition and wrong word forms. 'a a vibe' duplicates 'a'; 'modern city' needs article 'a'; 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as an adjective; 'architecture architecture building' is incorrect repetition and wrong form: use 'architectural buildings' or 'iconic architecture'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use correct adjective forms and hyphenation for compound adjectives, and choose correct noun/adjective pairings (architectural buildings or iconic architecture).

× For the rural areas, umm.

✓ For rural areas, I also enjoy the views.

The original fragment 'For the rural areas, umm.' is an incomplete sentence and uses an unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'rural areas'. This results in sentence structure errors and unclear meaning. Provide a complete sentence and omit 'the' when speaking generally about plural places. Suggestion: complete the thought and use 'rural areas' without 'the' when referring generally to such areas.

× I like both you in my country and other countries.

✓ I like both views in my country and in other countries.

The student used 'you' incorrectly instead of 'both' referring to views; this is a pronoun error causing confusion. Also missing preposition 'in' before 'other countries'. Suggestion: replace incorrect pronoun with the correct noun phrase and include 'in' to indicate location: 'views in my country and in other countries.'

× Well, for example, in my country, uh, there's a lot of, uh, ancient temples, which is the heritage of Cambodia.

✓ Well, for example, in my country there are a lot of ancient temples, which are part of Cambodia's heritage.

There is/there are agreement error: 'there's' contracts 'there is' which is singular, but 'a lot of ancient temples' is plural, so use 'there are'. Also 'which is the heritage of Cambodia' mismatches plural/singular; use 'which are part of Cambodia's heritage' to match plural noun and use natural phrasing. Suggestion: ensure verb number agrees with noun (there is/there are) and match relative pronoun verb number; use possessive form 'Cambodia's heritage' for natural expression.

× And in other country, I like to see, uh, their, their.

✓ And in other countries, I like to see their landmarks and cultural sites.

'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' when contrasted generally, a singular/plural issue. The sentence is also incomplete and repeats 'their'. Provide a complete object like 'landmarks and cultural sites' to clarify meaning. Suggestion: use plural to generalize and complete the object of 'see' for clarity.