Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, say "I don't like singing because it makes me feel embarrassed and stressed, so I usually avoid it."

Ejemplo: I don't enjoy singing because it makes me feel embarrassed and stressed, so I usually avoid it.

Sugerencia: Your answer provides relevant information but could be clearer and more coherent. Use linking words and correct grammar. For example, "Yes, I learned to sing when I was in primary school because my parents encouraged me to attend music classes, where I also learned to play other instruments."

Ejemplo: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in primary school because my parents encouraged me to attend music classes, where I also learned to play other instruments.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to directly answer the question and provide supporting details with linking words. For example, "I am not keen on singing, so I don't have anyone in particular I want to sing for. Instead, I prefer listening to audiobooks and broadcasts."

Ejemplo: I am not keen on singing, so I don't have anyone in particular I want to sing for. Instead, I prefer listening to audiobooks and broadcasts.

Sugerencia: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better vocabulary. Use linking words and avoid repetition. For example, "Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to individuals because many people feel joyful when they listen to songs, such as pop, folk, or traditional music."

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to individuals because many people feel joyful when they listen to songs, such as pop, folk, or traditional music.

× Personally, I don't like singing because when I hear a music that time I feel so much embarrassed under stress.

✓ Personally, I don't like singing because when I hear music at that time, I feel very embarrassed and stressed.

The word 'music' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by the article 'a'. Also, 'that time' should be 'at that time' to correctly indicate the time reference. Additionally, 'so much embarrassed under stress' is awkward; 'very embarrassed and stressed' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in my primary school level.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in primary school.

The phrase 'in my primary school level' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'in primary school' to indicate the educational stage. Also, 'learned' is correctly in past tense here.

× This time my parents encouraged me to music class and that's time I learned how to sing and how to play other instrument about music.

✓ At that time, my parents encouraged me to attend music class, and that's when I learned how to sing and how to play other musical instruments.

The phrase 'encouraged me to music class' is incorrect; it should be 'encouraged me to attend music class'. Also, 'that's time' should be 'that's when' to indicate the time. 'Other instrument about music' is awkward; 'other musical instruments' is the correct phrase.

× I usually prefer always listening on audiobook and also broadcast.

✓ I usually prefer always listening to audiobooks and broadcasts.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'to' when referring to listening. Also, 'audiobook' should be plural 'audiobooks' to match the context, and 'broadcast' should be plural 'broadcasts'.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to individual.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to individuals.

The word 'individual' should be plural 'individuals' to correctly refer to people in general.

× Most of the people feeling joy and joyful and they hear a song and they are always enjoy seeing like pop music and also folk music, traditional music.

✓ Most people feel joy and happiness when they hear songs, and they always enjoy listening to pop music, folk music, and traditional music.

The phrase 'Most of the people feeling joy and joyful' is incorrect; it should be 'Most people feel joy and happiness'. 'They are always enjoy seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'they always enjoy listening to'. Also, 'a song' should be plural 'songs' to generalize, and 'seeing' is incorrect in this context; 'listening to' is appropriate for music.