Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Ejemplo: No, I don't walk a lot. I rarely exercise because I have a busy work schedule, so I find it hard to find time for walks. However, I try to take short strolls when I can to stay active.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid excessive fillers. Mention a concrete example or memory to make it more vivid.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went outside as a child because outdoor spaces made me feel relaxed and less stressed. For example, I used to walk to the nearby playground after school and play with friends, which was both fun and a good form of exercise.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and then add specific reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'mental wellbeing', 'green spaces') and avoid vague phrases like 'those things'.

Ejemplo: People like to walk in parks because green spaces and fresh air improve mental wellbeing and reduce stress. For example, walking among trees can lower anxiety, and open paths make it easier to exercise and relax.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then add one or two specific reasons or details. Avoid repeating the same idea and minimize fillers. You could describe a particular route or what you would do on the walk.

Ejemplo: I'd take a long walk in the park near my apartment because its quiet trails and fresh air help me relax. I would follow the lake path for about an hour and stop at a bench to read or enjoy the view.

Sugerencia: Start with a precise topic sentence, then give specific details (time, place, duration, reason). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid hesitations and informal fillers like 'like'.

Ejemplo: Last weekend I walked in the small park near my apartment because it is convenient. The park is compact, so I completed a 30-minute loop and enjoyed the fresh air and scenery.

× No, I don't work a lot. It happens because I am was not a person who like exercise a lot and I found it is really hard to for me to squeeze time from my busy schedule.

✓ No, I don't walk a lot. It is because I was not a person who liked to exercise a lot, and I found it really hard to squeeze time from my busy schedule.

Multiple issues: 'work' should be 'walk' to answer the question (word choice, but falls under sentence structure), 'am was' is a tense/confusion error so use past 'was', 'who like' needs past 'liked' to agree with past reference, and 'it is really hard to for me' has an extra preposition 'for' and awkward structure; use 'I found it really hard to squeeze time'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for past habits, use correct verb forms and remove unnecessary words.

× Yes, uh, I often went outside, uh, when I was a child. It is because I found that, uh, outdoor space can make me feel relaxed and help me to reduce my stress.

✓ Yes, I often went outside when I was a child. It is because I found that outdoor spaces could make me feel relaxed and help me reduce my stress.

'Can' is present modal while the main clause refers to past habitual experience; use 'could' to match past perspective. 'Outdoor space' should be plural 'outdoor spaces' to refer generally. Also omit filler words and unnecessary 'to' in 'help me to reduce'. Suggestions: keep tense consistency and use plural for general nouns.

× And I also do, uh, exercise when I walk.

✓ I also used to exercise when I walked.

Original mixes present tense 'do' with past context; since speaking about past habit, use 'used to' or past simple 'exercised'. Suggestion: use past tense for past habits and avoid filler words.

× I believe it is because, uh, parks have open space that and fresh air that can help people reduce stress and, uh, keep them calm.

✓ I believe it is because parks have open spaces and fresh air that can help people reduce stress and keep them calm.

Extra word 'that' after 'space' is incorrect and 'open space' should be plural 'open spaces' to generalize. Remove filler and duplicate 'that'. Suggestion: simplify the structure: 'parks have open spaces and fresh air that can help people...'.

× I also found out, uh, those things can help with your emotions.

✓ I also found that those things could help with my emotions.

Mixes past 'found out' with present 'can'; maintain past perspective using 'could'. Also 'your' should match speaker's perspective 'my'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and maintain tense alignment.

× I'd like to take a long walk in the park nearby my apartment.

✓ I'd like to take a long walk in the park near my apartment.

'Nearby' is an adverb; use prepositional phrase 'near my apartment' to modify the park. This is a word choice/grammar issue affecting sentence correctness. Suggestion: use 'near' for location with noun.

× Uh, it is because I believe uh, walking in parks can help me to relax and reduce my stress.

✓ It is because I believe walking in parks can help me relax and reduce my stress.

Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help' and filler 'uh'. 'Help me relax' is correct. Suggestion: omit filler words and use correct verb form after 'help'.

× Umm, they have fresh air in the parks which is also good for me as well.

✓ Parks have fresh air, which is also good for me.

Redundant plural references and 'in the parks' plus 'they' is wordy; use 'parks have fresh air' or 'they have fresh air' not both. Also 'also' and 'as well' are redundant. Suggestion: simplify and avoid redundant phrases.

× I went out for a walk last weekend in the park nearby my apartment.

✓ I went for a walk last weekend in the park near my apartment.

'Went out for a walk' is acceptable but wordy; 'went for a walk' is more natural. 'Nearby my apartment' should be 'near my apartment'. Suggestion: use natural collocations and correct prepositional phrase.

× It is because, uh, it is convenient and close to me and the park is not big so I can spend like 30 minutes to go around the circle.

✓ It is because it is convenient and close to me, and the park is small, so I can spend about 30 minutes walking around the path.

'Not big' is better as 'small'; 'spend like 30 minutes to go around the circle' is unidiomatic—use 'spend about 30 minutes walking around the path'. 'Like' as filler should be avoided. Suggestion: use natural phrases for time ('about 30 minutes') and gerund after 'spend' for activities.