Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce small grammatical errors and avoid minor redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Correct articles and remove extraneous words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk quite a lot. For example, I usually walk in the park near my house in the evenings because it helps me relax and get fresh air.

Sugerencia: Fix grammar and pronoun errors, use past tense consistently, and be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., because, so) and give one specific example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went out for walks with my friends when I was a child because we didn’t have smartphones, so we usually played in the park and played games like hide-and-seek.

Sugerencia: Remove fillers and improve sentence structure. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore). Correct awkward phrases.

Ejemplo: I think people like walking in parks because they provide a peaceful environment with flowers, trees and sometimes wildlife, so people can escape city noise and relax.

Sugerencia: Use correct verb forms and smoother phrasing. Start with a direct answer, then support it with specific sensory details and a linking phrase.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seaside because I enjoy listening to the ocean waves and the open view makes me feel very relaxed.

Sugerencia: Improve fluency by combining short sentences and correcting article usage. Start with a clear time reference, then give specific details and a brief reaction using linking words.

Ejemplo: Last week I walked in the park near my house because a newly opened market had attracted many people, so the park was lively and I enjoyed walking around and looking at the stalls.

× I like to walk in the park near my house in the evenings. It helps me relax and the I can get some fresh air.

✓ I like to walk in the park near my house in the evenings. It helps me relax and I can get some fresh air.

There is an extra definite article 'the' before 'I' creating an incorrect sentence structure and interrupting flow. Remove 'the' so the coordinating conjunction 'and' correctly joins two clauses: 'It helps me relax' and 'I can get some fresh air.' Use simpler sentence linking to improve clarity.

× Yes, when I was a child I often went out for a walk with my friends because my we didn't have smart phones so we usually played in the park and play the games just like hide and seek.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often went out for walks with my friends because we didn't have smartphones, so we usually played in the park and played games like hide and seek.

Multiple issues: 'my we' is incorrect pronoun use (remove 'my') and 'smart phones' should be one word 'smartphones'. There is inconsistent verb tense: 'play the games' should be past tense 'played games' to match 'we usually played' in past. Also 'for a walk' -> plural 'for walks' fits habitual action. Improve punctuation and word choice for clarity.

× MMM I think that because parks are a good place to relax and there are lots of flowers, plants, trees and maybe animals, it's a good way to far away from the city life.

✓ I think that parks are a good place to relax; there are lots of flowers, plants, trees and even animals, and it's a good way to get away from city life.

The original mixes clauses awkwardly and contains incorrect phrase 'a good way to far away from'. Use 'get away from' for escaping and remove unnecessary filler 'MMM'. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to join related ideas and 'even' instead of 'maybe' for fluency.

× If I had a chance to go for a walk, I would choose to walk along the seaside. I enjoy listen to ocean waves and beside and the view is open. It's really relaxed for me.

✓ If I had the chance to go for a walk, I would choose to walk along the seaside. I enjoy listening to the ocean waves, and the view is open. It helps me relax.

Use 'the chance' not 'a chance' for a specific hypothetical here. 'Enjoy listen' is incorrect verb form; use the gerund 'listening'. 'Beside and the view is open' is ungrammatical; remove 'beside' and rephrase 'the view is open.' 'It's really relaxed for me' uses adjective incorrectly; use 'It helps me relax'.

× I went for a walk in a park near my house there last week. The park was really lively because of newly opened market. Plenty of people showed up. I could go for a walk and look around.

✓ I went for a walk in a park near my house last week. The park was really lively because of a newly opened market. Plenty of people showed up. I was able to walk around and look at the stalls.

Remove redundant 'there'. Use article 'a newly opened market' (article error). 'I could go for a walk and look around' is grammatically possible but 'I was able to walk around and look at the stalls' is clearer and consistent in past tense. Improve specificity and article usage.