Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Also correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and remove fragments.

Ejemplo: I enjoy journaling because it helps me manage stress. For example, when my mind feels crowded with worries, I write them down to clarify my thoughts, and then I feel calmer. As a result, journaling has become a daily habit that helps me relax and organize my day.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence then two specific details. Use correct tense consistency (past tense) and link ideas smoothly. Avoid fragments and be concise; explain the connection to current hobbies with a linking phrase.

Ejemplo: As a child, I loved playing teacher with my sister and cousins because I enjoyed preparing simple lesson plans. For instance, I would write little activities and grade their work, which made me feel responsible and creative. This early interest in planning and writing explains why I still enjoy journaling today.

Sugerencia: Be direct and correct grammar. Use one clear topic sentence, then support with specific reasons and an example. Fix awkward phrasing (e.g., "penmanship" repeated; tense and article errors) and avoid sentence fragments.

Ejemplo: Yes — I have loved writing since childhood, especially practising neat penmanship. My family often complimented my handwriting because my mother taught me careful writing habits. For example, I still take time to write neatly in my journal because it makes the pages feel more personal and satisfying.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and briefly, then give one or two specific contrasts using linking words. Correct repetition and sentence fragments. Use clearer vocabulary to describe personality differences and explain why journaling suits you.

Ejemplo: No, we have different hobbies. For example, my sister enjoys socialising and going out with friends, whereas I am more introverted and prefer reflecting alone. Therefore, I usually write in my journal to process my thoughts instead of discussing them with others.

× We never feel overwhelmed or I feel that everything.

✓ Sometimes I feel overwhelmed or like everything is happening at once.

The original sentence mixes tenses and subjects ('We never feel' vs 'I feel') causing confusion. Use consistent first-person perspective and present tense: 'Sometimes I feel overwhelmed' and add a clear complement 'like everything is happening at once.' This clarifies meaning and corrects subject/tense inconsistency.

× There's so many things are happening in my life.

✓ There are so many things happening in my life.

The original combines 'There’s' (there is) with a plural noun and an extra verb 'are,' resulting in ungrammatical structure. Use 'There are' for plural subjects and avoid repeating 'are': 'There are so many things happening in my life.'

× I tend to pick up my pen and write about the things that I've been bothering me or write about everything that I am anxious about.

✓ I tend to pick up my pen and write about the things that have been bothering me or about everything that I am anxious about.

The phrase 'that I've been bothering me' incorrectly uses the subject and verb; use the passive/relative structure 'that have been bothering me' to show things causing bother. Also add 'about' before the second object for parallelism: 'write about the things... or about everything...'.

× This allows me to breathe, to relax, pause and to.

✓ This allows me to breathe, relax, pause, and let everything out of my head.

The original ends abruptly with 'and to' and lacks an object. Provide parallel verb forms ('breathe, relax, pause') and complete the idea with 'let everything out of my head.'

× Everything out of my head.

✓ It helps me get everything out of my head.

Fragment lacking a verb. Combine with a helping phrase 'It helps me get...' to form a complete sentence and link meaning to previous statement.

× When I was a child, I remember one of my favorite things to do is to play teacher and student with my sister and my cousins.

✓ When I was a child, I remember one of my favorite things to do was to play teacher and student with my sister and my cousins.

The memory refers to the past, so maintain past tense: change 'is' to 'was' to match 'When I was a child' and 'I remember.'

× Part of the tasks that I do during the game is to prepare a Lesson plan, and that is one of the things that I enjoy doing.

✓ Part of the tasks that I did during the game was preparing a lesson plan, and that was one of the things I enjoyed doing.

Maintain past tense for childhood activities: change 'do' to 'did,' 'is' to 'was,' and use gerund 'preparing' for natural phrasing. Also use lowercase 'lesson plan.'

× And I think it is connected to the way that I love Journey. Now.

✓ And I think it is connected to the way that I love journaling now.

'Journey' appears to be a misspelling of 'journaling' or incorrect noun. Combine 'now' into sentence and use 'journaling' to match context. Ensure present tense 'I love journaling now.'

× I still, I'm still that kid who loves to write, who loves to pick up my pen and do it and write about the things that I wanted to share.

✓ I'm still that kid who loves to write, who loves to pick up my pen and write about the things that I want to share.

Avoid redundancy ('I still, I'm still') and keep present tense consistent: 'I want to share' instead of 'I wanted to share.' Remove unnecessary 'do it.'

× A hobby that I have had since childhood is writing.

✓ A hobby that I have had since childhood is writing.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses present perfect 'have had' to indicate a hobby continuing from childhood, so no change is needed.

× I love my penmanship.

✓ I love my handwriting.

'Penmanship' is correct but less common; 'handwriting' is more natural in conversation. This is a style suggestion rather than a strict grammar correction.

× Everybody praises my penmanship, saying that I have a pretty penmanship and a right so well and think it's because I have a great discipline and my mother taught me so well when I was a kid and that is probably.

✓ Everybody praises my handwriting, saying that I have pretty handwriting and write so well. I think it's because I have great discipline and my mother taught me well when I was a kid.

The original has awkward and ungrammatical phrases: 'a pretty penmanship' and 'a right so well' are incorrect. Use 'pretty handwriting' and 'write so well.' Combine clauses into coherent sentences and remove the trailing 'and that is probably.'

× Be true also until now that I love journaling and I really appreciate when I have a good handwriting in my journals.

✓ This is still true now: I love journaling, and I really appreciate having good handwriting in my journals.

The original fragment 'Be true also until now' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'This is still true now' and use 'having good handwriting' (gerund) rather than 'when I have a good handwriting.'

× I don't think that we have the same hobbies.

✓ I don't think we have the same hobbies.

Sentence is grammatically correct; slight style improvement removes 'that.' No pronoun error.

× My sister actually loves going out with her friends and talking with them and spending time with them.

✓ My sister actually loves going out with her friends, talking with them, and spending time with them.

Grammar is correct; improved punctuation and parallel structure with commas enhance clarity.

× While I am the more introverted one, I tend to process this on my own.

✓ While I am the more introverted one, I tend to process things on my own.

Use 'process things' rather than 'process this' for natural phrasing. Tense and subject are fine.

× I I tend to think about things on my own, which is why I do love journaling and.

✓ I tend to think about things on my own, which is why I do love journaling

Remove duplicated 'I' and the trailing 'and.' The sentence should end without 'and' unless another clause follows.

× Would love writing it out instead of talking about it to people.

✓ I would love writing it out instead of talking about it with people.

Fragment lacking subject—add 'I' and adjust preposition to 'with people.' Keep modal 'would' with base verb 'love' and gerund 'writing.'