Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer communicates the main idea but is disorganized, contains grammatical errors and some unfinished thoughts. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense consistency (use present for habits), correct phrasing (e.g., “I used to go” implies past—use “I usually go” or “I go daily”), and avoid trailing fragments.

Ejemplo: I do walk a lot. I usually walk in the park every evening because it helps me stay fit and relieves stress. In addition, I have taken part in several marathons, which shows how committed I am to walking as exercise.

Sugerencia: The response answers the question but is unclear and has many grammatical and vocabulary errors. Use past tense consistently for childhood, give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Replace vague phrases (“highly supervised by earlier”) with precise ones (“closely supervised by my parents”).

Ejemplo: Not really. When I was a child my parents supervised me closely and did not let me go out alone. Because we had enough space at home, I usually exercised and played in our garden instead of going for walks.

Sugerencia: You give reasonable reasons but the answer lacks fluency and precise wording. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, “because”, “also”) and give specific examples (e.g., fresh air, safe paths, social interaction). Correct grammar (e.g., “people who don’t have space at home”) and avoid repeating ideas.

Ejemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because parks offer open space and fresh air for exercise. For example, those who don’t have room at home can use park paths to jog, and seeing others exercise gives encouragement and a sense of community.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains contradictions (“extremely occupied neither in the morning nor in the evening” is unclear). Give one clear preference with reasons and avoid repeating phrases. Use correct prepositions (“take a long walk at/in my garden” or “around my neighbourhood”) and concise supporting details about why that place suits you.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance I would take a long walk in my garden because my work in healthcare keeps me busy, so nearby walks are more practical. I enjoy sitting among the plants and listening to birds, which helps me relax after a long shift.

Sugerencia: This is a clear, well-structured response with relevant details and a personal reaction. Improve accuracy and fluency by correcting phrasing (“environment park” → “environmental park” or “a nearby park”), using past simple consistently, and tightening sentences. Add one linking phrase to show sequence (e.g., “also”, “so”).

Ejemplo: I recently walked in a nearby environmental park about 15 minutes from my house. I bumped into some old friends there, which was a nice surprise, and I wanted to show the park to my children after not visiting for months. It was a wonderful experience.

× I used to go to park daily during my evening time.

✓ I used to go to the park daily in the evenings.

Missing definite article before 'park' and unnatural time expression. 'the park' is required for a specific place; 'in the evenings' is a more natural phrase than 'during my evening time.' Use of 'used to' is correct for past habitual action.

× Walking helps me to stay fit and active but also unwind from my daily stress and I also took part in many marathon.

✓ Walking helps me to stay fit and active and also unwind from my daily stress, and I have also taken part in many marathons.

Plural noun needed: 'many marathons' (marathon -> marathons). Tense consistency: 'Walking helps' is present, so 'I have also taken part' (present perfect) fits past experiences relevant now. Also improve connectors and punctuation.

× Being a sports person I was highly.

✓ Being a sportsperson, I was very active.

Original sentence fragment is incomplete ('highly' needs an adjective). 'Sportsperson' is one word; 'very active' completes the thought. Comma needed after introductory phrase.

× During my childhood, I was highly supervised by earlier and they never allowed me to go out of house because we have enough space, uh, even now to walk around or do any kind of uh, sports activity, uh, as it was more safe during my childhood day, I always do my physical exercise in my.

✓ During my childhood, I was highly supervised by my elders, and they never allowed me to go out of the house because we had enough space, even then, to walk around or do any kind of sports activity. As it was safer during my childhood, I always did my physical exercise at home.

Multiple issues: 'earlier' is incorrect for people who supervised—use 'my elders.' Tense consistency: describe past childhood with past tense 'had' and 'did.' Missing articles: 'the house' and 'my physical exercise at home.' 'More safe' is nonstandard; use 'safer.' Removed filler words and corrected sentence flow.

× People who don't have option at their house, they love to go to the park for their daily exercise to keep themselves fit and healthy and also unwind from the stress.

✓ People who don't have the option at their house love to go to the park for their daily exercise to keep themselves fit and healthy and to unwind from stress.

Article needed: 'the option.' Avoid redundant pronoun 'they' after the relative clause. Parallel infinitives: 'to keep' and 'to unwind.' Remove 'the' before 'stress' unless specific stress is meant.

× Moreover, they get other people with them by seeing them doing exercise.

✓ Moreover, by seeing other people exercising, they join them and get encouragement.

Awkward structure and unclear subject. Reordered to show cause: seeing others exercising encourages them to join. Use 'exercising' for verb + -ing form.

× They also get the encouragement and going to Pak is also.

✓ They also get encouragement, and going to the park is enjoyable as well.

Sentence fragment and incomplete word 'Pak' likely means 'park.' 'Get encouragement' is fine without 'the.' Complete the comparative phrase and make sentence coherent.

× I would love to take long walk in my house only because being in a healthcare profession, I am extremely occupied neither in the morning nor in the evening.

✓ I would love to take a long walk at home, but because I work in healthcare I am extremely occupied both in the morning and in the evening.

Article needed: 'a long walk.' Preposition: use 'at home' instead of 'in my house' for naturalness. 'Neither... nor' was misused; use 'both... and' to indicate occupation at both times. 'Being in a healthcare profession' simplified to 'I work in healthcare.'

× I get enough time to sit in my garden and explore its beauty.

✓ I get enough time to sit in my garden and enjoy its beauty.

'Explore' is odd for enjoying a garden; 'enjoy its beauty' is natural. Preposition 'in my garden' is acceptable but 'in' stays; main change is verb choice for natural meaning.

× I always love to go to walk in my garden only.

✓ I always love to walk in my garden.

'Go to walk' is incorrect; use 'walk' or 'go for a walk.' 'Only' is unnecessary and awkward; remove for clarity.

× I went for a walk in the environment park which is just 15 minute away from my house.

✓ I went for a walk in the Environment Park, which is just 15 minutes away from my house.

Plural 'minutes' needed for duration. Capitalize proper noun 'Environment Park' if it is the park's name. Comma required before defining relative clause 'which is...' if nonrestrictive.

× I also ran into some older friends because after many months I explored this park just because I wanted to show this to my kids.

✓ I also ran into some older friends because, after many months, I visited this park as I wanted to show it to my kids.

'Explored this park' is awkward; 'visited' fits better. Tense and time phrase order improved. Use 'show it to my kids' rather than 'show this to my kids.'

× It was an amazing experience.

✓ It was an amazing experience.

This sentence is correct; no grammatical correction needed.