Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cấu trúc câu và từ vựng chưa chính xác; cần trả lời trực tiếp, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (work → walk), dùng liên từ hợp lý, và cung cấp thông tin cụ thể hơn (thời gian, tần suất). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu tự nhiên và rõ ràng.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually walk for about 30 minutes every morning because it helps my health and relieves stress. For example, I often walk with friends in the park or along the river when we go shopping.

Sugerencia: Nên dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán (went, walked), và trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hoạt động, tần suất). Tránh lặp ý quá nhiều.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child. I usually walked around the neighborhood with my friends several times a week, and we would play games or visit each other's houses.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời hợp lý nhưng cần lựa từ chính xác (connect friendship → strengthen friendships), thêm liên từ để mạch lạc và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể (lợi ích sức khỏe, thời gian). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

Ejemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because it helps them relax and get exercise. For example, I often walk there in the morning to keep fit and to strengthen my friendships by chatting with friends.

Sugerencia: Cần dùng từ đúng (beauty scenery → beautiful scenery; comfortable → feel comfortable), viết ngắn gọn, rõ ràng; giữ tối đa 3 câu, nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn về ai sẽ đi cùng hoặc hoạt động bạn làm khi đi bộ.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a park full of trees and beautiful flowers. It would help me relax and enjoy the fresh air, listen to birds, and have a pleasant conversation with my family or friends.

Sugerencia: Câu rất không chính xác về ngữ pháp và trật tự từ. Nên dùng thì quá khứ hoàn chỉnh và cụ thể (e.g. I walked with a friend yesterday at 6:00 AM). Tránh những từ không cần thiết, nói rõ kết quả cụ thể và cảm nhận.

Ejemplo: I went for a walk with a friend yesterday at 6:00 AM along the riverside. I felt very relaxed afterwards, and the regular walking has helped me lose some weight.

× Yes, I usually work every day because I think that is very good for health and helps me feel unwind.

✓ Yes, I usually walk every day because I think that is very good for my health and helps me feel unwound.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' (word choice) and omitted the article 'my' before 'health' (article error). 'Unwind' is a verb; the correct adjective is 'unwound' to describe feeling relaxed. Suggest using 'walk' consistent with the question and include 'my' before 'health'.

× For example, I often walk with my friends at in the park or along the river when sometime I work when I go shopping.

✓ For example, I often walk with my friends in the park or along the river; sometimes I walk when I go shopping.

Errors include incorrect preposition 'at in' (should be 'in' for places like park), misuse of 'sometime' (should be 'sometimes'), and wrong verb 'work' instead of 'walk'. Also sentence run-on; split or use punctuation. Suggest using 'in the park', 'sometimes', and consistent verb 'walk'.

× When I was a child, I always went outside to have a walk and I usually walk around my neighbors because I like hanging out with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I always went outside to take a walk and I usually walked around my neighborhood because I liked hanging out with my friends.

Tense inconsistency: the clause begins in past ('was', 'went') but shifts to present ('walk', 'like'). Maintain past tense: 'walked', 'liked'. 'Have a walk' is awkward; 'take a walk' is natural. 'Neighbors' is people, the area is 'neighborhood'.

× Some people like to walk in park because it helps them unwind and they can exercise, talk with friends or neighbors.

✓ Some people like to walk in parks because it helps them unwind and they can exercise or talk with friends or neighbors.

Countable noun 'park' needs plural 'parks' when speaking generally. Also prefer parallel structure; added 'or' placement. Suggest using plural for general statements: 'in parks'.

× For example, I often walk with friends in the morning, so I want to lose weight and connect friendship.

✓ For example, I often walk with friends in the morning, so I want to lose weight and connect with friends.

'Connect friendship' is incorrect collocation and missing preposition; use 'connect with friends' or 'strengthen friendships'. Also fine with present tense 'want'. Suggest using 'connect with friends' or 'build friendships'.

× If I had a chance, I'd like to take a long walk in a park with a lot of trees, flowers or beauty scenery because it helps me relax and comfortable so I could enjoy fresh air, listen to birds or talk chat with my friends and families.

✓ If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk in a park with a lot of trees, flowers, and beautiful scenery because it helps me relax and feel comfortable so I can enjoy fresh air, listen to birds, or chat with my friends and family.

Use 'the chance' (fixed phrase). 'Beauty scenery' is wrong; use 'beautiful scenery'. 'Relax and comfortable' mixes verb and adjective; use 'relax and feel comfortable'. 'Could' should be 'can' in this hypothetical future-in-present context. 'Talk chat' is redundant; use 'chat'. 'Families' should be 'family' for one group. Suggest these collocations and consistent modality.

× Lily I have gonna walk around like with my friend at 6:00 AM so I feel relaxed and it makes good for my health especially I lose weight.

✓ Lately I walked around with my friend at 6:00 AM, so I felt relaxed and it was good for my health; it especially helped me lose weight.

Multiple problems: 'Lily' is likely 'Lately' (typo). 'Have gonna' is nonstandard; use 'was going to' or simpler past 'walked'. Tense should be past when describing a specific past event: 'walked', 'felt', 'was good', 'helped me lose weight'. 'Makes good for my health' is ungrammatical; use 'was good for my health'. Also punctuation and sentence flow improved.