Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Hãy sửa lỗi phát âm/viết (ví dụ “city city caps” sai và lặp), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng hơn, rút gọn để tránh dài dòng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn (I enjoy photographing different views). (2) Tránh lặp từ và sai chính tả; nói “cityscapes” hoặc “city scenes”. (3) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về kỷ niệm hoặc cách bạn chụp để làm phong phú nội dung. (4) Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng liên từ như “for example” hoặc “because” để liên kết ý.

Ejemplo: I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I often take cityscapes and mountain landscapes while travelling to capture how a place looked and how I felt. I usually shoot at sunrise for softer light and calmer scenes.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp/sai (ví dụ “pride line”, “a calculator”, “Mercedes” không đúng ngữ cảnh). Viết câu chủ đề ngắn gọn: “I prefer urban views.” Sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do rõ ràng, dùng liên từ (because, and, for example). Tránh các mảnh câu; nối các ý bằng cấu trúc hoàn chỉnh. Thực hành thay thế các cụm sai bằng từ đúng như “skyline”, “modern architecture”, “constant activity” và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động hoặc cảnh quan thành phố.

Ejemplo: I prefer urban views because the city skyline and modern architecture feel exciting. For example, I enjoy walking along busy streets at night to see illuminated buildings and street performances, which offer more entertainment and cultural activities than rural areas.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (ví dụ “hire a lot of protecting scenery”, “near cave and terrace view in Sawat”, “distinct characteristic”). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: “I prefer views in my country.” Tiếp theo nêu lý do cụ thể với tên địa điểm đúng và mô tả ngắn gọn (e.g., caves, terraced fields). Dùng liên từ để nối ý và giữ tối đa 3–4 câu. Nếu không chắc tên địa danh, mô tả chung cũng được (e.g., northern terraced fields).

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my country because it has many protected natural sites. For example, the terraced fields and limestone caves near Sapa are very picturesque and unique. I want to spend more time exploring these places to learn about their history and scenery.

× I often photograph landscape and city city caps during trips so I can remember how a place looked and how I felt there.

✓ I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes during trips so I can remember how a place looked and how I felt there.

The nouns 'landscape' and 'cityscape' should be plural when talking about photos of various scenes. Also 'city city caps' appears to be a mistaken repetition and wrong word choice; 'cityscapes' is the correct noun for urban views. Improve by learning common compound nouns like 'cityscape' and using plurals for general, repeated items.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I find a city landscape is extremely exciting.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I find city landscapes extremely exciting.

The phrase 'a city landscape is' is awkward with 'prefer views in urban areas'; use the plural 'city landscapes' to match the general idea. Subject-verb agreement and number consistency require matching plural subject with plural noun. Improve by keeping consistent number when speaking generally (use plural nouns for generalizations).

× The pride line, the modern a calculator and constant activity.

✓ The pride line, the modern architecture and constant activity.

This fragment is ungrammatical and contains wrong word 'calculator' likely intended as 'architecture'. Also 'pride line' is unclear — perhaps 'skyline' fits the context. A complete, clear sentence uses correct nouns and connects them properly. Improve by choosing correct vocabulary ('skyline', 'architecture') and forming a full sentence: 'There is a striking skyline, modern architecture, and constant activity.'

× Mercedes feel vibrant and fuller opportunity for entertainment and culture.

✓ Places feel vibrant and offer fuller opportunities for entertainment and culture.

'Mercedes' is a wrong word here; likely 'places' was intended. 'Feel vibrant' is fine, but 'fuller opportunity' is ungrammatical; use 'fuller opportunities' or 'more opportunities' and 'offer' as the verb. Improve by using correct nouns and plural forms and the verb 'offer' to describe availability.

× Well, personally I prefer views in my country as I find that my country hire a lot of protecting scenery, for example from near cave and terrace view in Sawat which has so many distinct characteristic and I think I should spend more time on discovering it.

✓ Well, personally I prefer views in my country because I find that my country has a lot of protected scenery; for example, nearby caves and the terraced views in Sawat have many distinct characteristics, and I think I should spend more time discovering them.

Multiple tense/usage and grammar problems: 'hire' is wrong verb; use 'has' for possession (present simple). 'Protecting scenery' should be 'protected scenery' (adjective). 'From near cave and terrace view' should be 'nearby caves and the terraced views'. 'Characteristic' should be plural 'characteristics' to match 'many'. Pronoun agreement at the end: 'them' refers to 'views' or 'scenery'. Improve by using correct verbs ('has'), adjective forms ('protected'), plural nouns, and consistent pronouns.