Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Tránh từ dư thừa và tiếng ỳ (hesitation). Trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc (because, so, for example). Ví dụ sửa lỗi: giảm "umm/like"; dùng thì đúng và danh từ số ít/những từ phù hợp (friends, my photos).

Ejemplo: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes to share with my friends on social media, which makes me feel connected and creative.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Sửa ngữ pháp (I love to take photos), câu chủ đề rõ ràng, loại bỏ lặp từ và kết thúc câu đầy đủ. Bổ sung một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ (because, so) để kết nối ý. Tránh để câu dở dang.

Ejemplo: I prefer taking photos in urban areas because I enjoy capturing lively scenes and architectural details. For instance, crowded streets and colorful markets provide interesting subjects and dynamic backgrounds for my photos.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần trực tiếp vào câu hỏi (own country or other countries). Sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc (I come from a city in the north of Vietnam). Nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao thích chỗ khác (more photo spots, variety), và kết thúc câu hoàn chỉnh. Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: I prefer taking photos in other countries because my hometown in northern Vietnam is quite urban and lacks scenic photo spots. For example, when I travel abroad I can find diverse landscapes and iconic landmarks that are more interesting to photograph.

× Needless to say that I really love it.

✓ Needless to say, I really love it.

Commas and sentence structure: use a comma after 'Needless to say' and no change in pronoun; original lacks comma which makes rhythm awkward. Suggestion: add a comma to separate the discourse marker from the main clause.

× Like because umm, I as other people, I want to show my beautiful pictures online to my friend and show them that I'm having a good life.

✓ Like other people, I want to show my beautiful pictures online to my friends and show them that I'm having a good life.

Redundant and incorrect filler words: 'Like because umm' is informal and ungrammatical; 'I as other people' should be 'Like other people' or 'As other people do'; 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match general reference. Suggestion: remove fillers, use 'Like other people' and pluralize 'friends'.

× So of course.

✓ So, of course, I do.

Fragment: 'So of course.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Suggestion: complete the sentence by adding a verb or attach it to the previous sentence, e.g., 'So, of course, I do.'

× I would say that I love to taking photo in urban areas rather than rural areas, maybe because I'm outgoing person so I love to go to somewhere that is a little bit noisy and.

✓ I would say that I love taking photos in urban areas rather than rural areas, maybe because I'm an outgoing person so I like to go to places that are a little bit noisy.

'Love to taking' is incorrect: after 'love' use the gerund 'taking' or the infinitive 'to take' but not both. 'Photo' should be plural 'photos' when speaking generally. Missing article 'an' before 'outgoing person'. 'Go to somewhere' is ungrammatical; use 'go to places' or 'go somewhere'. The sentence ended with 'and.' which is incomplete; remove trailing 'and' or finish the clause.

× Uh, I come from in by city is more city in the north of Vietnam and it doesn't have a lot of go to places for people to come and take photos and I cannot find for myself too.

✓ Uh, I come from a city in the north of Vietnam and it doesn't have a lot of places for people to go and take photos, and I cannot find any myself either.

Extra preposition 'from in' is incorrect; use 'come from a city' or 'I am from a city'. 'By city is more city' is ungrammatical and removed. 'A lot of go to places' should be 'a lot of places to go' or 'places for people to go'. 'Find for myself too' should be 'find any myself either'. Suggestions: simplify to 'I come from a city in the north of Vietnam' and use natural word order 'places for people to go and take photos'.

× So I like to go somewhere new to.

✓ So I like to go somewhere new too.

'To' at the end is incorrect; correct adverb is 'too' meaning also. Suggestion: use 'too' to express addition.