Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct small grammar mistakes, and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., "I really like" twice) and the vague word "amusement."

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take landscape photos because they help me relax and capture interesting colors and textures, such as a sunset over a river.

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and vocabulary, correct odd phrasing ("you can sing... different kinds of green things"), and use linking words to expand briefly. Provide one concrete detail or example to support your preference.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because the natural scenery is more peaceful. For instance, I enjoy walking among fields of grass and trees where the fresh air and quiet make me feel relaxed.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and factual-sounding exaggerations, and give a clear topic sentence followed by a realistic reason. Avoid incorrect statistics and awkward phrasing like "Will must my own must be my own country." Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and one concrete supporting detail.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a wide variety of landscapes. For example, in China I can visit mountains, deserts, and coastal areas without travelling abroad, which makes it easy to explore different scenery.

× Will must my own must be my own country, because you know the China has 95% landscapes around the world.

✓ My own country must be my own country, because, you know, China has 95% of the world's landscapes.

The original sentence shows several pronoun and word-order issues. 'Will must my own must be my own country' is ungrammatical and seems to misuse modal verbs and pronouns; it should simply state 'My own country...' Also 'the China' incorrectly uses the definite article with the country name; most country names (like China) do not take 'the'. '95% landscapes around the world' is missing the preposition and possessive structure; it should be '95% of the world's landscapes' to indicate proportion. Suggestion: keep the subject clear ('My own country'), avoid unnecessary modals, omit 'the' before 'China', and use 'of the world's' to show possession and proportion.

× So I don't need to go to other country to see different views.

✓ So I don't need to go to another country to see different views.

'Other country' is incorrect because 'country' is a countable singular noun and requires an article or determiner. Use 'another country' to refer to any one country other than your own. Alternatively use 'other countries' for plural. Suggestion: use 'another' for singular alternatives and 'other' with a plural noun.

× Just in my country I can see all the views around the world.

✓ Right here in my country I can see many of the world's different views.

The original claim 'I can see all the views around the world' is a factual exaggeration and awkwardly phrased. Grammatically, 'all the views around the world' is unlikely and sounds absolute; a more natural present-tense phrasing is 'I can see many of the world's different views' or 'I can see views from around the world here in my country.' Suggestion: soften absolute claims with 'many' or 'many of' and use 'the world's' to show possession.

× Well, I prefer views in rural areas because the nature is really nice and you can sing, umm, different kinds of green things.

✓ Well, I prefer views in rural areas because the natural scenery is really nice and there are many different kinds of green plants.

'The nature is really nice' is awkward; use 'natural scenery' or 'nature' without 'the' depending on context. 'You can sing, umm, different kinds of green things' is incorrect: 'sing' is the wrong verb and 'green things' is vague. Likely intended meaning is that there are many kinds of green plants or vegetation. Suggestion: use precise nouns ('plants', 'vegetation') and correct verbs ('see', 'enjoy'), and avoid filler words.

× I really like taking pictures and actually I'm not really good at taking photos of people, but I really like different views because they can give me some amusement, I think.

✓ I really like taking pictures. Actually, I'm not very good at taking photos of people, but I really like different views because they give me enjoyment, I think.

Sentence is long and contains awkward phrasing. 'They can give me some amusement' is grammatical but unnatural; 'give me enjoyment' or 'make me happy' is more natural. Also 'I'm not really good' is colloquial; 'not very good' is preferable. Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, use natural collocations ('give me enjoyment', 'make me happy'), and avoid repeating 'really' too often.