Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it could be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. However, I usually prefer listening to music since it lets me enjoy various styles and artists, which broadens my musical appreciation.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and lacks linking words for coherence. Use past tense consistently and connect your ideas with linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your response clearer and more logical.

Ejemplo: Yes, I tried to learn singing when I was a kid, but I didn't enjoy it because I lacked confidence in my voice. Therefore, I stopped practicing and focused on hobbies that interested me more.

Sugerencia: Your answer is well-structured and coherent with good use of linking words. To improve, try to vary your vocabulary slightly and correct minor grammatical errors, such as 'sing for them feels' should be 'singing for them feels'.

Ejemplo: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because it feels more personal and meaningful. Since they know me well and appreciate my efforts, their support encourages me to improve and enjoy singing even more.

Sugerencia: Your answer is brief and contains errors ('that thing', 'sin' instead of 'sing', 'relieve' should be 'relieves'). To improve, provide a clear topic sentence, use correct vocabulary, and add supporting details with linking words to explain why singing brings happiness.

Ejemplo: Definitely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and moods. Moreover, singing can relieve stress and improve one's mental well-being.

× So eventually stop practicing and focus on activities I like more.

✓ So eventually I stopped practicing and focused on activities I liked more.

The sentence is describing a past event, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'Stop' and 'focus' are present tense verbs and need to be changed to 'stopped' and 'focused' to match the past context.

× Sing for them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well and appreciate my efforts.

✓ Singing for them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well and appreciate my efforts.

The sentence lacks a proper subject. 'Sing for them' is incorrect as a subject phrase; it should be the gerund form 'Singing for them' to function as the subject of the sentence.

× I would like to sing for my family and close friends. Sing for them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well and appreciate my efforts.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and close friends. Singing for them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well and appreciate my efforts.

The second sentence incorrectly uses 'Sing for them' as a subject. It should be 'Singing for them' to correctly refer to the action as a noun (gerund). This is a pronoun and verb form issue.

× I think that thing can bring happiness to people because when you sin, you express yourself, your moods and it just kind of relieve your mind.

✓ I think that singing can bring happiness to people because when you sing, you express yourself, your moods, and it just kind of relieves your mind.

The word 'thing' is vague and incorrect here; it should be 'singing' to refer to the activity. Also, 'sin' is a typo for 'sing'. The verb 'relieve' should be 'relieves' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The sentence also needs commas for clarity.