Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Reduce filler phrases and correct minor grammar (e.g., "after a few months").

Ejemplo: I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially at mountains and beaches. For example, when I visit the seaside, I capture the sunrise to remember the colours and atmosphere; later, looking at these photos always lifts my mood.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid vague endings. Use linking words to contrast (e.g., "whereas"), and give one concrete detail or example. Fix grammar and remove fillers like "like" and repeated phrases.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because they have more natural scenery and peacefulness, whereas urban areas are noisy and crowded. For instance, walking by a river in the countryside relaxes me and provides better photo opportunities than busy city streets.

Sugerencia: Be specific but organized: state preference, give reasons, and name examples succinctly. Avoid repetition and correct small errors (e.g., "jaw-dropping"). Limit to two or three sentences with linking words like "for example" or "such as".

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because the landscapes are stunning and familiar. For example, places like Kalam and Hunza have jaw-dropping mountains and lakes, so I enjoy photographing them and spending time there.

× Yes, I would love to take pictures of different views, especially when I go somewhere such as mountain areas and beaches.

✓ Yes, I would love to take pictures of different views, especially when I go somewhere such as mountainous areas and beaches.

The phrase 'mountain areas' is acceptable but 'mountainous areas' is a more natural adjective form describing areas with mountains. This is an adjective form issue (present participle/adjective usage). Use 'mountainous areas' to modify 'areas' more precisely.

× I love to take pictures and I believe that pictures are a part of your memories and whenever, after few years, months or even days, whenever you open up your gallery and see these pictures, it really lifts up your spirits and makes you feel even more good.

✓ I love to take pictures and I believe that pictures are part of your memories, and whenever, after a few years, months or even days, you open up your gallery and see these pictures, it really lifts up your spirits and makes you feel even better.

Missing article: 'after few years' should be 'after a few years'. Also 'part of your memories' is fine but 'are part of your memories' flows better. 'Makes you feel even more good' is unidiomatic; use 'even better.' These are article and adjective/adverb choice issues.

× I prefer views in rural areas because I believe that it there is more nature and it really lifts up your mood whenever you spend time with nature instead of spending time in urban areas where there is just buildings and cars and like so busy traffic.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I believe that there is more nature and it really lifts up your mood whenever you spend time in nature instead of spending time in urban areas where there are just buildings, cars and very busy traffic.

Pronoun/subject redundancy: 'it there is' is incorrect; remove 'it'. Use 'spend time in nature' rather than 'with nature.' Subject-verb agreement: 'there is just buildings' should be 'there are just buildings.' 'Like so busy traffic' is colloquial and incorrect; use 'very busy traffic.' These fix pronoun, subject-verb agreement and informal phrasing issues.

× But I love taking pictures and views of rural areas because it makes me feel so.

✓ But I love taking pictures of rural areas because they make me feel that way.

The original sentence ends with 'so' which is vague and incomplete. 'Taking pictures and views of rural areas' is awkward: you 'take pictures of views' or 'take pictures in rural areas.' Also 'it makes me feel so' has unclear reference; replace with 'they make me feel that way' referring to rural scenes/pictures. This corrects sentence structure and clarity.

× I prefer views in my own country, especially when it comes to rural areas because I believe that in Pakistan, Warisawat, Kalam, Hunza, these are the areas that are so much jaw-dropping and I would love to take pictures, I would love to spend time over there and it they are amazing.

✓ I prefer views in my own country, especially in rural areas, because I believe that places in Pakistan such as Warisawat, Kalam and Hunza are jaw-dropping, and I would love to take pictures and spend time there because they are amazing.

Awkward article and pronoun use: 'these are the areas that are so much jaw-dropping' is unidiomatic; use 'are jaw-dropping.' 'Spend time over there and it they are amazing' contains extra words 'it' and 'over' and a pronoun error; simplify to 'spend time there because they are amazing.' Also commas and list formatting improved for clarity.

× Like I I have no words to explain the beauty of the urban rural areas of Pakistan.

✓ I have no words to describe the beauty of Pakistan's urban and rural areas.

Repeated 'I' is a filler/typo. 'Explain the beauty of the urban rural areas' is awkward; use 'describe the beauty of Pakistan's urban and rural areas.' This fixes sentence structure, redundancy and word choice.