Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve accuracy and clarity: use correct verbs (walk, not work), correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, tense), and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk quite a lot. For example, I walk 30 minutes most days because it helps me stay fit and reduces stress.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense and reduce hesitations: answer in past tense for childhood, correct word order and vocabulary (went outside, overweight), and give one clear supporting detail. Avoid filler sounds and repetitions.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went outside to walk when I was a child. I was quite overweight then, so I would walk with my friends after school to try to lose weight.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and coherence: use correct verb forms (people like), avoid repeating phrases, and use linking words to structure reasons (for example, firstly/also). Provide specific details about benefits and atmosphere concisely.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because there is plenty of space and fresh air. For example, parks are quiet and green, so people can relax and exercise peacefully.

Sugerencia: Clarify intention and correct verb choice: say 'take a long walk in my garden' not 'work'. Be concise: one topic sentence describing the place, plus one specific reason (privacy, scenery). Avoid trailing off and unnecessary repetition.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in my large garden because it is peaceful and private. I enjoy the plants and quiet, which helps me relax.

Sugerencia: Use clear past or present perfect tense and remove hesitations: answer briefly with one clear sentence about the recent walk and add a specific detail (when, who, what you felt). Avoid repeating phrases.

Ejemplo: Lately I went to the local park last weekend with a friend. The fresh air and open space helped me relax and clear my mind.

× Yes, I work a lot because I think that working is a great exercise for your health.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because I think that walking is a great exercise for your health.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk', which is a wrong verb choice for the question about walking. 'Walking' is the correct present participle form to talk about the activity; maintain subject and verb consistency with the question context.

× So it reduce your fat and it reduce your stress.

✓ So it reduces your fat and it reduces your stress.

The subject 'it' requires the third person singular form of the verb: 'reduces'. Use '-s' for present simple third person singular.

× Yes, I often go to the outside when I was child because, uh, in my childhood I was too much fat and I gained a lot of weight because of spicy foods.

✓ Yes, I often went outside when I was a child because, in my childhood I was very overweight and I gained a lot of weight because of spicy foods.

The time reference 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'went' not present 'go'. Use 'went outside' and add the article 'a' before 'child'. 'Too much fat' is unnatural; use 'very overweight' to describe body condition.

× So that's why, umm, the when I, when I, I got some time, I always prefer to work for a walk.

✓ So that's why, when I had some free time, I always preferred to go for a walk.

The original mixes tenses and has extra words. 'When I had some free time' uses past tense consistent with earlier past-tense narrative. 'Preferred' (past) matches 'had'. Use 'go for a walk' as the correct phrase.

× People likes to likes walk in parks because in parks there has lot of space, so you can work anywhere.

✓ People like to walk in parks because parks have a lot of space, so you can walk anywhere.

'People' is plural and requires 'like' not 'likes'. Remove duplicate 'likes'. Use 'walk' not 'work'. 'There has lot of space' is incorrect: use 'parks have a lot of space' or 'there is a lot of space'.

× And so, and it is like quite, uh, good environment there.

✓ Also, the environment there is quite good.

Word order and filler words make the sentence awkward. Use 'the environment there is quite good' for natural adjective placement.

× Like you can work so peacefully and it gives you so much relaxation and calm.

✓ You can walk very peacefully and it gives you a lot of relaxation and calmness.

Use 'walk' instead of 'work'. Replace 'so' with 'very' or 'a lot of' for formal speech. Use noun 'calmness' with 'relaxation' for parallel structure.

× So if I had a chance then I would like to long work on my garden because I have a big garden and my garden is so relaxed, full and so calm.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in my garden because I have a big garden and it is very peaceful and calm.

Use 'the chance' or 'a chance' consistently; 'take a long walk in my garden' is the correct collocation. 'Relaxed, full and so calm' is incorrect adjective choice and order; use 'peaceful and calm'.

× So I usually spend my time when I have some free time. So that's why I because I can comfortably work on without any hesitation.

✓ I usually spend time there when I have free time because I can walk comfortably without any hesitation.

Remove redundancy and correct verb choices: 'spend time there when I have free time' and 'walk comfortably' are natural. The original has fragmented clauses and extra words.

× So I usually, uh, went, uh, park because the park, uh, then park there is a so lot of the space and uh, so I usually go there, uh, and it gives me so much relaxation because of the fresh air refreshment.

✓ Recently I went to the park because the park has a lot of space, and I usually go there because it gives me a lot of relaxation due to the fresh air.

Use 'went' for past event but keep sentence clear: 'Recently I went to the park' fits. 'Has a lot of space' corrects 'there is a so lot'. 'Fresh air' is sufficient; 'refreshment' is unnecessary. Maintain consistent tense and natural collocations.