Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và trật tự từ, sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tránh lỗi thì: sửa "the one that make me" → "the one that makes me", "I usually cooking" → "I usually cook", và dùng tối đa 3–4 câu súc tích. Thêm liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để liên kết lý do và thói quen.

Ejemplo: I enjoy several hobbies, but the one that makes me feel most relaxed is cooking. I usually cook after I finish my classes and also after work because it helps me unwind. Sometimes I try new recipes at the weekend to improve my skills.

Sugerencia: Giảm lặp từ, chỉnh ngữ pháp quá khứ và thì hoàn chỉnh: dùng "I had" cho quá khứ, tránh tiếng ừ ờ (fillers), sửa "I just learn" → "I learned" và hoàn thiện ý bằng cách nêu thêm chi tiết cụ thể như nơi hoặc lý do thích. Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a hobby of cycling as a child. I learned to ride a bike when I was in third grade and I used to cycle around my neighborhood every afternoon because it was fun and good exercise.

Sugerencia: Tránh lặp từ và hoàn thiện cấu trúc câu: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành nếu còn tiếp tục ("I've had... since childhood") và mô tả cụ thể hơn (ví dụ loại sticker, lý do). Sửa ngữ pháp như "They all gave me comfort" → "They give me comfort" nếu vẫn còn sở thích.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have collected stickers since I was a child. I've always loved small, cute stickers like those on egg-shaped toys because they bring me comfort and remind me of happy memories.

Sugerencia: Rút gọn câu và sửa ngữ pháp: dùng "I don't" not "I do not have any hobby that share", thay bằng "I don't share hobbies with my family" và giải thích ngắn lý do hoặc cách các bạn vẫn tương tác (ví dụ: discuss or try each other's hobbies). Dùng 2 câu, rõ ràng và mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: I don't really share the same hobbies with my family, but we often talk about our interests. For example, my sister enjoys painting while I like cooking, and we sometimes try each other's hobbies for fun.

× Yes I do, I have a lot of hobbies but the one that make me feel most comfortable is cooking.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a lot of hobbies, but the one that makes me feel most comfortable is cooking.

The subject 'one' is singular so the verb must be 'makes' (third-person singular). Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with the subject; when the subject is 'one', use singular verbs (he/she/it form).

× I usually cooking when I just finished my class and after work.

✓ I usually cook when I have just finished my class and after work.

After 'usually' we need the base verb 'cook' (not 'cooking'). Also time reference 'when I just finished' mixes tenses; use present perfect 'have just finished' to indicate recent completion. Suggestion: use simple present after adverbs like 'usually' and use present perfect for recent actions.

× Yes I do have umm. My most favorite hob favorite hobby hobby is cycling.

✓ Yes, I do. My favorite hobby is cycling.

Redundant words 'most favorite' and repeated fragments should be removed. Use 'favorite' alone. 'Do have' is acceptable but simpler 'do' or 'I have' is fine. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and repetition; say 'My favorite hobby is...'.

× I just learn how to cycle when I at the 3rd grade and then and from.

✓ I learned how to cycle when I was in the third grade.

The action occurred in the past, so use past tense 'learned'. Also need 'was in' for grade level and remove extraneous words 'and then and from'. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past events and use 'was in the third grade' to indicate school year.

× Oh of course I do have it is a collecting collecting stickers.

✓ Oh, of course I do. It is collecting stickers.

Original repeats words and mixes clauses. 'Do have it is a collecting' is ungrammatical. Split into two sentences: affirmation 'I do' and 'It is collecting stickers.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear clause boundaries.

× I love sticker eggs, especially cuteness and tiny tiny stickers.

✓ I love stickers, especially cute, tiny ones.

'Sticker eggs' is unclear; likely 'stickers'. Use adjective 'cute' not noun 'cuteness' and avoid repeating 'tiny'. Use 'ones' to replace 'stickers'. Suggestion: use adjectives before nouns and avoid redundancy.

× They are all gave me so comfort and.

✓ They all give me a lot of comfort.

Mixes past 'gave' with present 'are'. Correct structure is present simple 'give' and use 'a lot of comfort' or 'so much comfort'. Also remove trailing 'and'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and complete the sentence.

× I do not have any hobby that share with my family's members or fam familiar with them, but we are still share to each other hobby together to talk about them.

✓ I do not have any hobbies that I share with my family members, but we still share our hobbies with each other and talk about them.

Use plural 'hobbies'. Need subject 'I' before 'share' and possessive 'my family members' not 'my family's members'. 'Familiar with them' is incorrect here. Use 'share our hobbies with each other' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure correct pronoun placement, plural forms, and clear expressions like 'share our hobbies'.