Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và mạch lạc: hãy trả lời trực tiếp rồi nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, tần suất, lý do rõ ràng) và tránh lặp từ, dùng liên từ để nối ý. Chú ý ngữ pháp (ví dụ "I find drawing the easiest thing to do" và tránh "I don't know to do anything except drawing"). Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes. My main hobby is drawing, and I usually spend every weekend sketching and painting. I enjoy it because it helps me relax and improve my skills. For example, last weekend I completed a watercolor portrait that I’m really proud of.

Sugerencia: Nói rõ ràng theo cấu trúc: chủ đề rồi chi tiết (khi nào, hoạt động, lý do thay đổi). Tránh lặp và nói lúng túng (loại bỏ "Uh" và lặp "dance club"). Sử dụng linking words như "but" hoặc "however" để liên kết ý. Giữ 2–4 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to enjoy dancing when I was in kindergarten and elementary school, and I even joined a dance club. At that time I was very flexible, but now I hardly dance because I’ve become less fit. However, I still watch dance performances online sometimes.

Sugerencia: Trả lời trực tiếp và dùng thì đúng: bắt đầu với câu chủ đề, rồi dẫn chứng cụ thể (tuổi bắt đầu, hoạt động, kế hoạch tương lai). Sửa ngữ pháp và collocation: "I have loved drawing since I was three"; "in the future I hope to turn it into a career". Hạn chế câu dài và lặp từ.

Ejemplo: Absolutely — I have loved drawing since I was three years old. I still practice regularly, and I hope to turn this hobby into a career in the future by becoming an artist or a fashion designer.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và ngữ pháp: trả lời thẳng rồi giải thích khác biệt cụ thể. Tránh từ không tự nhiên như "become too drawing" và lặp từ. Dùng linking words như "however" hoặc "while" để so sánh. Giữ câu ngắn gọn và rõ ràng.

Ejemplo: Not really. My sisters prefer music and sports — for example, one plays the piano and the other plays tennis — while I enjoy quieter activities like drawing. Although our hobbies differ, we still support each other.

× I make it a hobby to draw every weekend.

✓ I make drawing my hobby every weekend.

The original phrasing uses an awkward structure and incorrect word order. 'Make it a hobby to draw' is unnatural. Use a noun phrase 'drawing' as the object: 'I make drawing my hobby every weekend.' This places the gerund as the activity and correctly links it to 'hobby.' Suggestions: use gerund or noun phrases for activities (e.g., 'I make painting my hobby').

× Uh, this is because I find drawing it the easiest thing to do and I don't know to do anything except drawing.

✓ Uh, this is because I find drawing the easiest thing to do and I don't know how to do anything except draw.

Problems: unnecessary pronoun 'it' after 'drawing' and incorrect structure 'don't know to do.' Use 'find drawing the easiest' (no 'it') and 'don't know how to do anything except draw.' Use base verb after 'except' when referring to actions. Suggestion: remove extra pronouns and use 'how to' after 'don't know.'

× Yes, I used to like dancing, Uh, when I was in kindergarten and elementary school, I joined dance club, Dance club because I at that time I was really flexible, but now I think I gained too much weight to dance.

✓ Yes, I used to like dancing. When I was in kindergarten and elementary school, I joined a dance club because at that time I was really flexible, but now I think I have gained too much weight to dance.

Issues: run-on sentence and missing article 'a' before 'dance club.' Use past perfect or present perfect to show change leading to now: 'I have gained' indicates result affecting present. Also remove repetition and fix word order: 'because at that time I was really flexible.' Suggestion: split into sentences, include articles, and use present perfect for life changes affecting present.

× It would be nothing else but drawing.

✓ It would be nothing other than drawing.

'Nothing else but' is colloquial and slightly awkward. Prefer 'nothing other than' in formal speech. Alternatively simply say 'Nothing but drawing.' Also article usage not needed; this corrects idiom use. Suggestion: use 'nothing but' or 'nothing other than.'

× I love drawings and I was just three years old and now I still continue that hobby.

✓ I have loved drawing since I was three years old, and I still continue that hobby now.

Use present perfect 'have loved' with 'since' to indicate an action starting in the past and continuing to the present. 'Drawings' (plural) awkward—use gerund 'drawing' to mean the activity. 'I was just three years old' should be attached as time reference: 'since I was three years old.' Suggestion: use present perfect for long-term states starting in past.

× For in the futures I will make this hobby to be my career, like to be an artist and fashion designer.

✓ In the future I will turn this hobby into my career, for example becoming an artist and a fashion designer.

Errors: plural 'futures' wrong, awkward phrase 'make this hobby to be my career.' Use 'turn into' and '-ing' or 'becoming' to express future roles. Include articles 'an artist' and 'a fashion designer.' Suggestion: use 'in the future' and 'turn X into Y' or 'make X my career.'

× It is sad to admit that I don't have the same hobbies with my family members.

✓ It is sad to admit that I don't have the same hobbies as my family members.

Use 'the same ... as' to compare; 'same ... with' is incorrect in English. Suggestion: use 'the same hobbies as' or 'share hobbies with.'

× Uh because my sisters, they love music and sport more so they tend to play piano and play tennis while I I just like to sit down and become too drawing.

✓ Because my sisters love music and sports more, they tend to play the piano and play tennis, while I just like to sit down and draw.

Problems: redundant pronoun 'my sisters, they'; 'sport' should be plural 'sports'; missing article 'the' before 'piano'; 'become too drawing' is ungrammatical—use verb 'draw.' Also duplicated 'I I.' Suggestion: remove redundancy, use plural 'sports,' include articles for instruments, and use base verb 'draw' for actions.