Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise, natural and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar issues (e.g., "don't have time").

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing. I used to perform at church and local events when I was younger, but now I’m busier so I sing mainly at home, for example while taking a bath or practicing occasionally.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give one specific detail or example, using a linking word to connect ideas. Correct phrasing (e.g., "a national singing competition") and avoid redundancy of repeating previous content exactly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved singing as a child. In fact, I dreamed of entering a national singing competition, but I never had the chance to participate due to lack of opportunities.

Sugerencia: Make sentences simpler and more grammatical. Use linking words for clarity and avoid hesitations and repetition ("it's it's"). Provide one clear reason why you continue the hobby.

Ejemplo: Yes, singing has been my hobby since childhood. I still perform at social events when I’m invited and available because music is an important part of my life and personal journey.

Sugerencia: Provide a concise topic sentence and one specific supporting detail that explains how the family shares the hobby. Avoid filler words like "actually" and slightly restructure for natural flow.

Ejemplo: Yes, my family enjoys singing too. For example, we used to lead worship at our church when I was a child, so music is a shared interest and part of our family tradition.

× But now since I am so busy, I don't have a time for that.

✓ But now, since I am so busy, I don't have time for that.

The phrase 'a time' is incorrect here because 'time' in this sense is an uncountable noun and does not take the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' to form the correct expression 'have time'. Also add a comma after 'now' for clarity.

× But while taking a bath, I sing.

✓ But while taking a bath, I sing.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as present simple to describe a habitual action. No change needed. (Included for completeness; no error under the given list.)

× Just like what I've said, I love singing.

✓ Just like I said, I love singing.

'Just like what I've said' is wordy and slightly awkward. 'Just like I said' is clearer and more natural in spoken English. The original is not ungrammatical, but simplification improves fluency.

× Actually, it has been my dream to join singing competition like the national singing competition, but I didn't have the opportunity to do so.

✓ Actually, it has been my dream to join a singing competition like the national singing competition, but I didn't have the opportunity to do so.

Countable singular nouns such as 'singing competition' require an article. Use 'a singing competition' to indicate one instance of such competitions. Alternatively, 'join singing competitions' (plural) would also work if speaking generally.

× Yes I do and that is singing.

✓ Yes, I do, and that is singing.

Add commas to separate clauses for clearer sentence structure in written form. In speech this may be acceptable without punctuation, but the corrected version is grammatically clearer.

× I used to sing in social events when I was a kid and if now as an adult if I have invited to sing in a social event and I am free, then I do sing.

✓ I used to sing at social events when I was a kid, and now as an adult, if I am invited to sing at a social event and I am free, I will sing.

Multiple problems: 'in social events' should be 'at social events' (preposition use). The clause ordering is awkward and contains redundant 'if'. Use 'if I am invited' (passive voice with 'am invited') and 'I will sing' to express future/conditional willingness. Also add commas to separate clauses. Changes address preposition error (ID 11), sentence structure (ID 26), and appropriate tense for conditional willingness (ID 7).

× I do perform because it's it's my journey.

✓ I perform because it's my journey.

The repetition 'it's it's' is a typo. Remove the duplicate 'it's' to correct the sentence. Also 'I do perform' is emphatic; 'I perform' is more natural.

× Yes we do. We all love to sing.

✓ Yes, we do. We all love to sing.

Add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity. The sentences are otherwise grammatically correct; no subject-verb agreement error. (Included minor punctuation suggestion.)

× In fact, when I was a kid we used to sing in our church and lead the praises and worship.

✓ In fact, when I was a kid, we used to sing in our church and lead the praises and worship.

Add a comma after the adverbial clause for clarity. 'Lead the praises and worship' is acceptable; no article error. (Minor punctuation fix.)

× Actually, my family is musically inclined, that's why.

✓ Actually, my family is musically inclined; that's why.

The original contains a comma splice joining two independent clauses with a comma. Replace the comma with a semicolon or make two sentences: '...musically inclined. That's why.' This fixes sentence structure (ID 26).