Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent: give a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, and include one brief detail with a linking word. Also correct grammar (e.g., 'from these hobbies' -> 'among them') and use plural/singular correctly.

Ejemplo: I have several hobbies, but I mostly enjoy watching movies and going for walks. For example, I watch films at least twice a week to relax, and I take a 30-minute walk each morning to clear my head.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and complete the explanation without hesitations. Remove repeated words, and use linking words to show reason (e.g., 'because'). Provide a concise outcome or feeling.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I wanted to become an actor. However, because I came from a middle-class family, my parents couldn’t afford acting classes, so I couldn’t pursue formal training.

Sugerencia: Keep responses coherent and avoid contradicting yourself. Begin with a clear statement about whether the hobby has continued, then explain reasons and feelings using linking words. Avoid fillers and slang ('man').

Ejemplo: Yes — I have wanted to act since childhood and I still hope to try it in the future. Although I doubt I'll become a professional, I enjoy acting because it allows me to entertain people and express different emotions.

Sugerencia: Give a direct comparison and use clear examples with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'compared to', 'they like to work in finance'). Finish the sentence and avoid trailing off.

Ejemplo: No, my hobbies are quite different from my family’s. For example, some family members enjoy cooking or working in finance, whereas I prefer creative activities like watching films and acting, so our interests don’t overlap.

× Yes I have many hobbies but uh from this hobbies uh I mostly enjoy watching movies, going going on walk.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies, but of these hobbies I mostly enjoy watching movies and going on walks.

The phrase 'from this hobbies' mixes singular 'this' with plural 'hobbies' (singular/plural mismatch). Use 'of these hobbies' for plural. Also 'going on walk' should be pluralized to 'going on walks' or 'going for a walk' to match usual collocation. Use commas and 'and' to join items correctly.

× When I was a child, I wanted to become an actor, but. But being a but I belong to a middle class family so my family couldn't afford me to send to acting class so.

✓ When I was a child, I wanted to become an actor, but I belonged to a middle-class family, so my family couldn't afford to send me to acting classes.

Multiple tense and structure problems: 'belong' should be past tense 'belonged' to match 'When I was a child'. Use 'middle-class' with a hyphen as a compound adjective. 'Couldn't afford me to send to acting class' is ungrammatical; correct structure is 'couldn't afford to send me to acting classes'. Also use plural 'classes' or 'an acting class'. Remove redundant fragments like 'but. But being a but'.

× Like I have said earlier, I have a hobby to become an actor, but I don't think I can be one.

✓ As I said earlier, I have wanted to become an actor, but I don't think I can become one.

Use 'As I said earlier' or 'Like I said earlier' rather than 'Like I have said earlier' for spoken past reference. 'I have a hobby to become an actor' is unnatural; desire to become an actor is not a 'hobby' and requires 'I have wanted to become' or 'I want to become'. Keep present simple 'I don't think I can become one' for current belief.

× But uh, I really want to become an actor in the future if that's possible. I like it. Acting man entertaining people.

✓ I really want to become an actor in the future if possible. I like acting and entertaining people.

The fragment 'I like it. Acting man entertaining people.' is ungrammatical. Combine into a clear sentence: 'I like acting and entertaining people.' Remove filler 'man' and ensure parallel structure 'acting and entertaining'.

× Well, comparing to my family members, I think we have different hobbies.

✓ Well, compared to my family members, I think we have different hobbies.

Use the past participle form 'compared to' for the comparison phrase. 'Comparing to' is incorrect here.

× Uh, some they like to cook or some they like to work with money somewhere.

✓ Some of them like to cook, and others like to work with money or in finance.

The original repeats subject 'some they' and has vague 'work with money somewhere.' Use 'some of them' and contrast with 'others', and replace vague phrase with 'work with money or in finance.'

× Some of them are in finance, but my hobbies are completely different compared to them.

✓ Some of them are in finance, but my hobbies are completely different from theirs.

Use 'different from' (or 'different to' in some dialects) rather than 'different compared to'. Also use possessive pronoun 'theirs' to avoid repeating 'them.'

× So I guess we have.

✓ So I guess we have different interests.

The sentence 'So I guess we have.' is a sentence fragment and incomplete. Provide the missing noun 'different interests' to complete the thought.