Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use correct verb forms and tenses. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. don’t repeat “I could”). Use past simple for finished activities (e.g. “I was part of the choir, but I quit because it affected my mental health”).

Ejemplo: I enjoy music and crafts. For music, I can play the piano, sing and play the guitar; I used to be in a choir, but I left because it affected my mental health. Currently, I like crafting, especially making jewelry.

Sugerencia: The feedback is useful but not structured as an answer from the student. When answering, respond directly: first a topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then one or two concrete details with correct past tense and linking words. Keep sentences short and avoid run-ons.

Ejemplo: Yes. I had music lessons as a child: my parents enrolled me in a music school where I learned piano and singing. I took weekly lessons and sometimes performed at the local mall.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence, then specific supporting details with coherent linking words. Use consistent tense: past for childhood involvement, present perfect or present for continuing hobbies. Avoid vague frequency expressions like “once every one year”; use “once or twice a year.”

Ejemplo: Yes. I have loved singing and playing the piano since childhood, although I prefer singing. I was in a chorale when I was younger, and now I practice piano only once or twice a year, but I’m grateful for the musical skills I developed.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then add two specific supporting details with proper past tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and informal phrasing like “just just one note.” Use clearer comparisons (e.g. “he plays guitar well, but only knows a few piano notes”).

Ejemplo: Yes. My father and I share an interest in music: he plays guitar well, while I sing and play several instruments. When I was a child I sometimes sang with him, although he can only play a few piano notes.

× I have hobbies OK, I could play piano, could sing, I could play guitar and other musical instruments.

✓ I have hobbies. I can play the piano, sing, play the guitar and other musical instruments.

The student used 'could' inconsistently for present ability; use modal 'can' for present ability. Also 'play piano' needs the article 'the' for instruments in this context. Split into two sentences to avoid run-on structure.

× I actually I am a part of the choral but I quit because it took a toll on my mental health so I just quit.

✓ I was actually part of the chorale, but I quit because it took a toll on my mental health.

The activity is a completed past event, so use past simple 'was' and 'quit'. Also remove redundant phrases ('I actually I', 'so I just quit') and use 'chorale' or 'choir' for correct noun form.

× But right now I love crafting, specially making jewelries.

✓ But right now I love crafting, especially making jewelry.

Use 'especially' instead of 'specially'. 'Jewelries' is incorrect in English; the uncountable noun 'jewelry' is standard. This corrects word choice and number.

× Good job!

✓ (No correction needed — this is feedback, not the student's content.)

This line is examiner feedback, not the student's spoken sentence. No grammatical correction required.

× Yes, and this is singing and playing piano.

✓ Yes, I have been singing and playing the piano since childhood.

Question asks about a hobby held since childhood; use present perfect or present perfect continuous to indicate duration from past to present. Add 'the' before 'piano.'

× But I am most fond of singing.

✓ But I am most fond of singing.

This sentence is correct; it expresses a present preference. No change required.

× I was once a part of chorale and for piano I don't practice it that much, maybe once every one year or twice every one year.

✓ I was once part of a chorale, and for the piano I do not practice much, maybe once or twice a year.

Use 'a chorale' and 'the piano.' 'Once every one year' is awkward; use 'once or twice a year.' Remove unnecessary pronoun 'it' after 'practice.'

× But I am very grateful to that talent.

✓ But I am very grateful for that talent.

Use the preposition 'for' with 'grateful' rather than 'to.' 'To' is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, but on my father's side only my father could sing and play guitar and we have the same hobby of singing and playing instruments, but he could barely play piano, just just one note.

✓ Yes, on my father's side only my father could sing and play the guitar, and we share the hobbies of singing and playing instruments, but he could barely play the piano, only one note.

Add 'the' before instrument names. Use 'share the hobbies' for clarity. Remove repeated 'just.' Keep past ability 'could' because referring to past. Adjust word order for natural phrasing.

× But he could play the guitar very well and sometimes I sing with him when I was a child.

✓ But he could play the guitar very well, and sometimes I sang with him when I was a child.

The time clause 'when I was a child' refers to the past, so the main verb should be past simple 'sang' rather than present 'sing.'