Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific hobbies with brief reasons or examples. Avoid fillers (uh, like) and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (also, for example). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have several hobbies. Mainly I enjoy listening to music because it helps me relax, and I also play football with my friends most weekends to stay active. Additionally, when I have free time I like reading short stories at a café because it is peaceful and inspiring.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement) and be specific about reasons and examples. Start with a clear topic sentence, then state why you liked it and give a concise example. Avoid repetitive phrases and unclear pronouns.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. As a child I loved listening to music because it made me feel relaxed and more energetic. For example, I often listened to songs while taking a shower or doing homework, which cheered me up and helped me concentrate.

Sugerencia: Provide a clearer, well-structured answer: state the hobby, confirm it continues, give two specific benefits and a brief example. Fix grammar and remove unclear words (e.g., 'Ginger'). Use linking words (therefore, also).

Ejemplo: Yes, I have continued listening to music since childhood and it is still my favorite hobby. It helps me relax and also makes it easier to connect with others, for example when I share favorite songs with classmates and start conversations. Therefore, music remains a key part of my free time.

Sugerencia: Be specific and correct vocabulary (e.g., say 'cartoons' not 'cattle'). Begin with a clear statement, then give details about who shares the hobby, what exactly you watch, and a typical routine. Keep sentences concise and use linking words (for example, so).

Ejemplo: Yes, my sister and I share the same hobby of watching cartoons together. For example, we both enjoy Detective Conan and often spend Sunday evenings sitting on the sofa and watching several episodes while eating snacks. This is a nice way for us to relax and bond.

× Definitely a big yeah.

✓ Definitely, yes.

The original is informal and ungrammatical. 'A big yeah' is not standard English. Use 'Definitely, yes' or 'Definitely' to express strong agreement. Keep responses concise in speaking tests.

× playing football with my friend or reading when I have more time Yeah.

✓ playing football with my friends or reading when I have more time.

Use plural 'friends' if referring to more than one friend or when speaking generally. Also add a period instead of 'Yeah' mid-sentence. Ensure preposition 'with' is followed by the correct noun form.

× And something is just like playing outside with my friend, like football, volleyball or something like that or just like sitting in the coffee and like.

✓ Also I like playing outside with my friends, such as football or volleyball, or just sitting in a coffee shop.

'Something is just like' is redundant and awkward. Use 'I like' to state preferences. 'My friend' should be plural if general. 'Sitting in the coffee' is incorrect; use 'a coffee shop' or 'a cafe' with the article 'a' and correct noun 'shop'.

× Yeah, when I were a child.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child.

Use 'was' with the singular first-person subject 'I' in the past tense. 'Were' is incorrect here unless using subjunctive or plural subjects.

× When I was a kid, I have a hobby of listening to music.

✓ When I was a kid, I had a hobby of listening to music.

The time clause 'When I was a kid' refers to the past, so the main clause should use past tense 'had' rather than present 'have'.

× I like them because it's like make me feel very relaxed and she's more energetic.

✓ I liked it because it made me feel very relaxed and more energetic.

Mismatch of pronouns and tenses: 'music' is singular (use 'it'), and past context requires past tense verbs 'liked' and 'made'. 'She's' is incorrect; likely meant 'I became' or 'I felt more energetic' — corrected to 'more energetic'.

× Like for example, when I take a shower always, like when I was a kid, I take a shower and I took a shower and always listening.

✓ For example, when I took a shower as a kid, I was always listening to music.

Maintain past tense 'took' and 'was listening' for past habits. Place adverb 'always' before the verb 'listening' as 'always listening' or 'was always listening to music' for correct adverb placement.

× Yeah, I like I have enjoyed listening to music when I was a kid and until now.

✓ Yes, I have enjoyed listening to music since I was a kid and still do now.

Use present perfect 'have enjoyed' with 'since' to indicate an action from past to present. 'When I was a kid and until now' is awkward; use 'since I was a kid' and 'still do' for clarity.

× It's like my favorite hobbies in in my free time.

✓ It's like my favorite hobby in my free time.

If referring to a single activity, use singular 'hobby' and include 'my' correctly. Do not repeat words ('in in'). If multiple hobbies, rephrase to 'They are my favorite hobbies'.

× So it's make me feel relaxed and it connect me with the like Ginger like it can help me to can build a conversation or build a relationship with the.

✓ So it makes me feel relaxed and connects me with others; it can help me start conversations and build relationships.

Use third-person singular verbs 'makes' and 'connects' to agree with subject 'it' (music). Remove extraneous words ('the like Ginger', duplicate 'can'). Use 'others' instead of incomplete phrase.

× Uh, yeah. I, I guess like me and my sister have a same hobbyist, like watching the cattle.

✓ Uh, yeah. My sister and I share the same hobby, watching cartoons.

Use 'My sister and I' for proper pronoun order. 'Share the same hobby' is idiomatic. 'Hobbyist' is wrong; use 'hobby'. 'Watching the cattle' is likely mispronounced—'cartoons' fits context (Detective Conan).

× And our favorite film is maybe it's Detective Conan.

✓ Our favorite film is probably Detective Conan.

Avoid redundant 'is maybe it's'; use 'probably' or 'maybe' before the clause. Remove extra pronoun 'it's'.

× And we always like, like, spend more time in the weekend to can like, sit in the chair and watch this movie together.

✓ We usually spend more time on weekends sitting in a chair and watching this movie together.

'In the weekend' should be 'on weekends' or 'at the weekend'. Remove incorrect 'to can'; use gerund 'sitting' and 'watching' to express activities. 'Usually' or 'always' can be used; keep one. Avoid filler 'like'.