Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect tense forms.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do walk quite often. For example, I walk to the office a few days each week and I usually go for longer walks with friends or family at weekends, which I find both relaxing and good exercise.

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and tense consistency: use past simple consistently and combine sentences with linking words. Be specific about activities and timings to make the picture clearer.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walked a lot as a child. I didn't walk to school, but after classes I often played and wandered around the neighborhood with my friends until the evening when our parents called us home.

Sugerencia: Be more direct and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear reason, then add one or two concrete supporting points using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Ejemplo: People enjoy walking in parks primarily because of the peaceful environment. For example, the fresh air, greenery and quiet paths make parks ideal places to relax and escape city noise.

Sugerencia: Correct accidental word choices and be concise. Use conditional form clearly and give a specific location or type of place with a reason. Remove filler words.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance I would go hiking in the mountains or on a long jungle trail because the scenery and fresh air would be very relaxing and adventurous.

Sugerencia: Fix small grammar errors and improve cohesion. Begin with a clear topic sentence (where you went), then give concise, specific details about what you did and why you enjoyed it. Avoid repetition and fillers.

Ejemplo: A couple of months ago I visited Singapore for a short trip. I cycled and walked around the city a lot; although it was busy and urban rather than natural, I loved exploring the streets and parks.

× I can say yes, even though I don't walk every day, but I always walk on some days when I have to go to the office or on the weekends when I go out with friends or family.

✓ I can say yes, even though I don't walk every day; I walk on some days when I have to go to the office or on weekends when I go out with friends or family.

The original sentence overuses 'always' and has awkward tense/meaning. 'Always' conflicts with 'don't walk every day.' Use simple present 'I walk' for habitual actions and remove 'always' to be consistent. Replace 'on the weekends' with 'on weekends' for natural usage. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses clearly.

× I really enjoyed walking actually, because it's part of exercising.

✓ I really enjoy walking, actually, because it's part of my exercise routine.

The speaker describes a general preference, so present simple 'enjoy' is appropriate, not past 'enjoyed.' Also change 'it's part of exercising' to 'part of my exercise routine' for clearer, natural phrasing.

× When I was a child I walked a lot even though I don't.

✓ When I was a child I walked a lot, even though I don't now.

The contrast requires present reference 'I don't now' rather than bare 'I don't.' The main clause correctly uses past 'walked' for a childhood habit; add 'now' to clarify contrast.

× I didn't walk to school, but after school normally I would spend times with my neighbor friends.

✓ I didn't walk to school, but after school I would normally spend time with my neighbor friends.

'Times' is incorrect here; use uncountable 'time' for periods spent. Also move 'normally' to natural position 'would normally.' 'Neighbor friends' is awkward but acceptable; consider 'friends who were my neighbors' for clarity.

× So we walked here and there playing until it's quite late in the day until our parents had to call us back to the house.

✓ So we walked here and there, playing until it was quite late in the day, when our parents had to call us back to the house.

Sequence of tenses requires past 'it was' and 'when' rather than repeating 'until.' Use commas to set off the participial phrase 'playing.' This fixes tense consistency and sentence flow.

× Maybe because of the environment and the surroundings that the park has to offer, the fresh air, the colour of the green, maybe it's why people love to go there, to relax.

✓ Maybe because of the environment and surroundings that the park offers: the fresh air, the green colors; maybe that's why people love to go there to relax.

Avoid redundancy ('environment and surroundings that ... has to offer'); use 'offers.' 'Colour of the green' is ungrammatical; use 'the green colors' or 'the greenery.' Replace 'it's why' with 'that's why' for clarity and natural expression.

× I enjoy working in a park, but if I had to change I would like to again go for hiking or jungle trekking anywhere bigger or higher.

✓ I enjoy walking in a park, but if I had the chance I would like to go hiking or jungle trekking in larger or higher places.

'Enjoy working in a park' is likely wrong; context is walking, so 'walking' fits. 'If I had to change' is incorrect phrasing; 'if I had the chance' matches the examiner's question. Use 'go hiking' not 'go for hiking.' 'Anywhere bigger or higher' is awkward; use 'in larger or higher places.' Maintain conditional 'would' correctly.

× I went to a Singapore a couple of months ago for a quick trip.

✓ I went to Singapore a couple of months ago for a quick trip.

Do not use the article 'a' before country names like 'Singapore.' Use past simple 'went' is correct; remove the extra article.

× I took bicycle around the city, I walked a lot even though it's not really a natural place, umm even though it's a very busy and big city.

✓ I rode a bicycle around the city. I walked a lot even though it's not really a natural place, even though it's a very busy, large city.

Use 'rode a bicycle' or 'bicycled' rather than 'took bicycle.' Split into two sentences for clarity. 'Big' is less formal than 'large.' Maintain present reference to the city's character 'it's' is acceptable when describing general qualities; repetition of 'even though' is redundant—one is sufficient but kept for speaker style.

× But I still enjoyed it.

✓ But I still enjoyed it.

This sentence is acceptable: past tense 'enjoyed' refers to the trip that occurred in the past. No grammatical change required; included here to indicate it's correct.