Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 内容表达清晰，但语法和连贯性有问题。注意句子结构完整，避免断句，使用连接词使表达更自然；可以拓展具体细节来增强内容（如举例说明公共交通如何承载城市记忆）。另外控制在五句以内，保持自然口语风格。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I love traveling, especially using public transport, because it shows the city’s real life. For example, taking a bus lets me see local markets and hear different accents, which makes me feel connected to the place. So public transport carries both people and memories.

Sugerencia: 回答内容完整但时态和语法需要纠正，注意动词时态一致和单复数形式；可以用一两句补充具体的经历或感受（例如比赛类型、学到的技能）来丰富内容。保持句子简洁，使用连接词如 'and' 或 'which'。

Ejemplo: Yes. I used to enjoy singing and took professional vocal lessons as a child, which helped me improve my technique. I also participated in several competitions and won a few awards, which boosted my confidence.

Sugerencia: 表达含糊且有语法错误，需明确用词（例如 'CGN' 不清楚，应具体说明是 'CG art' 或 'digital art'），注意时态和习惯用法（'used to like'）。多用具体例子解释兴趣如何变化，并用连接词使句子更流畅。避免不必要的重复。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. I used to draw buses and metro scenes as a child, and now I focus on digital illustration and character design. For example, I create digital portraits of girls with different styles and share them online.

Sugerencia: 回答语法和用词需改进（例如 'in minority' 应改为 'uncommon' 或 'different'，'support me of like' 应为 'support me in'）。建议简洁说明差异并补充一家人如何互相支持，使用连接词如 'but' 或 'however'。

Ejemplo: No, not really. My hobbies are different from my parents': my dad enjoys fishing and my mother practices yoga. However, they both support me in drawing and singing, and sometimes they come to my performances.

× I think public transport's not only carries people from one side of the city to another, but also. Carries the memory of a city.

✓ I think public transport not only carries people from one side of the city to another, but also carries the memory of a city.

错误类型接近“句子结构错误/冠词或用词不当”。原句中“public transport's not only carries...”使用了不恰当的缩写（'s）导致句子结构混乱；此外把“Carries”分成了新句首字母大写，造成断句错误。应去掉缩写，保持 not only ... but also 结构的并列动词一致，两个分句的动词都用第三人称单数形式“carries”。建议：书写正式句子时避免随意缩写，注意并列结构中动词形式一致并不要随意断句。

× I treated singing as one of my hobbies when I was a child.

✓ I treated singing as one of my hobbies when I was a child.

句子本身时态正确（过去时）。此句无需改动。但后面句子有错误，单独保留此句以示对比。

× At that time, I accepted professional vocal practices from music teachers and get many awards in the competitions.

✓ At that time, I received professional vocal training from music teachers and got many awards in competitions.

原句中“accepted professional vocal practices”用词不当，英语中通常说“receive training”而不是“accept practices”。此外“get many awards” 时态不一致，应使用过去时“got”。“in the competitions”多余定冠词，应为“in competitions”或“at competitions”。建议：用固定搭配“receive training”，注意时态一致（过去时），以及冠词使用应根据上下文选择。

× Yes I do. I think it might be illustration.

✓ Yes, I do. I think it might be illustration.

句子可接受但标点和表达略显生硬。若想更自然可以改为“I think it might be illustration”或“I think it might be illustration as a hobby.” 该句主要问题是风格而非严格语法。

× When I was a child I like to draw in pictures of buses or metros, but now it might turn to stuff like a CGN.

✓ When I was a child I liked to draw pictures of buses or metros, but now it has turned into things like CG art.

原句时态混用：句首说“when I was a child”应使用过去时“liked”，而原文用现在时“like”。“draw in pictures”搭配不当，应为“draw pictures of...”。“turn to”用法不当且“CGN”可能是错误缩写，应为“CG”或“CG art”（计算机图形艺术）。建议：保持时态一致，使用正确搭配（draw pictures of），并使用常见术语（CG art）。

× I like to illustrate the image of beautiful girls.

✓ I like to illustrate images of beautiful girls.

原句用单数“the image”与泛指爱好不符，且“illustrate images”比“illustrate the image”更自然。建议：描述爱好时用复数或不定冠词以泛指。

× No I don't because my hobby is in minority.

✓ No, I don't, because my hobby is in the minority.

短语“in minority”用法不当，正确说法是“in the minority”。此外需补标点使句子更清晰。建议：使用固定短语“in the minority”来表示“属于少数”。

× My dad likes fishing and my mom likes yoga training but they both support me of like drawing or singing or just following.

✓ My dad likes fishing and my mom likes doing yoga, but they both support me in liking drawing or singing or just pursuing them.

原句中“yoga training”可改为“doing yoga”更自然；“support me of like”语法错误，应为“support me in liking”或更自然的“support me in pursuing my interests”。“just following”不明确，改为“pursuing them”更清晰。建议：使用正确的介词搭配（support someone in doing sth 或 support someone's interest）并保持措辞清晰。