Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Giảm sử dụng tiếng lấp (uh, umm) và câu lắp để lời nói mạch lạc hơn; rút ngắn câu để không quá dài và lặp ý; cấu trúc câu rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ: loại cảnh yêu thích, thiết bị dùng hoặc cảm xúc cụ thể khi chụp). Ngoài ra, dùng từ vựng phong phú hơn (memories → moments, perspective → outlook, different views → various landscapes) và nối ý bằng liên từ như "because", "so", "for example".

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve special moments. For example, I like capturing sunsets and mountain scenes since they make me feel peaceful and remind me of family trips. I usually use my phone or a small camera to record these scenes.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Sử dụng cấu trúc ngắn gọn, chính xác (ví dụ: "I prefer rural views because...") và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp ("views are in" → "views in"); cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn như cảnh vật, âm thanh, không khí, hoặc hoạt động đi kèm; dùng từ vựng chính xác (e.g., untouched, pristine, tranquil) và nối câu bằng "because", "for example" hoặc "such as" để mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because they feel tranquil and largely untouched. For example, I enjoy scenes of rice paddies and winding streams where I can hear birdsong and breathe fresh air. Such places help me relax and unwind.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp và dùng ngôn ngữ do dự (uh, um); tránh nói mơ hồ và sửa ngữ pháp ("is way more beautiful than" cần đối tượng so sánh). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, đưa ra lý do cụ thể, so sánh ngắn với ví dụ minh họa. Dùng từ vựng mô tả mạnh hơn (stunning, breathtaking, diverse) và kết thúc bằng một câu tổng kết ngắn gọn.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam offers incredibly diverse and stunning landscapes. For instance, the limestone karsts in Ha Long Bay and the terraced fields in Sapa are breathtaking and different from places I've seen abroad. Although I've traveled widely, these scenes always feel more meaningful to me.

× I love taking pictures of different views because, uh, I want to keep those memories, uh, those good memories because, uh, and uh, you know, in, uh, different views, I have a different perspective of this life because it's so beautiful, uh, in every corner.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views because I want to keep those good memories and because different views give me different perspectives on life since every corner is so beautiful.

The sentence overuses filler words and has awkward phrase structure. Use 'give me different perspectives' rather than 'I have a different perspective of this life'. Also combine clauses with 'and' and 'since' for clarity. Remove unnecessary 'uh' and repeated words to make the sentence fluent and grammatically correct. Type ID: 8

× Well, I definitely prefer the views are in rural areas because it's peaceful and everything is still fresh and there's nothing harmed by the hand of the human beings and it's still natural all.

✓ Well, I definitely prefer views in rural areas because they are peaceful, the air is still fresh, nothing has been harmed by human hands, and everything remains natural.

Incorrect prepositional and phrasing choices: use 'prefer views in rural areas' not 'prefer the views are in rural areas'. Use 'the air is fresh' or 'the air is still fresh' instead of 'everything is still fresh'. Use passive perfect 'has been harmed' when indicating past damage. Replace 'the hand of the human beings' with 'human hands' for natural phrasing. Type ID: 11

× I prefer views in my own country because I love my country so much. I've been traveling to uh, many other countries in the world, but still, uh, compared to my country, I don't say, uh, that I'm egoistic, but somehow that the views in Vietnam in my own country is, it's more, it's way beautiful than.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I love it so much. I have traveled to many other countries, but compared to them, the views in Vietnam are much more beautiful.

Pronoun and agreement issues: replace 'I love my country so much' with 'I love it so much' to avoid repetition. Use present perfect 'I have traveled' for experiences. Remove 'that' after 'somehow' and correct subject-verb agreement 'the views in Vietnam are' not 'is'. Use comparative 'much more beautiful' and include the comparison object 'them' (other countries). Type ID: 12}]} PMID:1.0