Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid tense and grammar errors, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Limit to 2–4 sentences. For example, say why you walk and where.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk daily to reach the metro and take longer walks in local parks because it helps me stay healthy and relaxed.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence about your childhood habit, correct past-tense errors, and avoid irrelevant or repetitive phrases. Use one linking word to add a reason or example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. For example, I would walk to the park after school to play and relax after long days of classes.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a general statement then give specific reasons. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and include two clear reasons.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because the green environment and fresh air help them relax. For example, walking among trees can clear the mind and reduce stress.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct preference, then give specific details and a reason. Correct grammar (conditional and verb forms) and avoid repetition. Use one linking phrase like 'because' or 'so that'.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains because the scenery and small villages offer peace and interesting places to explore.

Sugerencia: Answer in past tense and be specific about the recent trip. Avoid incomplete endings and incorrect nouns (e.g., 'chirping of birds'). Provide one or two clear reasons why you enjoyed walking there.

Ejemplo: Recently I travelled to Himachal Pradesh and went for several walks in the hills. The quiet villages and bird song made the walks peaceful and refreshing.

× Yes, I walk a lot as I wanted to complete my these steps taken in a day, so I will.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because I want to complete my daily step goal, so I do.

The original mixes tenses and uses awkward phrasing. 'Wanted' (past) conflicts with present habit; use present 'want'. 'my these steps taken in a day' is incorrect word order and articles; replace with 'my daily step goal'. 'so I will' is unnecessary and unnatural for habitual action; use 'so I do'. Suggestion: keep present simple for habitual actions and use clear nouns ('daily step goal').

× I walk a lot in parks or maybe for going to work in the metro.

✓ I walk a lot in parks or sometimes when I go to work by metro.

Use 'in parks' is fine, but 'for going to work' is incorrect; use 'when I go to work'. Preposition 'by' is used with transport modes like 'metro'. Also 'maybe' is better as 'sometimes' in this context. Maintain parallel structure for clarity.

× So there are a lot of walking which I have done.

✓ So there are a lot of walks that I have done.

'Walking' (gerund) does not fit with 'a lot of' plus relative clause here. Use the plural noun 'walks' to match 'a lot of' and 'that I have done' for the relative clause. This corrects agreement and noun form.

× Well, yes, when I was a child I used to walk a lot while playing or maybe while going to park for unwinding myself through a hectic day of going to school and then going to tuition.

✓ Well, yes. When I was a child I used to walk a lot while playing or when I went to the park to relax after a hectic day of school and tuition.

The sentence contained awkward infinitive 'while going to park' (missing article) and awkward 'for unwinding myself through'. Use past tense consistently for habits ('used to', 'went') and correct article 'the park'. Replace 'unwinding myself through' with 'to relax after' for idiomatic clarity.

× So yeah, I work a lot as a child.

✓ So yeah, I walked a lot as a child.

The student used present tense 'work' but refers to past time 'as a child'; use past tense 'walked' to match time reference. Also 'work a lot' is incorrect meaning; 'walked a lot' conveys intended meaning.

× Walking was a very normal part of everyone's life.

✓ Walking is a very normal part of most people's lives.

Context is general and ongoing, so present tense 'is' is appropriate. 'Everyone's life' is awkward; 'most people's lives' is more natural. Keep subject-verb agreement and plural 'lives'.

× Everyone used to walk a lot.

✓ Everyone used to walk a lot.

This sentence is acceptable if referring to past habits. No change needed; included for completeness.

× But from my perspective, it helps me to rejuvenate the ideas and unwind from the hustle and bustle and keep uh, makes me more calm and.

✓ But from my perspective, it helps me to rejuvenate my ideas, unwind from the hustle and bustle, and makes me calmer.

Replace vague 'the ideas' with 'my ideas' (correct pronoun). Remove filler 'uh' and adjust verb forms: 'helps me to rejuvenate' and parallel structure 'unwind' and 'makes me calmer'. Use 'calmer' (adjective comparative) instead of 'more calm and' which is incomplete.

× I always like walking around my neighborhood, but if given a chance for a long walk I will be preferring to walk in a mountain region where there are a lot of villages and I can just commute commute to the other village.

✓ I always like walking around my neighborhood, but if I had the chance for a long walk I would prefer to walk in a mountain region with many villages where I could walk between them.

Conditional sentence requires subjunctive/modal 'if I had' and 'would prefer' rather than 'if given... I will be preferring'. 'Will be preferring' is incorrect progressive future for preference. 'Commute commute' is repeated and 'commute to the other village' is unnatural; use 'walk between them' or 'travel between villages'. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formal correctness.

× Recently I travelled to Himachal Pradesh and I prefer a mountainous region with numerous small villages to walk because it helps me to give me a peaceful environment while walking and the chirping of words really helps me to.

✓ Recently I travelled to Himachal Pradesh, and I preferred the mountainous regions with numerous small villages for walking because they gave me a peaceful environment and the chirping of birds really helped me relax.

Mixing tenses and awkward phrasing: 'Recently I travelled' (past) should be matched with past preference 'preferred' and past effects 'gave' and 'helped'. 'Helps me to give me' is redundant; simplify to 'gave me'. 'Chirping of words' is incorrect—use 'chirping of birds'. End sentence with a complete verb 'relax' rather than trailing off.