Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use correct article/noun forms and a linking phrase when giving reasons. Also keep within 3–4 sentences and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “stay fit” instead of “get healthy”).

Ejemplo: Yes. I play basketball with my friends every Saturday. I do this because it helps me stay fit and boosts my energy for the week. Also, playing with others makes it fun and keeps me motivated.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid vague or awkward phrases like “improve my self.” Mention what you learned or enjoyed to make the response more informative.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child I liked playing computer games after school. Playing taught me basic computer skills and helped me learn to focus and solve problems.

Sugerencia: Use consistent tense and smoother sentence structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating you still have the hobby, then explain briefly why you keep it. Avoid filler words and capitalize/format correctly. Use linking words like “so” or “which” to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I still play mobile games because they help me relax after work. Playing for a short time relieves stress and helps me unwind before bed.

Sugerencia: Clarify who you mean and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles). Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No), then give a specific example of shared activities and a brief reason. Use linking words like “because” and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes. My brother and I both enjoy playing computer and mobile games. We often play together, which helps us improve our teamwork and gaming skills.

× Yes, I have an hobbies, we play basketball with my friends every Saturday because this is to help me get healthy and energetic everyday.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby. We play basketball with my friends every Saturday because it helps me stay healthy and energetic every day.

The sentence uses the plural article with a count noun ('an hobbies') which is incorrect (Article errors). Also run-on sentence: separate into two sentences. 'An' must be used with a singular noun, so use 'a hobby'. 'This is to help me get healthy and energetic everyday' is awkward and contains tense/verb choice issues: use 'it helps me stay healthy and energetic every day.' 'Everyday' as one word is an adjective; use 'every day' for frequency.

× Yes I have a hobby in my childhood time. I play computer after school. It is helped me to improve my self as a computer gamer.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby in my childhood. I played computer games after school. It helped me improve myself as a computer gamer.

The student refers to past time ('childhood') so verbs must be in past tense (Present tense issue). 'I have a hobby in my childhood time' should be 'I had a hobby in my childhood.' 'Play' becomes 'played' and 'is helped me' is incorrect: use simple past 'helped'. 'Play computer' is not natural: use 'played computer games.' 'Improve my self' should be 'improve myself' (pronoun spacing).

× Yes, I'm still I have hobbies playing games with mobile games because it's helped me to. Chill and relax every after work.

✓ Yes, I still have the hobby of playing mobile games because it helps me to chill and relax after work.

Mixed forms and incorrect tense (Present tense issue) and fragmented sentence. 'I'm still I have hobbies' is redundant; use 'I still have the hobby of playing mobile games' or 'I still play mobile games.' 'It's helped me to.' wrongly uses present perfect and fragment; use 'it helps me to chill and relax after work.' Remove extra 'every.' Ensure 'mobile games' is clear and article 'the hobby of' improves clarity.

× Yes we I I have a brother with same interest to play a computer games because they give us a reason to improve our skills on mobile game.

✓ Yes, my brother and I have the same interest in playing computer games because they give us a reason to improve our skills in mobile games.

Pronoun order and forms are incorrect (Incorrect use of pronouns). 'Yes we I I have a brother' should be 'my brother and I' or 'we.' 'With same interest to play a computer games' is ungrammatical: use 'have the same interest in playing computer games.' 'A computer games' mixes article and plural; use 'computer games.' 'They give us a reason to improve our skills on mobile game' should be 'our skills in mobile games.' Use consistent plural/singular nouns and correct preposition 'in.'