Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần cải thiện cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ hợp lý để làm câu mạch lạc hơn. Nên tách ý thành câu chủ đề và 1-2 câu bổ sung cụ thể (ví dụ loại sách, lý do yêu thích) và hạn chế độ dài dưới 5 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Recently I prefer reading Chinese cultivation novels because I enjoy the characters' development and complex plots. Moreover, these stories often reflect real-life philosophies, which makes them thought-provoking and enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Cần chú ý thì quá khứ (had, played), sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn và đưa thông tin cụ thể (ví dụ tuổi, tần suất). Tránh câu rời rạc; nối các ý bằng liên từ để mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. As a child I often played with Lego and action video games, especially Mario titles. I played them almost every day because they were simple but very entertaining.

Sugerencia: Cần dùng thì đúng (change -> changed), sửa cấu trúc và dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Nên nêu ý chính ngắn gọn rồi giải thích bằng 1-2 câu hỗ trợ với ví dụ cụ thể về lúc nào thay đổi.

Ejemplo: Not really. My hobbies have changed over time; when I was younger I played many video games, but recently I have become more interested in reading novels. For example, I only started reading cultivation novels in my teens.

Sugerencia: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt (ví dụ 'my sister and my mother' unclear), dùng liên từ để liệt kê rõ ràng. Nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể về sở thích từng thành viên và kết luận ngắn gọn.

Ejemplo: No, we don't. My mother and sister enjoy reading, I like listening to music, and my father spends his free time researching the market. Therefore, we rarely share the same hobbies.

× Well yes, apart from playing video game which I tend to spend less time now, today I do fancy myself some reading time, especially the Chinese cultivation novel.

✓ Well yes, apart from playing video games which I tend to spend less time on now, today I fancy having some reading time, especially Chinese cultivation novels.

The noun 'video game' needs plural form 'video games' (count noun) and requires the preposition 'on' after 'spend time on' (verb + -ing structure). 'Do fancy myself some reading time' is ungrammatical: use 'fancy having some reading time' (verb + -ing / gerund structure). Also use plural for 'novel' to match general preference. Suggestion: use 'spend less time on', 'fancy having', and plural nouns where general habits are described.

× I enjoy reading the character growth, the complex complicated scenario that are they are growing through and reflection of real life philosophy around novel.

✓ I enjoy reading about character growth, the complex scenarios they go through, and reflections of real-life philosophy in the novels.

Use 'reading about' to indicate the topic. 'Character growth' is fine but needs 'about'. 'Complex complicated' is redundant; choose one adjective. 'Scenario' should be plural to match 'they'. The clause 'that are they are growing through' is ungrammatical; use 'they go through'. 'Reflection of real life philosophy around novel' should be 'reflections of real-life philosophy in the novels.' Suggestions: avoid redundant adjectives, ensure plurality agreement, and use clear prepositions ('in', 'about').

× Yes, I have plenty of hobby playing with Legos, playing video games, but reading wasn't one of them.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of hobbies: playing with Legos and playing video games, but reading wasn't one of them.

'Plenty of' requires a plural noun 'hobbies'. Tense should match past context 'I had' because question asks about childhood. Use a colon or list to separate items. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and past tense for past habits.

× When I was little I spent a lot of time playing Mario's solid gears, a lot of action game like that.

✓ When I was little I spent a lot of time playing Mario's games, a lot of action games like that.

'Mario's solid gears' is likely incorrect noun choice; 'Mario's games' is clearer. 'Game' should be plural to match 'a lot of'. Ensure correct noun choice and plurality. Suggestion: name the games precisely (e.g., 'Super Mario') and keep plural for 'games'.

× This was quite simple, but interest.

✓ This was quite simple, but interesting.

'Interest' is a noun; the sentence needs the adjective 'interesting' to modify the preceding clause. Suggestion: use correct adjective form to describe something.

× Not really, my hobby change tend to change overtime.

✓ Not really, my hobbies tend to change over time.

Subject-verb agreement and noun number: use plural 'hobbies' with plural verb 'tend'. 'Change' is unnecessary and redundant. 'Overtime' (one word) means extra hours; use 'over time' (two words) to mean gradually. Suggestion: use correct pluralization and 'over time'.

× Umm as I growing up I realize that they are more to playing video game and right at the moment I enjoy reading novel more than anything, which is a thing that didn't exist back in my childhood.

✓ As I grew up I realized that I was more into playing video games, and right now I enjoy reading novels more than anything, which was not something I did in my childhood.

Tense sequence: use past 'grew up' and 'realized' to describe change. 'More into' is correct phrase. Use plural 'video games' and 'novels.' 'Right at the moment' should be 'right now.' 'Didn't exist' is unnatural for a habit; use 'was not something I did.' Suggestion: maintain correct past tense for past developments and correct idiomatic expressions ('more into', 'right now').

× Well, sadly no. We all have our different view and share of leisure time activity.

✓ Well, sadly no. We all have different views and types of leisure activities.

'Our different view' should be plural 'different views.' 'Share of leisure time activity' is unclear; use 'types of leisure activities' or 'different leisure activities.' Suggestion: match plurality and use clearer noun phrases.

× I myself fancy reading my sister and my mother, I fancy listening to music while my father just, you know, researching about the marketplace and stuff like that.

✓ I myself enjoy reading like my sister and mother; I enjoy listening to music, while my father, you know, researches the market and that kind of stuff.

'Fancy reading my sister and my mother' incorrectly implies reading people; use 'enjoy reading like my sister and mother' or 'I enjoy reading, like my sister and mother do.' 'Researching about' is incorrect; use 'researches the market' (verb form 'researches' for third person). Also split into clearer clauses. Suggestion: avoid ambiguity by clarifying comparisons and use correct third-person verb forms.

× So we don't really have a common interest.

✓ So we don't really share a common interest.

Original is understandable but 'share a common interest' is a more natural collocation. Suggestion: use natural verb-noun collocations for clarity.