Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Remove repetition, start with a clear topic sentence and add one brief specific example. Use linking phrase to connect reason and example. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundant words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views, especially scenic landscapes and heritage sites. For example, I often visit old temples and historic villages to capture architectural details and local rituals, which help convey the atmosphere of the place.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference (or balance) and then use a linking word (however/whereas) to contrast with a concise supporting detail. Keep sentences tight and specific to avoid vagueness.

Ejemplo: I appreciate both urban and rural views because they offer different kinds of beauty. For instance, urban areas have lively streets and colorful street art, whereas rural areas offer quiet fields and fresh air that help me relax.

Sugerencia: Avoid repeating words and state your contrast more smoothly. Use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example of a local site and one reason for wanting to travel abroad. Remove duplicate words and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because sites like Ha Long Bay reflect my cultural heritage and personal history. However, I also want to travel abroad to see different ecosystems and learn new cultural landscapes, which would broaden my perspective.

× I really I really enjoy taking photographs, especially scenic landscapes and traditional heritage sites from my country.

✓ I really enjoy taking photographs, especially scenic landscapes and traditional heritage sites from my country.

The sentence contains an accidental repetition of 'I really'. This is not a grammatical rule listed but is a word-choice/redundancy error best classified under incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs because it affects fluency. Remove the duplicate to produce a grammatically correct and natural sentence: 'I really enjoy...'. Make sure to read aloud or proofread to catch repeated words.

× I think both do because they each have their own unique beauty.

✓ I think both do because each has its own unique beauty.

The original mixes plural and singular reference awkwardly: 'they each have their own' is grammatical but 'both do' followed by 'they each' is redundant and slightly awkward. The correction 'each has its own unique beauty' matches the singular 'each' and avoids clumsy phrasing. Ensure subject and pronoun agreement and choose a consistent form ('each' + singular verb) for clarity.

× I love my views in my own country because Vietnam has many UNESCO World Heritage sites such as Halong Bay, and I feel strong cultural connection to these landscapes.

✓ I love the views in my own country because Vietnam has many UNESCO World Heritage sites such as Ha Long Bay, and I feel a strong cultural connection to these landscapes.

Two issues: article use and minor spacing/capitalization in the place name. Replace 'my views' with 'the views' for natural English, add the article 'a' before 'strong cultural connection', and use the conventional spelling 'Ha Long Bay' with a space. These changes improve noun article usage and collocation.

× However, I also want to visit other countries to experience different types of scenery, scenery and broaden my perspective.

✓ However, I also want to visit other countries to experience different types of scenery and broaden my perspective.

The word 'scenery' is repeated unnecessarily. Remove the duplicate to make the sentence concise and grammatical. Proofread to avoid repeated words and ensure logical flow: 'experience different types of scenery and broaden my perspective.'