Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct collocations (e.g., 'relax my mind' not 'unbind my mind'), and limit to up to five sentences. Add a specific example or recent book to make your answer more concrete.

Ejemplo: I enjoy reading novels in my free time. I usually read at night after work to relax my mind. For example, I recently finished 'The Alchemist', which inspired me to think more about personal goals and improved my vocabulary.

Sugerencia: Use past tense for childhood, avoid repetition and fillers, and be specific about what you liked. Correct word choice ('documentaries taught me' not 'touch mean') and use linking words to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I enjoyed watching documentaries and cartoons after school. The documentaries taught me interesting facts about history, while cartoons were fun and made me laugh. Because of this, I developed a habit of learning through watching programmes.

Sugerencia: Keep sentences complete and consistent in tense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details about genres and a brief reason. Remove fillers and finish thoughts fully.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have continued watching documentaries and films since childhood. I especially like action and comedy movies because they help me relax after a busy day and refresh my mood. For instance, watching a short comedy helped me unwind last weekend.

Sugerencia: Be grammatically accurate and concise: correct sentence structure ('I don't think so' then explain), avoid contradictory phrases, and use linking words to contrast (e.g., 'however'). Give a brief example of a family activity to add specificity.

Ejemplo: I don't think so; our hobbies are different. I prefer indoor activities like reading and watching films, whereas my parents enjoy outdoor exercise. For example, they often go jogging in the park and play games with my younger siblings on weekends.

× I have a keen interest in reading uh, in my free time.

✓ I have a keen interest in reading in my free time.

Extra filler 'uh' disrupts fluency but not grammar; sentence uses present simple correctly to express a current habit. Remove disfluencies and redundant commas for clarity.

× I usually read novels, uh, after the day almost uh, in the night.

✓ I usually read novels at night after the day is over.

Tense and time-expression placement: use 'at night' and a clear clause 'after the day is over'. 'Almost' is inappropriate. This keeps present habitual meaning.

× Uh, it helped me to unbind my uh, mind and I uh, improve my thinking ability and the communication skills.

✓ It helps me to relax my mind and improve my thinking ability and communication skills.

Original mixes past 'helped' with present context; maintain present simple 'helps' for habitual effect. 'Unbind my mind' is unnatural; use 'relax my mind'. Do not use definite article with 'communication skills' unless referring to specific skills.

× I love to watch Google documentaries and the cartoons after school, uh, documentaries fascinate me because they touch mean new facts about history.

✓ I loved to watch documentaries and cartoons after school; documentaries fascinated me because they taught me new facts about history.

Question asked about childhood hobby so use past tense. 'Google documentaries' is unnecessary brand; 'taught me' is correct past verb rather than 'touch mean'. Also remove filler words.

× And uh, I have gained interest in cartoons as well because of the fun, uh, the fun they give, umm, to me.

✓ And I gained an interest in cartoons as well because of the fun they gave me.

When speaking about childhood development, simple past 'gained' fits better. 'Have gained' (present perfect) implies a connection to present which is less appropriate here. Remove duplicate phrases.

× Yes, I still have keen interest in watching documentaries and the movies, specially the action and the comedy one because it helped me, uh me to relax after a busy day.

✓ Yes, I still have a keen interest in watching documentaries and movies, especially action and comedy films, because they help me to relax after a busy day.

Maintain present simple 'have' and 'help' for current hobbies. Add article 'a' before 'keen interest'. Use 'movies' plural and 'films' or 'movies' consistent; 'specially' should be 'especially'. Use 'they help' to agree with plural subjects.

× It also helped me to refresh my mind and I can.

✓ It also helps me to refresh my mind and recharge.

Original ends abruptly 'and I can.' Use a complete parallel clause in present simple to match context: 'helps me... and recharge.' Avoid sentence fragments.

× Uh, I don't think so. Uh, me and my family shared the same hobbies.

✓ I don't think so. My family and I do not share the same hobbies.

Subject pronoun order and form: use 'My family and I' as the subject, not 'me and my family'. Use present tense 'do not share' to answer current situation.

× Uh, I have the keen interest in indoor activity whereas my parents are interested in outdoor activity.

✓ I have a keen interest in indoor activities, whereas my parents are interested in outdoor activities.

Do not use 'the' before 'keen interest' here; use plural 'activities' for general hobbies. 'Whereas' contrast is fine but adjust number and articles.

× They usually spend their time outside walking or jogging in the park, but also they play with the children.

✓ They usually spend their time outside walking or jogging in the park, and they also play with the children.

Maintain present simple. Improve coordination by using 'and they also' instead of 'but also they'. This makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.