Part 1
Examinador
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Candidato
Yes, I enjoy taking a picture of different views. I often travel to many countries and love to capturing a lot of landscapes. So especially like like capturing the sea, mountains and the dramatical skies.
Examinador
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Candidato
No, I like views in rural area much more than like urban areas because I I like, you know, the natures and like the creatures. So there is the.
Examinador
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Candidato
Well, I prefer views in like other countries to those in Japan because I enjoy European architectures and like historic cityscapes. For example, I like the old buildings such as castles in Europe which are.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: より自然で流暢な回答にするために、文法(時制、冠詞、動名詞/不定詞)、語彙の選択、重複表現の削除に注意してください。また、トピック文の後に一つか二つの具体的な詳細(いつ・どこで・どのように写真を撮るか)をつなぎの表現で加えると良いです。例えば “especially” の後に具体的な理由や例を付け加えると説得力が増します。発音上の繰り返し(“like like”)も避けてください。
Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I often travel abroad and take landscape photos, especially of the sea and mountains, because I find dramatic skies create powerful compositions. For example, last year in Scotland I captured a stormy coastal sunset that I still use in my portfolio.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Puntuación: 50.0Sugerencia: まず質問に直接応答する簡潔なトピック文を作り、重複表現や曖昧なフィラー語("you know"、"like")を減らしてください。理由を述べる際には具体例(どんな自然や生き物か、どのように感じるか)を短い文でつなぎ語(for example, because, which)を使って示すと効果的です。文を完結させ、途切れないように練習しましょう。
Ejemplo: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I enjoy open landscapes and wildlife. For example, I like photographing deer and wide fields at sunrise, which feel more peaceful than busy city streets.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Puntuación: 55.0Sugerencia: 回答の冒頭で明確に立場を示し、その後に具体的な理由と少なくとも一つの具体例を完結した文で述べてください。曖昧な表現("like" の多用)や文の途中で止まる癖を直し、'because' の後に理由を完結させる練習をしてください。また、'architecture' の単数/複数や定冠詞の使い方に注意しましょう。
Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I appreciate European architecture and historic cityscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing medieval castles and narrow cobblestone streets in Europe, which offer rich textures and details that are uncommon in Japan.
× I enjoy taking a picture of different views.
✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views.
Use plural 'pictures' because 'taking pictures' is the normal collocation for photographing multiple scenes; also it matches the following plural 'different views'.
× I often travel to many countries and love to capturing a lot of landscapes.
✓ I often travel to many countries and love capturing a lot of landscapes.
After 'love' we use the gerund (verb+ing) without an extra 'to'. Remove 'to' before 'capturing'.
× So especially like like capturing the sea, mountains and the dramatical skies.
✓ So I especially like capturing the sea, mountains, and dramatic skies.
Remove the duplicate 'like', add subject 'I', place 'especially' before the verb for clarity, use 'dramatic' instead of nonstandard 'dramatical', and add commas. 'Dramatic' is the correct adjective form.
× No, I like views in rural area much more than like urban areas because I I like, you know, the natures and like the creatures. So there is the.
✓ No, I like views in rural areas much more than in urban areas because I like nature and creatures.
Use plural 'rural areas' to match contrast with 'urban areas', use 'in' before 'urban areas' for parallel structure, remove duplicate 'I' and filler words. Use 'nature' (uncountable) instead of 'the natures', and remove article before 'creatures'. The trailing 'So there is the.' is incomplete and removed.
× Well, I prefer views in like other countries to those in Japan because I enjoy European architectures and like historic cityscapes.
✓ Well, I prefer views in other countries to those in Japan because I enjoy European architecture and historic cityscapes.
Remove filler 'like'. Use 'architecture' (uncountable) rather than plural 'architectures'. No need for 'like' before 'historic cityscapes'. The sentence should maintain present simple tense for preferences and general enjoyment.
× For example, I like the old buildings such as castles in Europe which are.
✓ For example, I like old buildings such as castles in Europe.
The clause 'which are' is incomplete and should be removed. Also 'the old buildings' can be simplified to 'old buildings' to express general preference. Ensure the sentence is complete and concise.