Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct grammar, and give specific reasons. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition ("a lot of" twice) and incorrect prepositions ("walk with").

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot in my hometown, Kyoto. Kyoto has many historic sites such as Tō-ji and Kiyomizu-dera, so I enjoy walking to see the temples and traditional streets.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use linking words to explain reasons. Correct verb forms and phrasing (e.g., "ride a bicycle," "go anywhere I wanted"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences with clear cause and effect.

Ejemplo: Not really. When I was a child I preferred riding my bicycle because I got tired easily when I walked, so cycling let me go farther and explore new places.

Sugerencia: Give a more developed answer: start with a topic sentence, then provide specific reasons and examples, using linking words (because, for example, so). Avoid fragment sentences and vague phrases like "they want to see something."

Ejemplo: Many people enjoy walking in parks because they offer fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, parents can take children to play, and others can exercise or enjoy the scenery, which helps them relax.

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Use a clear topic sentence and add specific details about where and why, linking ideas with words like "because" or "for example." Correct minor phrasing errors ("the capital city of Japan").

Ejemplo: If I could, I would take a long walk in Tokyo, the capital of Japan, because it blends modern sights like the Tokyo Skytree with lively neighborhoods. For example, I would walk along the Sumida River and explore Asakusa and Akihabara.

Sugerencia: Use correct time expressions ("three days ago") and smoother sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give details (distance, duration, how you felt) using linking words. Use correct adjectives ("excited" → "it was exciting" or "I was excited").

Ejemplo: Three days ago I walked from my house to Kyoto Station, which took about three hours, so it felt like a long walk. I was tired afterward, but I was also excited to see the city along the way.

× Yes, I walk many times in my hometown, Kyoto City.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot in my hometown, Kyoto City.

'Many times' is used for countable discrete occurrences and sounds awkward here; 'a lot' or 'often' is the natural adverbial expression to indicate frequent walking. Use 'I walk a lot' or 'I often walk' to sound natural.

× In Kyoto City, there's a lot of there are a lot of traditional buildings like Toji Temple or Kiyomi Zera Temple.

✓ In Kyoto City, there are a lot of traditional buildings like Toji Temple and Kiyomizudera Temple.

Sentence contained redundancy ('there's a lot of there are a lot of') and an article error. Use one correct construction: 'there are a lot of'. Also use 'and' to list examples rather than 'or', and correct temple name spelling to 'Kiyomizudera'. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural 'buildings' and plural verb 'are'.

× So I want to walk with.

✓ So I want to walk there.

The original is an incomplete sentence; 'walk with' requires an object (a person or thing). Context implies walking in those areas, so 'walk there' or 'walk around' completes the thought. Ensure the sentence has the necessary object or adverbial phrase.

× When I was young I didn't like walking just because when I walked I was tired very much so I liked riding bicycle and go anywhere I like.

✓ When I was young, I didn't like walking because I got very tired when I walked, so I preferred riding a bicycle and going anywhere I liked.

Multiple tense and form issues: use past tense consistently ('didn't like', 'got', 'preferred', 'going', 'liked'). 'Very much' is awkward after 'tired'; use 'got very tired'. Use article 'a' with 'bicycle'. Use gerund 'going' after 'preferred' and keep past tense 'liked'. Add commas for clarity.

× I think that many people like to walk in parks. Because they want to see something. They like.

✓ I think that many people like to walk in parks because they want to see things they enjoy.

Fragmentation and repetition: starting a sentence with 'Because' creates a fragment; combine clauses into one complete sentence. 'See something' is vague and 'They like' is incomplete. Use a clear object 'things they enjoy' or 'the scenery' to complete the thought.

× If I had the chance that I could walk a lot, I would like to take a long walk in Tokyo, the capital city in Japan.

✓ If I had the chance to walk a lot, I would like to take a long walk in Tokyo, the capital city of Japan.

Use the infinitive 'to' after 'had the chance' rather than adding a clause 'that I could'. Also use 'capital city of Japan' as the usual prepositional phrase. Keep conditional structure correct: 'If I had the chance to...' followed by 'I would like...'.

× In three days ago, I walked, uh, my house to Kyoto station.

✓ Three days ago, I walked from my house to Kyoto Station.

When specifying time with 'ago', do not use 'in' before it; use 'Three days ago'. Use the preposition 'from' to show origin ('from my house to Kyoto Station'). Capitalize 'Station' if part of proper noun.

× It takes about 3 hours, so I think it's a long walk.

✓ It took about three hours, so I think it was a long walk.

The context is past ('Three days ago'), so verbs should be in past tense: 'took' and 'was'. Also spell out small numbers in formal writing; maintain tense consistency.

× I was tired, but it was excited.

✓ I was tired, but I was excited.

'Excited' describes a person, so the subject must be 'I' not 'it'. Use 'I was excited' to match the speaker's feeling. Ensure parallel structure: 'I was tired, but I was excited.'