Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence naming 2–3 main hobbies, then give one brief reason or example. Avoid grammatical errors and redundant phrases. Use linking words like 'also' or 'sometimes' correctly and keep sentences to a maximum of five.

Ejemplo: I enjoy several hobbies, such as reading, writing, and watching K-dramas. I also listen to music regularly because I like to switch activities often; rotating hobbies helps me stay motivated and try new experiences.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with past tense and avoid fillers. Begin with a clear topic sentence ('As a child I enjoyed...'), then give one specific detail about how or why you liked it. Remove colloquialisms like 'you know' and unclear names (e.g. 'Becky').

Ejemplo: As a child, I loved coloring and drawing. I spent hours filling in picture books because I enjoyed choosing colors and creating neat designs, even though I wasn't confident about freehand drawing.

Sugerencia: Be clear and use correct tense and vocabulary. State the hobby clearly, give a concise reason why you started it, and mention how you continue it now. Avoid unclear phrases like 'reading books I speak with' and 'East words.'

Ejemplo: Yes — I have read since I was a child. I often preferred books to playing outside because reading helped me relax and escape boredom, and I still read regularly now to unwind, especially novels and short stories.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer then support it with specific comparison. Avoid vague phrases like 'it is really bad' and long unclear explanations. Use linking words ('however', 'for example') and keep sentences focused.

Ejemplo: Not really — my family and I prefer different activities. For example, my parents enjoy socializing with friends, while I prefer solitary hobbies like reading. However, sometimes our interests overlap at family gatherings.

× I have a lot of hobbies so much is different like reading books, writing journalism or watching K dramas.

✓ I have a lot of hobbies and many are different, such as reading books, writing journalistic pieces, or watching K-dramas.

The original uses 'so much is different' which is awkward and incorrect. Use 'many are different' to modify 'hobbies'. 'Writing journalism' is better phrased as 'writing journalistic pieces' and 'K dramas' should be 'K-dramas'. Improve word choice and parallel structure.

× And sometimes listening to music is perfect for me because I'm the person who isn't consistent so would like to change my hobbies every period of time so we could have many experience.

✓ Sometimes listening to music is perfect for me because I'm not a consistent person and I like to change my hobbies from time to time so I can have many experiences.

Problems include missing subject for 'would like' and incorrect phrases. Use 'I'm not a consistent person' (adjective), 'I like to change' (subject + verb), 'from time to time' (idiomatic), and plural 'experiences'. Also avoid 'every period of time'.

× My hobby when I was a child is, let me remember, 'cause it's a long period ago, I guess it's coloring as Becky was a child.

✓ My hobby when I was a child was, let me remember, coloring; I guess I colored a lot as a child.

Tense inconsistency: talking about childhood requires past tense 'was' not 'is'. 'Coloring as Becky was a child' is unclear; replace with 'I colored a lot as a child'. Remove colloquial ''cause it's a long period ago' or rephrase.

× I really like to coloring and drawing.

✓ I really liked coloring and drawing.

When referring to past habits use past tense 'liked'. Also after 'like' do not use 'to' with gerund; use 'liked coloring' or 'like coloring'. Here past context requires 'liked'.

× However, I'm not good at drawing, so I prefer coloring the color book, you know?

✓ However, I wasn't good at drawing, so I preferred coloring in coloring books.

Maintain past tense when discussing childhood: 'wasn't' and 'preferred'. Also 'coloring the color book' is awkward; use 'coloring in coloring books' or 'coloring books'.

× I guess the hobby that I remember since childhood is reading books I speak with.

✓ I guess the hobby I remember from childhood is reading books.

Use past/time-appropriate preposition 'from childhood'. 'Reading books I speak with' is incorrect and unclear; remove 'I speak with'.

× I was a child, I barely play with my friends so reading book would be a great choice to relax with our annoying to my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I hardly played with my friends, so reading books was a great way to relax and was less annoying to my parents.

Use 'When I was a child' and past tense 'played'. 'Barely play' -> 'hardly played'. 'Reading book' -> 'reading books'. Fix preposition and structure: 'a great way to relax and was less annoying to my parents' clarifies meaning.

× And currently I still read books at East words to relax me.

✓ Currently I still read books in my free time to relax.

'At East words' is unclear and likely incorrect; use 'in my free time'. Maintain present tense 'I still read books'. Use 'to relax' not 'to relax me'.

× I guess my family members have a totally different taste of hobbies so for me it is really bad.

✓ I guess my family members have totally different tastes in hobbies, which is frustrating for me.

'A totally different taste of hobbies' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'tastes' and preposition 'in hobbies'. Also 'so for me it is really bad' is informal; replace with 'which is frustrating for me' for clarity.

× For my parents it is socializing with their friends because we are all in a different generation so it depends on the surrounding at that time so it could be the same.

✓ For my parents, it's socializing with their friends because we belong to different generations, and it depends on the social environment at the time, so sometimes our hobbies can be the same.

Fix prepositions and collocations: 'belong to different generations' and 'social environment' are clearer than 'we are all in a different generation' and 'surrounding'. Clarify 'so it could be the same' to 'sometimes our hobbies can be the same'.