Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cevap daha doğal ve akıcı olmalı; gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeleri (uh, umm) azaltılmalı. İlk cümlede doğrudan konuya cevap verin, ardından kısa bir neden ve örnek ekleyin. Maksimum 3-4 cümle kullanın. Örnek: "It depends on my goals; if I want to lose weight I walk daily, but otherwise I rarely walk because I find it tiring."

Ejemplo: It depends on my goals. If I want to lose weight I walk every day for about 30 minutes, but at other times I rarely walk because I usually find it tiring and prefer other forms of exercise.

Sugerencia: Cümle yapıları ve zaman kullanımı düzeltilmeli; gereksiz tekrarlardan kaçının. Doğrudan geçmiş zamanda kısa bir cevap verin, ardından nedenini açıklayın ve bir örnek ekleyin. Kelime seçimini basitleştirin ("lazy" yerine "I was lazy").

Ejemplo: No, I didn't. I was quite lazy as a child and preferred staying in bed or reading books, so I rarely went out for walks with my family.

Sugerencia: Soruya doğrudan genel sebep verin ve mantıklı destekleyici detaylar ekleyin. Dilbilgisi ve kelime sırası düzeltilmeli. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri birbirine bağlayın (e.g., "because", "so").

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because it's peaceful and they can enjoy nature. For example, parks often have playgrounds where children play, which makes the atmosphere lively and pleasant.

Sugerencia: Cevap net değil ve mantıksız ifadeler içeriyor. Koşullu cümlede doğru yapı kullanın ("If I had the chance, I would..."), ve spesifik bir yer belirtin (ör. sahil, dağ yolu). Kısa bir neden ekleyin. Dolgu ifadelerinden kaçının.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seaside because the fresh air and the sound of waves help me relax and enjoy the scenery.

Sugerencia: Geçmiş zamanda net bir yer ve eylem anlatın; karışık ve belirsiz ifadeler yerine açık bir anlatım kullanın. Kısa bir süre veya rota belirtin ve nedenini ekleyin. Örneğin: "Last weekend I walked to the nearby park for 30 minutes."

Ejemplo: Last weekend I walked to the nearby park. I usually take the same route along the river because it's peaceful and only takes about 20 minutes.

× It depends on my mood and my demands because if I want to uh, lose my weights, yes I can walk every day.

✓ It depends on my mood and my needs because if I want to lose weight, I can walk every day.

The phrase 'my demands' is incorrect; 'my needs' is more natural. 'Lose my weights' is wrong: 'weight' is an uncountable noun so use 'lose weight'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Use simple present to state habitual ability ('I can walk every day'). Suggestions: replace 'demands' with 'needs', use 'lose weight', and avoid unnecessary fillers.

× But apart from this, I don't prefer walking because it's exhausting for me.

✓ But apart from that, I don't prefer walking because it is exhausting for me.

'Apart from this' is less natural than 'apart from that' in this context. Contraction 'it's' is acceptable; expanded form 'it is' can be used in formal speech. The sentence correctly uses present tense; only wording improved. Suggestion: say 'apart from that' and keep present tense consistency.

× No, I had an excessive amount laziness, so I just laying in my bed and I don't I didn't prefer to go outside and walking and walking is was come to me so absurd things.

✓ No, I was excessively lazy, so I just lay in my bed and I didn't prefer to go outside; walking seemed so absurd to me.

Multiple past tense errors: 'I had an excessive amount laziness' should be 'I was excessively lazy' (use adjective/adverb). 'I just laying' should be past tense 'I just lay' (simple past of lie is lay). 'I don't I didn't prefer' should be 'I didn't prefer' (remove present tense 'don't'). 'and walking and walking is was come to me so absurd things' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'walking seemed so absurd to me' using past tense 'seemed'. Suggestions: use consistent past tense for childhood habits, use correct verb forms (was, lay, didn't prefer, seemed).

× Actually I don't so much people in the parks walking but if they prefer maybe because of they can see a lot of child and they enjoy them and having a lot of fun.

✓ Actually I don't see many people walking in the parks, but if they do, maybe it is because they can see a lot of children and enjoy them and have a lot of fun.

'I don't so much people' is incorrect quantifier and verb; use 'I don't see many people'. 'a lot of child' should be plural 'children'. 'having a lot of fun' should be 'have a lot of fun' to match present tense. Also 'if they prefer' unclear; changed to 'if they do' meaning 'if they walk'. Suggestions: use 'see many people', plural 'children', and parallel verb forms ('enjoy' and 'have').

× If I have a chance, I would prefer uh, just straight forwards pets.

✓ If I had the chance, I would prefer just to walk straight ahead along the path.

Mixed conditional: 'If I have a chance, I would' mixes present and conditional. For hypothetical use 'If I had the chance, I would...'. 'straight forwards pets' is unintelligible; likely intended 'straight forwards' or 'straight ahead along the path'. Suggestion: use 'had' for hypothetical condition and clarify intended noun (path, route) and infinitive structure 'prefer to walk'.

× Umm, because it's not necessary. The places that I've been in, it's necessary.

✓ Umm, because it is not necessary; the places I have been to are not necessary either.

Contradictory and unclear sentences. 'The places that I've been in, it's necessary' is grammatically wrong: 'places I have been to' is correct preposition use, and 'it's necessary' conflicts with previous clause. I adjusted to coherent meaning: both are unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'places I have been to' and keep logical consistency.

× I can go outside from my house and then I choose a one way from uh to way and then I just walk.

✓ I can go outside from my house and then I choose one route and just walk.

Verb tense is acceptable but wording errors: 'a one way' should be 'one way' or better 'one route'. Remove filler 'uh to way'. Simplify to 'choose one route and just walk'. Suggestion: use 'route' or 'path' and keep present simple for habitual statements.

× So I choose one pet.

✓ So I choose one path.

'Pet' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'path'. This is a vocabulary/preposition/word choice error rather than grammar per se. Suggestion: use 'path' or 'route' when describing where you walk.