Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 句子語法和時態需修正，內容有重複且略顯冗長。回答要先直接回應（主題句），然後用一兩個簡潔的細節支持。注意連接詞和句子完整性，例如把 fragmented phrases 合併為完整句。可把相近原因合併並簡化表達。

Ejemplo: No, I don't walk much because I have a very busy schedule. I teach a private student, attend university classes and also study for the IELTS, so I rarely have time for walks.

Sugerencia: 時態和動詞形式需一致（過去式）；口語填充詞太多，影響流暢度。回答要更精簡，先給出主題句（Yes, I often...），然後以一兩個具體原因或例子支持，避免重複。最後一句改為更自然的表達。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because my mother encouraged me to exercise. I preferred gentle activities like walking rather than team sports, because walking helped me relax and clear my mind.

Sugerencia: 內容清晰且具體，句型多樣性良好。可再用連接詞稍作銜接使語段更流暢，並注意主謂一致（help → helps）。可把例子縮短，保持回答在最多五句內。

Ejemplo: People often walk in parks because it helps them relax and clear their minds. For example, listening to birds and breathing fresh air is calming, and the greenery and open spaces make people feel refreshed.

Sugerencia: 回答有重複與填充詞，表達可更凝練。使用正確的固定搭配（take a walk / go on a trip / visit Yellowstone National Park），並具體說明為何想去（如景觀、野生動物）。控制在不超過五句內。

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to visit Yellowstone National Park. I want to see the wildlife and famous natural features like the hot springs, because it would be a refreshing change from my daily routine.

Sugerencia: 時態與語法不一致（說最近去散步卻用現在進行的計劃），有許多重複與片段句。應先直接回答（I haven't gone recently / I recently walked in...），然後用一兩句描述具體景象，避免長時間停頓和填充詞。把對比描述更自然地表達。

Ejemplo: Recently I went for a city walk in Xi'an. The contrast between the ancient streets on one side and modern shopping malls on the other is striking, and I enjoyed seeing how the old and new coexist.

× I do not walk much because my busy schedule during the day.

✓ I do not walk much because of my busy schedule during the day.

句子缺少介词“of”来连接原因短语。正确结构为 “because of + 名词短语”。建议记住常见的因果表达：because 后面接完整从句，because of 后面接名词短语。

× I teach a student and I also need to prepare for the IELTS exam.

✓ I teach students and I also need to prepare for the IELTS exam.

原句用单数“a student”而上下文表示泛指上课或教学，复数更自然。根据语境选择单数或复数。若确指某一位学生，可保留单数并添加定语。

× Plus I attend university classes so I usually don't take time to go work, go for walks or hang out or something.

✓ Plus I attend university classes, so I usually don't have time to go to work, go for walks or hang out.

1) “take time” 通常用法是 “have time” 表示有时间；2) “go work” 应改为 “go to work”；3) 去掉句末多余的“or something”以更明确表达。

× I often go outside when I was a child because my mother encouraged me to do exercise.

✓ I often went outside when I was a child because my mother encouraged me to exercise.

句子中时间状语“when I was a child”要求过去时，故“go”应改为过去式“went”。另外“do exercise”通常用“exercise”更自然。

× She pushed me to outdoors.

✓ She pushed me to go outdoors.

动词“push sb.”后跟不定式时需加“to go”，并且“outdoors”前通常不直接接“to”单独使用，正确搭配为“go outdoors”。

× Since I didn't enjoy vigorous sports like football game or basketball game, I prefer gentle activities such as walking.

✓ Since I didn't enjoy vigorous sports like football or basketball, I preferred gentler activities such as walking.

句中有过去时“didn't enjoy”，因此后半句也应使用过去时“preferred”。另外“football game”/“basketball game”在列举运动时通常直接用运动名称“football, basketball”。“gentler” 为比较级，符合“prefer ... to ...” 的对比语意。

× It makes me feel more. Uh, feel more comfortable and uh, it's advisedly clear, clear my mind.

✓ It made me feel more comfortable and clearly helped clear my mind.

原句断裂且用词不当。因为前文为过去叙述，应使用过去式“made”。“advisedly clear” 不合适，改为“clearly helped clear my mind” 更通顺且表达清晰。

× I think walking in a park help people clear their minds and unwind after a busy day.

✓ I think walking in a park helps people clear their minds and unwind after a busy day.

主语“walking”是单数动名词，谓语要用第三人称单数“helps”。

× For example, listening to birds and breathing fresh air can be very calming.

✓ For example, listening to birdsong and breathing fresh air can be very calming.

“listening to birds” 虽可理解，但更自然的表达是“listening to birdsong” 或 “listening to the birds”。这里建议用更地道的短语。此项属介词/搭配微调。

× Also, the trees and the open grasses provide pleasant greenery that makes people feel refreshed and helps reduce stress.

✓ Also, trees and open grass provide pleasant greenery that makes people feel refreshed and helps reduce stress.

“the trees” 与 “the open grasses” 在泛指时通常不加定冠词；“grass” 多用不可数名词形式“grass”而非复数“grasses”。

× I would like to take part in the journey of, uh, Yellowstone National Park if I have the chance.

✓ I would like to visit Yellowstone National Park if I had the chance.

短语“take part in the journey of” 不自然，用“visit” 更合适。条件句与虚拟语气一致，使用“if I had the chance” 更礼貌和正确。

× You know, seeing some wildlife is, is an exciting moment and uh, uh, Yellowstone National Park type famous for its uh, uh, incredible scenery such as Hot Springs.

✓ Seeing wildlife is an exciting experience, and Yellowstone National Park is famous for its incredible scenery, such as its hot springs.

原句重复、断裂且缺少系动词。重组句子，加入“is”并修正“Hot Springs”为小写常用词“hot springs”，并加所有格“its”使表达完整。

× I like to see something differently to my daily life.

✓ I would like to see something different from my daily life.

表达比较/区别时应使用“different from” 而不是“differently to”。此外用虚拟语气 “would like” 与前句一致。

× I'm planning for a city walk in Xi'an.

✓ I'm planning a city walk in Xi'an.

动词“plan” 后通常直接接名词短语，不需要介词“for”。

× Imagine that, uh, the left hand in your, the left side in your hand is an ancient world from Song dynasty and beside the beside you, the right hand is uh, modern commercial shopping mall stand there.

✓ Imagine that on your left is an ancient world from the Song dynasty, and beside you on the right stands a modern commercial shopping mall.

原句语序混乱，定语位置不当，缺少冠词和介词。重构句子以清晰表明左右位置，并在“Song dynasty” 前加定冠词“the”。动词“stand” 用第三人称单数“stands”。

× It's uh. Makes me feel it, makes you feel contrasting, and there's nothing amazing than that.

✓ It makes me feel a contrast; it makes you feel that contrast, and there's nothing more amazing than that.

原句断裂且短语使用不当。需将句子连贯化，使用“a contrast” 或 “that contrast”。此外比较结构应为 “nothing more amazing than”。