Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法や語順の誤り、冗長さ、論理の繋がりの欠如があります。まず主題文で明確に答え（Yes + frequency）を示し、続けて理由を1〜2文で述べてください。語彙は「maintain」や「last」を正しく使い、不要な繰り返しを避けましょう。また文は5文以内に収め、接続詞（because, so, therefore）で論理をつなげてください。具体的には「I don’t buy them often because I take care of them, so they last longer.」のように整理しましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially leather ones. I don’t buy them often because I take good care of my shoes, so they last a long time. For that reason, I prefer to invest in quality pairs rather than buying cheap ones frequently.

Sugerencia: 内容は明確で経験を述べていますが、同じ表現の繰り返しやあいまいさが目立ちます。主文で直接答え、その後に理由を一つか二つの具体例で述べてください。繋ぎ言葉（however, although, so）を使うと流れが良くなります。サイズやブランドについて話す際は具体的な語彙（size, width, return policy）を使い、曖昧な音声填充（umm）を避けましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. However, it can be difficult to get the right fit because sizes vary between brands. To avoid problems, I check size guides and customer reviews, and I prefer shops with a good return policy.

Sugerencia: 金額は伝わりますが、言い換えや余分な発話（umm, H, uh）が多く、文法が不自然です。主文で直接金額を示し、その理由を続けて述べてください。通貨の表現は「about ¥30,000 to ¥50,000」や「between ¥30,000 and ¥50,000」と明確に言い、なぜその金額か（quality, durability）を説明すると高評価です。

Ejemplo: I usually spend about ¥30,000 to ¥50,000 on shoes because I prefer high-quality leather pairs that last longer. I see it as an investment in comfort and durability.

Sugerencia: 考えは明確ですが、繰り返しや余分な音声が多く、表現がやや冗長です。まず簡潔に好みを述べ（I prefer comfortable/practical shoes）、続けて一つか二つの具体的理由（for walking long distances, for work）を述べましょう。接続詞（because, so）を使い文を整え、不要な挿入語（uh, umm）を減らしてください。

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable, practical shoes because I often walk long distances and need support. Even if fashionable shoes look nice, I rarely choose them if they make me uncomfortable, since I want footwear I can wear all day.

× Yes I do, and especially I like to buy leather shoes and maintenance them and I don't buy them so often because I use it carefully and maintaining them and it won't be.

✓ Yes, I do, especially I like to buy leather shoes and maintain them. I don't buy them very often because I use them carefully and maintain them.

The student used the noun 'maintenance' where the verb 'maintain' is required and mixed verb forms. Use the base verb after 'like to' (like to buy) and the base verb 'maintain' rather than noun 'maintenance'. Also keep consistent pronouns: 'them' for shoes, not 'it'. Break the run-on sentence into two sentences for clarity and use 'very often' instead of 'so often' for naturalness. Suggestions: replace 'maintenance' with 'maintain', use 'them' consistently, split into two sentences.

× Yes I have. It's quite difficult to buy shoes online because it's sometimes difficult to find ones fit that is that fits you. But umm, I know the brands and the sizes.

✓ Yes, I have. It's quite difficult to buy shoes online because it's sometimes difficult to find ones that fit you. But I know the brands and the sizes.

Redundant and incorrect word order 'ones fit that is that fits you' should be 'ones that fit you' or simply 'that fit you'. Remove 'umm' and unnecessary filler. Also add comma after 'Yes'. Suggestions: use 'that fit you' for relative clause and remove duplicate words.

× Umm, I like leather shoes and they are very expensive, so about 3 H uh ¥30,000 to ¥50,000 I usually spend them.

✓ I like leather shoes and they are very expensive, so I usually spend about ¥30,000 to ¥50,000.

Incorrect placement of amount and wrong object pronoun 'them'. Money is not 'spent them'; use 'spend' with no object pronoun or 'spend' money. Place the phrase 'about ¥30,000 to ¥50,000' after 'spend'. Remove fillers and extra characters. Suggestions: say 'I usually spend about ¥30,000 to ¥50,000.'

× Umm, that's a tough one, but I would prefer, uh, practical shoes That is because, uh, shoes are the means of practical use, so if you don't feel, uh, comfortable, you don't wear them.

✓ That's a tough one, but I would prefer practical shoes because shoes are for practical use; if you don't feel comfortable, you won't wear them.

Run-on sentence with awkward phrasing 'shoes are the means of practical use' and incorrect capitalization. 'That is because' can be simplified to 'because'. Use 'you won't wear them' for future likelihood. Remove fillers. Suggestions: simplify to 'I would prefer practical shoes because shoes are for practical use; if you don't feel comfortable, you won't wear them.'