Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, nhưng bạn nên tránh lặp từ và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn hơn, tối đa 5 câu. Bạn có thể sử dụng các từ nối để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and forget about stressful things like school deadlines and future worries. Singing allows me to feel free and happy, which is why I enjoy it so much.

Sugerencia: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và phát âm, tránh lặp từ như "when when" và câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: To be honest, I tried to learn singing by myself, but when I reached high notes, my voice broke and I had a sore throat for three days. So, I found it quite challenging to improve on my own.

Sugerencia: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "my my singing". Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn, đồng thời dùng từ nối để liên kết ý.

Ejemplo: I usually sing only for myself because I feel anxious about how others might perceive me. Singing privately allows me to enjoy my voice without worrying about others' opinions.

Sugerencia: Bạn nên dùng từ chính xác hơn, ví dụ "genre" thay vì "gender" khi nói về thể loại nhạc. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên mạch lạc hơn với từ nối và cụ thể hơn về lý do tại sao âm nhạc mang lại hạnh phúc.

Ejemplo: I think singing can bring happiness depending on the genre of music people listen to. For example, upbeat songs often cheer people up and improve their mood after a bad day.

× Actually, I love to sing because when I sing, my spirit can wander away from the stressful thing in my life, such as the school deadlines or project assignments and anxiety about my future.

✓ Actually, I love to sing because when I sing, my spirit can wander away from stressful things in my life, such as school deadlines, project assignments, and anxiety about my future.

The phrase 'the stressful thing' is incorrect because 'thing' should be plural to match the list of multiple stressors. Also, articles before plural nouns are unnecessary here. Use 'stressful things' to refer to multiple stressors. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× To be honest, I used to try to learn how to sing by myself but when when I reach the high and high note, my voice suddenly broke and I experienced sore throat for three.

✓ To be honest, I used to try to learn how to sing by myself but when I reached the high and high note, my voice suddenly broke and I experienced a sore throat for three days.

The verb 'reach' should be in past tense 'reached' to match the past context indicated by 'used to'. Also, 'sore throat' needs an article 'a' and the duration 'for three' is incomplete; it should specify 'three days' for clarity.

× I'm extremely anxious about my image upon people so I never sing for anyone. I just sing for myself. Only me can enjoy my voice and how amazing my my singing is.

✓ I'm extremely anxious about my image in front of people so I never sing for anyone. I just sing for myself. Only I can enjoy my voice and how amazing my singing is.

The phrase 'my image upon people' is incorrect; 'in front of people' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'Only me' should be 'Only I' because it is the subject of the verb 'can enjoy'. Additionally, 'my my singing' has a repeated word; one 'my' should be removed.

× I'm extremely anxious about my image upon people so I never sing for anyone.

✓ I'm extremely anxious about my image in front of people so I never sing for anyone.

The preposition 'upon' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to express being observed by others is 'in front of'. This change makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× Only me can enjoy my voice and how amazing my my singing is.

✓ Only I can enjoy my voice and how amazing my singing is.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrect as the subject of the verb 'can enjoy'. The correct subject pronoun is 'I'. Also, the repeated 'my' before 'singing' is a typographical error and should be corrected.

× It depends on gender of music that people are listening to, but most of them usually cheer people off and lighten the listener mood after a bad day.

✓ It depends on the genre of music that people are listening to, but most of them usually cheer people up and lighten the listener's mood after a bad day.

The word 'gender' is incorrect; the correct term is 'genre' when referring to types of music. The phrase 'cheer people off' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'cheer people up'. Also, 'listener mood' needs a possessive form 'listener's mood' to be grammatically correct.