Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful with grammar (subject-verb agreement and plural/singular forms) and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details linked with simple linking words. Improve word choice: use “option” (singular) and say “helps me relax.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. When I need to go somewhere nearby, walking is usually my first option, and in my spare time I enjoy walking while listening to music because it helps me relax.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense consistency (past tense for childhood) and correct count/number expressions. Be more specific and concise: state frequency, who you walked with, and one clear reason. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly and avoid awkward phrases such as “have a contact.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went for walks with my friends or family when I was a child because there were fewer toys and electronic games then, so walking was a simple way to spend time and socialize.

Sugerencia: Correct word choice (“walking” not “working”) and avoid repetition. Give one or two well-linked reasons with specific detail or example. Use linking words for coherence (e.g. “because,” “also,” “for example”).

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks mainly because modern life is stressful, so a walk helps them relax and clear their minds. They also go there for fresh air and light exercise, for example a brisk walk or stretching on the grass.

Sugerencia: Fix vocabulary and clarity (“calm water,” not “clown water”) and use conditional phrasing smoothly. Provide one clear reason and avoid fillers. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk around a lake because the scenery and calm water would be soothing, and the fresh air would help me relax.

Sugerencia: Use correct verbs (went, not worked) and maintain consistent past tense. Correct contradictory phrases (‘fresh air helped me relax’ not ‘stress help me relax’). Keep it concise and give one specific detail about the place or activity.

Ejemplo: I went to a small natural park near my house last week because I had been stressed from work. The fresh air and quiet surroundings helped me relax.

× Yes, I walk a lot because when I want to go to somewhere, walking is my first options and in my spare time I like to walk with some music that makes me really relax.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because when I want to go somewhere, walking is my first option and in my spare time I like to walk with some music that helps me relax.

Errors: 'to somewhere' has extra preposition 'to' (incorrect preposition use -> use 'go somewhere'); 'options' should be singular 'option' because it refers to one preferred choice (quantifier/number issue); 'that makes me really relax' is awkward; use 'helps me relax' (incorrect use of verb form/adverb). Suggestion: remove the extra 'to', change 'options' to 'option', and use 'helps me relax' for natural expression.

× Yes, I often go outside to have a walk with my friends or family when I was a child because there's fewer things to play, so the best way to have a contact with my friend is to have a walk.

✓ Yes, I often went outside for a walk with my friends or family when I was a child because there were fewer things to play with, so the best way to be in contact with my friends was to go for a walk.

Errors: Mixed present and past tense ('I often go' with 'when I was a child') - use past tense 'went' to match time frame (present tense issue). 'have a walk' is awkward; use 'for a walk' (preposition). 'there's fewer things' should be 'there were fewer things' and 'fewer things to play with' requires 'with' (preposition and agreement). 'have a contact with my friend' is incorrect collocation and number: use 'be in contact with my friends' or 'spend time with my friends' (pronoun/quantifier). Suggestions: keep consistent past tense, use correct prepositions, and plural where needed.

× I think mainly people enjoy working in parks because modern life is very stressful, so a walk in the park is a simple way to relax and clean the mind.

✓ I think mainly people enjoy walking in parks because modern life is very stressful, so a walk in the park is a simple way to relax and clear the mind.

Errors: 'enjoy working in parks' is incorrect word choice; should be 'enjoy walking in parks' (verb form/adjective use). 'clean the mind' is unnatural; use 'clear the mind' (idiomatic adjective/verb choice). Suggestion: use correct verb 'walking' and idiomatic phrase 'clear the mind'.

× If I had a chance I would like to walk around the lake because it's very cool and the fresh air and the the clown water makes me really relaxed.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk around the lake because it's very pleasant and the fresh air and the calm water make me feel really relaxed.

Errors: 'a chance' should be 'the chance' for this hypothetical (article error). 'the the clown water' has repetition and 'clown' is wrong word; likely 'calm water' (word choice). Subject-verb agreement: 'fresh air and the calm water makes' should be 'make' because compound subject requires plural verb. 'makes me really relaxed' is awkward; use 'make me feel really relaxed'. Suggestion: correct article, fix word choice to 'calm', ensure plural verb agreement, and use natural phrasing 'feel relaxed'.

× I worked in a small natural place near my house last week because I've I've been really stressed about work. The fresh air and stress help me relax.

✓ I went to a small natural place near my house last week because I had been really stressed about work. The fresh air helped me relax.

Errors: 'I worked in a small natural place' is wrong verb for going to a place; use 'went to' (word choice). Mixed tenses and incorrect present perfect repetition 'I've I've been' — use 'I had been' or 'I've been' depending; here past perfect 'had been' fits 'last week'. Second sentence should be past tense 'helped' to match 'last week'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for movement, fix duplicated text, use consistent past tense.