Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời đã trả lời trực tiếp và nội dung rõ ràng nhưng còn lặp từ, cấu trúc hơi dài dòng và thiếu liên kết mạch lạc. Nên tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “walking walking”), tách câu lớn thành 2-3 câu ngắn hơn (tối đa 5 câu), dùng từ nối để liên kết ý và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất hoặc thời lượng để phong phú nội dung.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually take a 30-minute walk around my university every evening after classes, which helps me stay fit and clear my mind. It’s also a chance to meet friends and enjoy the fresh air.

Sugerencia: Ý chính rõ nhưng thì sai (nên dùng quá khứ), và có lỗi ngữ pháp/diễn đạt (ví dụ “I prefer” -> “I preferred”; “enjoyed with them” không đúng). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ở quá khứ, giải thích nguyên nhân bằng chi tiết cụ thể, và kết luận ngắn gọn. Hạn chế các cụm từ thừa.

Ejemplo: To be honest, I preferred staying at home when I was a child. I spent most of my time playing with toys and reading books, so I rarely went out for walks. Only on weekends did I sometimes go to the park with my family.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời hiện tại có lỗi lớn về từ vựng và ý không phù hợp (“a lot of cheese” không đúng). Cần sửa ý chính: nhấn mạnh không khí trong lành, không gian yên tĩnh, cây xanh, an toàn. Dùng liên từ để làm rõ lý do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và hoàn thành câu đầy đủ.

Ejemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because of the fresh air and green surroundings, which help them relax and reduce stress. Parks also offer safe, quiet paths and benches where you can rest or meet friends, making them ideal for a peaceful walk.

Sugerencia: Ý trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên, nhưng có thể mạnh hơn bằng cách thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ thời gian, hoạt động trong khi đi bộ, những gì muốn quan sát) và tránh các câu tách quá ngắn. Dùng thì phù hợp (would + động từ), kết hợp từ nối để mạch lạc hơn.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in an old forest for a full morning. I would listen to bird songs, observe different plants and maybe take photos, which would help me relax and completely unwind from city life.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời trả lời trực tiếp nhưng có lỗi thời thì và giới từ (“I'm in my campus” nên là “I was on campus”; “discussed about” -> “discussed”). Nên dùng quá khứ nhất quán, thêm chi tiết về thời gian, nội dung cuộc thảo luận và cảm nhận cụ thể để làm câu phong phú hơn.

Ejemplo: Recently I went for a walk around my university with a few close friends. We walked for about forty minutes and discussed our preparation strategies for the final exam, which was helpful and made the walk enjoyable.

× Yes I do, I really like walking walking.

✓ Yes, I do. I really like walking.

The error is a repeated word 'walking walking'. Remove the duplicate to form a grammatical sentence. Also add a comma after 'Yes' and split into two sentences for clarity.

× Walking is a good way for me to improve my physical health and currently I'm a student and walking around my university is my hobby every evening after my study in school.

✓ Walking is a good way for me to improve my physical health. Currently, I am a student, and walking around my university is my hobby every evening after my classes.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing. Split into two sentences and change 'after my study in school' to 'after my classes' for naturalness and correct noun usage. Add comma after 'Currently' and use 'I am' for formality.

× To be honest, when I was a child I prefer staying at home rather than going outside to go for a walk because I was busy with my toys at home and I enjoyed with them a lot.

✓ To be honest, when I was a child I preferred staying at home rather than going outside for a walk because I was busy with my toys and I enjoyed playing with them a lot.

Tense mismatch: 'was' (past) requires 'preferred' (past), not 'prefer' (present). Also 'go for a walk' redundant with 'going outside to go for a walk' — shorten to 'going outside for a walk'. 'Enjoyed with them' is ungrammatical; correct is 'enjoyed playing with them'.

× Many people like walking in parks because they are a lot of cheese and they can relax and recharge after a long and busy days of walking or studying and.

✓ Many people like walking in parks because there is a lot of fresh air, and they can relax and recharge after long and busy days of walking or studying.

Incorrect phrase 'they are a lot of cheese' is likely a mistaken word; replace with 'there is a lot of fresh air'. Also correct agreement: 'a long and busy days' should be 'long and busy days' (remove 'a'). Remove trailing 'and'.

× If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in a forest because I could enjoy many things related to nature. It will be a great way for me to relax. And unwind.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in a forest because I could enjoy many things related to nature. It would be a great way for me to relax and unwind.

In conditional sentence using 'If I had' with 'would', maintain consistent conditional mood: use 'would' instead of 'will'. Combine 'relax' and 'unwind' into one sentence and use the infinitive 'to relax and unwind' or 'relax and unwind' with 'would be'.

× Recently I went for a walk around my university. I'm in my campus with my close friends and we discussed about our final examination. It was fun together at that time during walking.

✓ Recently I went for a walk around my university. I was on campus with my close friends, and we discussed our final examination. It was fun walking together.

Tense inconsistency: 'Recently I went' (past) requires past continuous or past simple for subsequent actions: change 'I'm in my campus' to 'I was on campus'. 'Discussed about' is incorrect; use 'discussed' without 'about'. 'It was fun together at that time during walking' is awkward; 'It was fun walking together' is natural and grammatical.