Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct small grammar slips (e.g. "in the in the city").

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I often jog and wander around parks or explore different parts of the city, which helps me relax and stay fit.

Sugerencia: Use a clear past-tense topic sentence and a supporting detail with correct grammar and linking words; avoid vague phrases like "release ourselves."

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went for walks with my mother when I was a child. We usually strolled around the local park to enjoy the fresh air and talk about our day.

Sugerencia: Give a concise opinion followed by two specific reasons linked with cohesive devices. Fix awkward phrases like "spend ourselves alone" to "spend time alone."

Ejemplo: I think people walk in parks because it brings them closer to nature and reduces stress. Additionally, parks offer a calm space to escape city noise and to spend time alone for reflection.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear conditional sentence and specific, correctly phrased details. Avoid hesitations and correct vocabulary (e.g. "magnificent scenery", "paths by the lake").

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would choose Shichahai Park in Beijing because the scenery is magnificent; I would walk along the small paths by the lake and enjoy the historic atmosphere.

Sugerencia: Answer directly in past or present perfect tense and give one or two clear specific details; remove fillers and repeated words.

Ejemplo: Lately I have been walking around my college campus, especially the playground and nearby gardens, because there are few other places to go.

× Well actually when I was a child I used to walk with my mother and we just walking around the park to release ourselves.

✓ Well actually when I was a child I used to walk with my mother and we just walked around the park to release ourselves.

The clause 'we just walking around' is missing the correct verb form. After 'we' you need a finite verb; here the past simple 'walked' matches 'used to' and indicates repeated past action. Use 'walked' instead of the -ing form 'walking'. Suggestion: use past simple for completed or habitual past actions with 'used to'.

× I like wandering in the parks or in the in the city.

✓ I like wandering in the parks or in the city.

The phrase contains a duplicated 'in the' which is redundant. Use 'in the parks or in the city' or simpler 'in parks or the city'. Ensure no repeated preposition. Also consider using plural consistency: 'parks' vs 'the city'.

× Well, yeah, of course I like to walk. I like jogging. I like wandering in the parks or in the in the city.

✓ Well, yeah, of course I like to walk. I like to jog. I like wandering in parks or in the city.

Mixing 'I like jogging' with 'I like to walk' is acceptable but maintain parallel structure: use 'I like to jog' to match 'I like to walk' or use gerunds consistently: 'I like walking, jogging, and wandering'. Parallelism improves clarity. Also removed duplicated 'in the'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk recently?

The question word 'lately' (recent period) pairs better with the present perfect ('have you gone') rather than the simple past ('did you go'). Use 'recently' as a stylistic alternative. Use present perfect to ask about experiences in a recent, unspecified time.

× Well currently I'm living in college so I just walk around the college or in the in the playground.

✓ Well, currently I'm living at college so I just walk around the campus or in the playground.

Use 'living at college' (or 'living on campus') rather than 'in college' for natural English. 'College' as a residence takes preposition 'at' or 'on'. Also fix duplicated 'in the'. 'Campus' fits better than repeating 'college'.

× If I really need to select one place, I will choose the Shutahai Park in Beijing and you and there there is magnificent scenario and I would like to enjoy the pacing in the small St. in beside the lake, it's very beautiful.

✓ If I had to choose one place, I would choose Shichahai Park in Beijing. There is a magnificent scenery, and I would like to enjoy walking on the small street beside the lake; it's very beautiful.

Multiple issues: 'If I really need to select' mixes conditional forms—use 'If I had to choose' with 'would' for hypothetical. 'Shutahai' corrected to likely 'Shichahai'. 'You and there there' is garbled pronoun/use; replace with 'There is'. 'Magnificent scenario' is incorrect collocation—use 'scenery'. 'enjoy the pacing' is unclear; use 'enjoy walking' or 'strolling'. 'small St. in beside' corrected to 'small street beside'. The corrections align verbs and pronouns and use correct vocabulary.

× There is not there is umm. There's few places I have I could choose to walk. It's limited.

✓ There are not many places I can choose to walk; it's limited.

Use 'there are' for plural 'places' (subject-verb agreement). 'There's few' is incorrect: with countable plural use 'few' with plural verb 'are' and often preferable 'not many' for limited quantity. 'I have I could' is redundant; use 'I can' or 'I could'. Also avoid filler 'umm' in written correction.

× Why do people like to walk in parks? Oh well, in my opinion, I think walking in the park can get close to nature and have a sense of relief and we just sometimes need to escape from the city life and sometimes we need to spend ourselves alone.

✓ Oh well, in my opinion, walking in the park can bring you closer to nature and give a sense of relief. Sometimes we need to escape city life and spend time alone.

'Walking in the park can get close to nature and have a sense of relief' mixes subjects and verbs awkwardly. Use 'bring you closer' or 'get you closer' and 'give a sense of relief' to correctly match third person singular 'walking' as subject. 'Spend ourselves alone' is incorrect reflexive use—use 'spend time alone'. Also streamline repetition ('sometimes' twice) for clarity.