Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答が断片的で文法や語彙の誤りが多く、情報の結びつきが不明瞭です。まず最初に簡潔なテーマ文（I enjoy reading comics.）を言い、その後で1〜2文で理由や具体例を述べましょう。接続語（because, so, for example, my favorite is）を使って文をつなぎ、固有名詞は正確に言うこと（キャラクター名や作品名）。また、文は5文以内に抑えて冗長さを避けます。発音が不明瞭な固有名詞はゆっくりはっきり発音しましょう。

Ejemplo: I enjoy reading comics, especially Hunter x Hunter. I started it because my father recommended it, and I find the plot thrilling and full of surprises. For example, my favourite character is Killua because he is loyal to Gon and has a complex backstory. I like how the series mixes action with emotional scenes.

Sugerencia: 文法（過去形の使用）や語順の誤りが目立ちます。過去のことを話すときは過去形を使い、1文目で直接答え、その後に具体的なゲーム名や頻度、親の反応を理由として説明しましょう。接続詞（for example, but, so）を適切に使い、冗長な語句は省きます。発音と語の選び方（scolded → told us not to play, played Mario）を自然な表現に直してください。

Ejemplo: Yes, when I was a child I played video games with my sister. We often played Mario and Donkey Kong together. However, our parents didn't like us playing for long, so they often told us to stop after a short time. Despite that, we had a lot of fun playing on weekends.

Sugerencia: 意味不明なフレーズが混ざっており（Seaside wears a chose）、文の流れが崩れています。まず主題文でピアノが子供の頃から続けている趣味であることを示し、続けて学び始めた年齢、継続状況、具体的な曲名やその曲が特別な理由（家族のパーティーで演奏したなど）を述べましょう。時制の一貫性（started → past, have practised → present perfect）にも注意してください。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have played the piano since childhood. I started lessons when I was about six years old and I still practice regularly. My favourite piece is Fur Elise because I performed it at a family party and it was a very memorable moment for me.

Sugerencia: 内容が混乱しており、家族との共通点が明確に伝わりません。まず直接に『はい、姉（妹）と同じ趣味がある』と述べ、その後にどの趣味が共通か、年齢差や一緒にどんな活動をするか（セッションで演奏する）を具体例で説明してください。不要なフレーズや曖昧な表現（we are almost same Asians, this week he put up this spinal）は避け、簡潔で論理的な構成にすることが重要です。

Ejemplo: Yes, I share some hobbies with my sister. We both play the piano, although I am one year older than her. My sister also plays the drums, so sometimes we have music sessions together at home and practise songs as a small band.

× Yes, I like reading comics especially I love Hunter Hunter.

✓ Yes, I like reading comics; especially, I love Hunter x Hunter.

The sentence has awkward coordination and missing punctuation; use a semicolon or full stop to separate two independent clauses and correct the title to 'Hunter x Hunter'. Use of commas or connectors improves clarity.

× My father recommended me this book, this comic and I wanted it's really thrilling and exciting story.

✓ My father recommended this comic to me, and I thought its story was really thrilling and exciting.

Use the correct indirect object order 'recommended this comic to me' rather than 'recommended me this book'. 'I wanted' is incorrect here; use 'I thought' to express opinion. Replace contraction 'it's' with possessive 'its'. Use past tense 'was' to describe the story when discovered.

× And my favorite character is Kira, he is the best friend of main character Kong and I have Naruto grips of him.

✓ My favorite character is Kira; he is the best friend of the main character, Gon, and I have many Naruto-style posters of him.

Use 'the main character' with the definite article. The name likely is 'Gon' (Hunter x Hunter). 'Naruto grips' is unclear; replace with a meaningful noun like 'Naruto-style posters' or 'fan items'. Add commas and correct noun forms.

× Yes, when I was a child I like playing video games with my sister.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked playing video games with my sister.

The time reference 'when I was a child' requires past tense; change 'like' to past 'liked'.

× We often played said by Mario or Donkey Kong and but my parents didn't like playing us the games for a long time, so we usually scolded by stop playing video games.

✓ We often played games like Super Mario or Donkey Kong, but my parents did not allow us to play for a long time, so they usually scolded us and told us to stop playing video games.

The original has multiple problems: word order and choice ('played said by' should be 'played games like'), conjunction redundancy ('and but'), incorrect verb and object order ('didn't like playing us the games' -> 'did not allow us to play'), passive misuse ('scolded by stop' incorrect) and missing infinitive. Rephrase to clear active constructions.

× Yes, Seaside wears a chose. I like playing the piano.

✓ Yes. Since childhood, I have liked playing the piano.

The original 'Seaside wears a chose' is unintelligible; interpret as 'since childhood'. Use present perfect 'have liked' to indicate an activity started in the past and continuing to present. Keep 'I like playing the piano' as main idea.

× I started learning piano from about 6 years old and I keep practicing piano for now and.

✓ I started learning the piano at about six years old, and I have continued practicing the piano until now.

Use 'at' with ages: 'at six years old'. Use present perfect continuous or present perfect: 'have continued practicing' to show ongoing action. Remove extra 'and' and add articles 'the piano'.

× My favorite song is favorite song and it was very memorable song for me because I played it in my family party.

✓ My favorite song is 'My Favorite Song', and it is very memorable to me because I played it at a family party.

Avoid repetition; include article 'a' before 'family party' becomes 'at a family party'. Use present tense 'is' for favorite song and 'is memorable' if still memorable. Clarify phrasing 'it was very memorable song for me' to 'it is very memorable to me'.

× Yes. Hmm actually playing the piano is the same holiday with my sister and we are almost same Asians.

✓ Yes. Actually, playing the piano is the same hobby as my sister's, and we are both of Asian descent.

Replace 'holiday' with 'hobby'. Use comparative structure 'the same hobby as my sister's'. 'We are almost same Asians' is ungrammatical; express as 'we are both of Asian descent' or 'we are both Asian'.

× I'm one year older than her but we.

✓ I'm one year older than her, but we are close in age.

The sentence is incomplete 'but we.' Complete thought needed; suggest 'we are close in age' or 'we get along well'. Use comma before 'but'.

× But this week he put up this spinal for a long time since we were as a child.

✓ However, my sister has been practicing a difficult piece for a long time, since we were children.

Original is unintelligible: 'put up this spinal' not meaningful. Interpret likely meaning about practicing a difficult piece. Use present perfect 'has been practicing' for an action continuing up to present; plural 'children' for 'we'.

× That's my sister often plays the drum so we usually have session with her.

✓ My sister often plays the drums, so we usually have practice sessions with her.

Remove misplaced 'That's'. Use plural 'drums'. 'Have session' should be 'have practice sessions'. Improve word order and plural nouns.