Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장이 다소 어색하고 불필요한 정보(‘I work a lot’)가 포함되어 있습니다. 주제문을 먼저 제시한 뒤 연결어로 이유를 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 단문을 줄이고 문법(시제·동사)을 정확히 사용하며 문장 수를 3~4문장으로 제한하세요. 예: 주제문 → 이유 → 구체적 예시. 또한 'it makes me relax' 대신 'it helps me relax' 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk regularly, especially after work. I enjoy going to the park because the fresh air and greenery help me relax. For example, I often take a 30‑minute walk in the evenings to clear my mind.

Sugerencia: 문법과 표현 선택에서 오류가 있습니다(예: 'I was walking a lot'보다는 'I used to walk a lot'가 자연스럽습니다). 과거 습관을 나타낼 때 'used to'나 'often'을 활용하고, 중복된 단어나 어색한 표현을 피하세요. 간단한 이유나 구체적 활동을 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to walk a lot when I was a child. I often went to the park with my friends and sometimes walked to school because it was nearby.

Sugerencia: 답변이 단편적이고 문장이 끊겨 흐름이 좋지 않습니다. 주제문을 말한 뒤 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용하여 이유를 정리하세요. 어휘를 더 자연스럽게 연결하고 반복을 피하세요('it makes a calm atmosphere' → 'creates a calm atmosphere').

Ejemplo: I think people like walking in parks because of the trees and fresh air. For example, the greenery creates a calm atmosphere, so walking there helps people relax and forget about stress.

Sugerencia: 문장이 단순 반복되고 어색한 어순이 있습니다('the river nearby my city' 대신 'the river near my city'). 가정 상황을 묻는 질문에는 조건문(If I had the chance...)을 사용해 표현을 자연스럽게 하고, 이유와 구체적 상상을 덧붙이세요.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the river near my city. It’s quite long and peaceful, so walking beside the water would be very relaxing and refreshing.

Sugerencia: 발화에 불필요한 반복과 망설임(‘I it takes it took uh’)이 있습니다. 과거 시제 사용은 좋았으니 문장을 깔끔하게 정리하고 구체적 감상(what was good)을 덧붙이세요. 문장수를 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: Last week I went to a small park near my house. It only takes about five minutes to walk there, so it’s very convenient, and I enjoyed the fresh air and quiet atmosphere.

× Yes, I work a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

The examiner asked about walking habit in general so the student should reply about walking specifically. This is not a grammar error but a relevance/word choice; use 'walk' to answer the question directly.

× It makes me relax and clear my mind, so I like to walk.

✓ It helps me relax and clear my mind, so I like to walk.

The verb phrase 'make someone do' requires base verb without to, but 'make me relax' is less common than 'help me relax'. Use 'help me relax' or 'helps me to relax'. Suggestion: use 'helps me relax' or 'helps me to relax'.

× I was walking a lot and go going outside when I was a child.

✓ I walked a lot and went outside when I was a child.

When referring to habitual actions in the past, use simple past ('walked', 'went'), not past continuous ('was walking') or incorrect forms like 'go going'. Also 'go' must be in past form 'went'.

× Umm, I think that there are. Trees and. Fresh air, it makes a calm atmosphere and it makes people relax.

✓ Umm, I think there are trees and fresh air; they create a calm atmosphere and help people relax.

Fragments 'there are. Trees and. Fresh air' are broken and punctuation is incorrect. Combine into a complete sentence: 'there are trees and fresh air'. Use plural subject 'they' to refer to both and verb 'help' for 'help people relax'.

× I want to take a long walk. The place nearby my city, the river nearby my city. It's a long river, so I want to walk along the side.

✓ I would like to take a long walk near my city, along the river. It's a long river, so I would like to walk along the riverside.

Question asked a hypothetical preference ('Where would you like... if you had the chance?') so use conditional 'would like'. Original had repetition and awkward phrasing 'along the side'—use 'along the riverside' or 'along the river'.

× I went to the small park nearby my house last week. I it takes it took uh, 5 minutes for a walk, so it's really easy to go there.

✓ I went to the small park near my house last week. It took about five minutes to walk there, so it's really easy to get to.

Use simple past 'took' for a completed action. Remove extra words 'I it takes it took uh'. Use 'about five minutes' instead of numeral and 'to walk there' or 'to get there'.

× It's a long river, so I want to walk along the side.

✓ It's a long river, so I would like to walk along the riverbank.

Again, hypothetical preference should use 'would like'. 'Along the side' is awkward—use 'along the riverbank' or 'along the riverside'.