Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and repetition, and provide one or two specific supporting details linked with connectors (for example: "because" and "also"). Keep to under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I usually walk from my house to the bus station because I commute to school, which takes about 15 minutes. I also sometimes walk into the CBD on weekends to run errands or meet friends.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and use clearer contrast. Provide a concise topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like "however" correctly and avoid verb form errors.

Ejemplo: Not really. My parents were very protective, so I rarely walked outside alone; however, I often walked around my school campus with friends during breaks to play and explore.

Sugerencia: Use precise vocabulary and correct collocations (e.g., "parks offer attractions," "enjoy nature"). Give two clear reasons connected with linking words like "for example" and "in addition." Avoid filler sounds.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy nature and relax. For example, parks have many trees and lawns where visitors can breathe fresh air, and in addition there are playgrounds and benches for families to use.

Sugerencia: Be more fluent and use correct names/phrases (e.g., "walk around the island"). Give a clear reason and one specific example of what you would see. Remove hesitations and keep under five sentences.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to walk around Taiwan’s coastline. It would take about a week and would let me see coastal villages, scenic cliffs and many natural attractions, which I find very interesting.

Sugerencia: Speak in past tense for past events, avoid repetition and hesitations, and correct vocabulary (e.g., "Botanic Garden"). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a short reason with linking words like "because."

Ejemplo: Yesterday I walked from my house to the Botanic Garden. I went because I felt tired and wanted to relax among the trees and enjoy the peaceful atmosphere.

× Well, I would say yes, I usually walk from my house to the state bus stations because I have to commute from my house to the school.

✓ Well, I would say yes; I usually walk from my house to the state bus station because I have to commute from my house to school.

Use present simple to describe habitual actions (correct). 'Bus stations' should be singular when referring to the specific station used; 'the school' can be simplified to 'school' for natural English. Keep verb tense as present simple for routines.

× So I think I have work, I have, I work, I, I work a lot and also sometimes I will go to CBD area which is which I had to cross.

✓ So I think I work a lot, and sometimes I go to the CBD area, which I have to cross.

Remove hesitation fragments and redundant phrases. Use present simple 'work' for habitual action. Use 'go' rather than 'will go' to match habitual context. Use 'which I have to cross' to indicate required route. This fixes sentence structure and tense consistency.

× To be honest, when I was a child, I didn't have a chance to work outside because my parents are were very protective and worry about any dangers outside.

✓ To be honest, when I was a child, I didn't have a chance to play outside because my parents were very protective and worried about dangers outside.

'Work' is incorrect meaning; 'play' fits context. Use past tense 'were' and 'worried' to match 'when I was a child' time frame. Remove 'are' which is present tense; use past participle 'worried' as adjective to describe parents' feelings in the past.

× However, I usually walk around on the campus and having fun with my friends.

✓ However, I usually walked around the campus and had fun with my friends.

Context is past (when I was a child), so verbs should be past simple: 'walked' and 'had'. 'Having' is a present participle and incorrect here. Also use 'the campus' or just 'campus' consistently.

× Uh, actually, I think a part has a lot of things to do and it is very attractive.

✓ Uh, actually, I think a park has a lot to do and it is very attractive.

'A part' is a misspelling; should be 'a park'. Use 'has a lot to do' or better 'has a lot of activities' to be idiomatic. This corrects the adjective/noun usage.

× For example, there are many trees, grass surrounding in this area so that people can enjoy forest Spa.

✓ For example, there are many trees and grass surrounding this area, so people can enjoy the forest atmosphere.

Remove incorrect 'in' after 'surrounding'. 'Forest Spa' is unnatural; 'forest atmosphere' or 'a forest-like atmosphere' is clearer. Add necessary conjunctions and commas for clarity.

× And in addition, uh, there are many facilities providing for children to play it.

✓ In addition, there are many facilities for children to play on.

Do not use 'providing for' awkwardly; use 'facilities for children' or 'play areas for children'. 'Play it' is incorrect; use 'play on' or 'use'. Fix pronoun/verb structure for natural phrasing.

× Well, if I have an opportunity, I would like to do a challenge, which is a, which is a walking, uh, wrong island trip in Taiwan because it might take like one week.

✓ Well, if I had the opportunity, I would like to do a challenging round-island walking trip in Taiwan because it might take about one week.

Use second conditional: 'If I had the opportunity' + 'I would like' for hypothetical future plans. 'Would like' is fine but condition needs past form 'had'. Correct 'wrong island' to 'round-island' and 'do a challenge' to 'do a challenging ... trip'. Use 'about' for approximate duration.

× And I think it is very interesting and also can see a lot of beautiful attractions and the natural beauties in Taiwan.

✓ And I think it would be very interesting, and I could see many beautiful attractions and natural scenery in Taiwan.

Match conditional mood: use 'would be' and 'could see'. 'Natural beauties' is awkward; use 'natural scenery' or 'natural beauty'. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for smoother phrasing.

× Uh, actually I did work, uh, in yesterday and it, it was, uh, the dis, it's the route was from my house to the Bot Botanic Garden.

✓ Uh, actually I went for a walk yesterday; the route was from my house to the Botanic Garden.

Use past simple 'went' for completed action. Remove 'did work' which is incorrect. 'In yesterday' is ungrammatical; 'yesterday' alone suffices. Simplify to 'the route was' to describe where you walked.

× And the reason why I want to work just because, uh, I felt a little bit tired.

✓ And the reason I wanted to walk was that I felt a little tired.

Match past context: use 'wanted' and 'walk' (not 'work'). Use a full clause 'was that' to connect reason. Modal 'want to' should be in past to match 'yesterday'.

× So I wanna, uh, experience a forest.

✓ So I wanted to experience the forest.

Match past tense 'yesterday' context: use 'wanted' instead of 'wanna' (informal present). Use article 'the forest' to refer to the nearby Botanic Garden experience. Use standard form 'want(ed) to' + verb rather than colloquial 'wanna'.