Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “soothing music” without context and correct minor grammar (e.g., “on the Internet” → “on the internet”).

Ejemplo: I enjoy several hobbies. Primarily, I love singing—especially soft ballads—and I also create short videos for the internet, where I share covers and singing tips.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and clarify meaning: use past tense for childhood, fix unclear phrase “fire that I get a sense of relaxation.” Provide a clear reason and one brief example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. When I was a child I enjoyed playing games with my friends because it helped me relax and have fun. For example, we often played hide-and-seek after school.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense and avoid repetition: say you have sung since childhood, give a specific detail about what you sang then and what you sing now, and use linking words like “now” or “these days.” Fix typos and keep it to two sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have enjoyed singing since I was a child. Back then I sang nursery rhymes, and now I mostly sing Bollywood songs because I love their melodies.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and give a short specific example: use correct subject form and plural, and add a linking word plus an example that contrasts your hobby with a family member’s hobby.

Ejemplo: Definitely not. My family and I have different interests; for example, I enjoy singing and making videos, whereas my sister prefers painting and my father likes gardening.

× I love to make videos on Internet.

✓ I love to make videos on the Internet.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'Internet' is an article error affecting countable/uncountable noun usage; include 'the' because 'the Internet' is a specific, known entity.

× Yes, when I was a child my hobby is to play with my friends because fire that I get a sense of relaxation.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my hobby was playing with my friends because it gave me a sense of relaxation.

Tense inconsistency and wrong word choice: talking about childhood requires past tense 'was' and 'gave'. 'Play with' should be in gerund form 'playing' to act as noun; 'fire' is incorrect word choice and should be 'it' or 'because it gave me'. Use past tense throughout.

× Yes, I have one hobby since my childhood and that is of singing.

✓ Yes, I have had one hobby since my childhood, and that is singing.

Incorrect verb tense and awkward phrasing: 'have one hobby since my childhood' should use present perfect 'have had' to indicate continuity from past to present. 'That is of singing' is ungrammatical; use 'that is singing' or 'which is singing'.

× When I I was style I love to sing and now also I love to sing Bollywood music.

✓ When I was young I loved to sing, and now I also love singing Bollywood music.

Multiple errors: 'I I' duplicate; 'style' is wrong word—should be 'young'. Talking about past uses past tense 'loved'. Maintain parallel structure: 'now I also love singing' or 'now I also love to sing' but use present for current preference.

× Definitely not. Me and my family member have uh, unique hobbies and choice of interest.

✓ Definitely not. My family members and I have unique hobbies and choices of interest.

Pronoun case and number: use subject pronoun 'I' instead of 'Me' when combined with another subject. 'Family member' should be plural 'family members' to match 'we' and 'have'. Also 'choice of interest' is awkward; plural 'choices of interest' or simply 'different interests' is clearer.