Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers like 'uh', correct grammar (use 'memorable days', 'for my own knowledge' or 'to remember them'), and give one specific reason and an example. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words (for example, because/so).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach to capture the colours and atmosphere. I also keep these photos to study composition and improve my photography skills.

Sugerencia: Clarify your choice (urban vs rural) — the answer is inconsistent and has factual errors (fields, buffaloes and cows are rural). Choose one and give specific reasons. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and correct grammar (’the air is fresh’, ‘there are many’). Limit to 3–4 clear sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because the countryside has wide fields and fresh air, which feel relaxing. For example, I enjoy photographing rice paddies and grazing cows at sunrise because the light and colours are beautiful. Also, rural scenes give me more peaceful compositions than busy city streets.

Sugerencia: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons. Fix grammar (use 'prefer', 'my country has many beautiful landscapes'). Provide one or two concrete examples (a region or landmark) and link ideas with words like 'because' or 'for example'. Keep it brief and coherent.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best spots and cultural contexts. For example, I like photographing the mountain ranges near my hometown and seaside cliffs, where traditional villages and dramatic light create unique compositions.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because I love to take uh, these pictures over a memorizing days for that and also I would like to take that pictures for my knowledge and because I like the view most.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because I like to take these pictures to remember days and also I would like to take those pictures for my knowledge because I like the views most.

Error type: misuse of verb forms and demonstratives and article/number agreement. 'Love to take uh, these pictures over a memorizing days for that' is ungrammatical. Use 'like to take these pictures to remember days' (verb + to-infinitive or gerund consistency). 'That pictures' should be 'those pictures' (plural demonstrative). Also 'view most' -> 'views most' to match plural. Suggestion: use clear infinitive or gerund structures ('like taking' or 'like to take'), correct demonstratives for plural, and ensure nouns agree in number.

× Well, I mostly love the views of urban areas because the fields are full of greenery and their air.

✓ Well, I mostly love the views of rural areas because the fields are full of greenery and the air is fresh.

Error: wrong reference and pronoun choice. The student said 'urban areas' but then described features of rural areas (fields, greenery). 'Their air' is awkward; use 'the air' or 'the air is fresh'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns refer clearly and use 'the' for general natural features; align the subject (urban/rural) with descriptions.

× Their air are very fresh and healthy scene over there.

✓ The air is very fresh and healthy there.

Error: subject-verb agreement and extra noun. 'Air' is singular so use 'is' not 'are'. 'Healthy scene' is incorrect; use 'healthy' to describe air and avoid 'scene'. Suggestion: simplify to 'The air is very fresh and healthy there.'

× Because in the urban areas I can see that there are so many buffaloes and cows and also there are so many places like landscapes and the still life which is very much beautiful.

✓ In rural areas I can see many buffaloes and cows, and there are many beautiful landscapes and still-life scenes.

Error: sentence structure, incorrect place references and article use. The student mixed urban/rural and used 'places like landscapes and the still life which is very much beautiful' which is awkward. Use parallel structure: 'many buffaloes and cows' and 'many beautiful landscapes and still-life scenes.' Replace 'the still life' with 'still-life scenes' and avoid 'very much beautiful' -> 'very beautiful' or just 'beautiful.'

× Well, I mostly prefers to views in my own country because in my own country there are lots of things that I can go over there and because in my country I can also see that there are so many places which have so many beautiful landscape.

✓ Well, I mostly prefer views in my own country because there are many places I can visit, and my country has many beautiful landscapes.

Errors: verb form and noun agreement. 'Mostly prefers' is incorrect because subject 'I' takes base form 'prefer.' 'Prefer to views' should be 'prefer views' or 'prefer to view.' 'Lots of things that I can go over there' is ungrammatical; use 'places I can visit.' 'Beautiful landscape' should be plural 'beautiful landscapes.' Suggestion: use correct verb forms for 'I' (prefer), simplify phrasing ('places I can visit'), and match noun number.